Metamorpha and Variation are the perfect brother and sister. They did everything together, but when their hive attacks Canterlot, their paths diverge. What does fate have in store for them? Where will they go? What will they do? Will they ever recover from their queen's poor choices?
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I think it is rather good, you should definitely continue writing. I couldn't write half as well as this at your age.
Very good for someone your age.
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I am already starting the 2nd chapter
Consider changing the adjective "everypony" to "everyling."
Other than that, awesome
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i was planning to make it something that both of the changelings wondered about later, but Iike your idea better, will change it soon. thanks for the feedback!
Rapid update is rapid.
2061721 I am having some kind of brain explosion. I figured that there is no point to sitting on finished chapters, so I am publishing them as I finish them.
Other than some minor spelling and punctuation issues, your writing is solid. I'm enjoying this fic.
I would like to thank everyone for all the likes, favorites, and follows! Chapter 4 is about halfway done and will be out soon. Also, I updated the cover art (my GIMP skills have greatly improved since the last one) enjoy!
edit: chapter four out now!
Minor typo:
Should be which.
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ah spellcheck, everyone best friend and worst enemy. Thanks for catching that one
Nicely done!
keep going please