Hiya everybody, I'm some gamer chick that reads a lot and is extremely inconsistent about when I sign on and off of this website, message me if you want a proofread of something and I'll do it maybe
Do Alicorns always possess wings and horns? Or are they born 'normal', like the others? Are they really normal, anyways?
Celestia, Luna, and Cadence might not have always been this way. They had to earn their true colors.
This is at a time when they're still fillies, so no confusion is aroused.
New characters will be added upon being introduced in the story, so um... derp.
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nice!
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Thanks!
Strawberry Pancake, I'm coming for you!
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You're so random, dude. 
I uh... uh... what?
So the Gods had to go on a certain quest to obtain their godhoods? THAT's AWESOME!!! Can you do one for each God/Goddess, Celestia, Luna, Discord and Cadence? I love this idea, very well thought of my friend
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YOU THERE. STOP LOOKING IN MY BRAIN. I was already thinking that stuff. They were all going to go on adventures.
ANYways, thanks!
2080502 NEVER!!!!!!!
And never a problem, hope you like my own stories if you ever have a chance to look them over
Celesita born an Earth Pony? Well you got my attention, I look forward to seeing where you got with this
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The idea just popped in my head randomly the other day. But anyways, glad to have some other people watching this.
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Some of them look really interesting!
I suppose I'll have to do that.
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Nothing wrong with that, I'm always interested in seeing how others think the Sisters ascended. Plus it is not all that often we see Celestia as a Earth Pony.
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You don't have to but it would mean a lot to a fellow author friend like me
And I'm honestly hoping you'll like them, some are a bit dark but I can't do rainbow and sunshine, not my area of writing
And thank you very much for the Watch
I gotta say, the premise is very interesting to me. I like it a lot.
I didn't see any obvious flaws with spelling or grammar, either. It was pretty well-written, so congrats on that part.
There were 2 things I wasn't a fan of. The first was the beginning. The way the chapter started, it felt like a continuing chapter, not the beginning of a story. At least, that's how I felt about it. You just need a better opening "hook" to grab a reader's attention better. The second thing was the last paragraph. I feel a little more could have been done. You know, "show, don't tell." Not necessarily the conversation, but the ending part, where Celly is tired, and Lou takes her to bed. Always better to see the interaction, than to be told it happened.
But besides those 2 things, it was a good starting to this story of yours. Keep up the good work!
btw, told you I'd provide feedback.
Is this your first story ever? if so, bravo! well, bravo anyway but that's not the point. well written, interesting premise, i'd like to see what you can do with this! best of luck!
I heard the call and went in to take a look. The idea is nice to have the 2 Regal Sisters, plus Cadence as a sister as well, as not only regular ponies, but as Earth Ponies. The idea sounds intriguing to say the least, liked the idea that you gave a doll to Celestia that's shaped as a phoenix, quite the foreshadowing of her upcoming indeed. I'll be looking forward to see the information about 'Holy Edict'.
Besides the introduction and ending of the prologue, the chapter is pretty nice, nice job Nyan_Cat
First pass: really well done, especially in the middle.
*Looks at date* 9 weeks, huh? any plans to continue this?
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Dear Celestia, it's been 9 weeks since an update?
Jeez.
I, uh... guess I need to hurry up on that.
Pretty short so far, obviously, but not a bad start.
My one quibble is that Cadence isn't meant to be Luna and Celestia's sister. The scenes of Twilight's childhood memories together show that Cadence really isn't very old, probably the same age as Shining Armor.
Great start!