• Member Since 16th Jun, 2012
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ChoccieWings


Derpy rules

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After a incedent where pinkie breaks the 4th wall, I get sucked into Equestria, and have to adapt to living as a pony, and make plenty of new friends. And play a hell lot of video games
I suggest reading ' Pinkie Pie Discovers A 3DS' First to get the back story of how I got to Equestria.
Massive thanks to editor Joy Stick, you'll probably figure out that he edited it in the story.

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Comments ( 14 )

Is criticism allowed? Also first:scootangel:

Premise is interesting, but it seems that you rushed it, still, this is accetable, keep it going

Hmmm.
Other than the paragraphing, it was well written, the beginning was rushed though.
Need an editor (or a Grammer Nazi such as I)?

Oh, yeah and HERE COME'S THE STORM FIC FINALLLY!

1995770 constructive criticism.

1997278 Yeah, the paragraphing was because I was on a different computer that didn't have internet, and all they had was notepad, and I had to click enter everytime I started a new paragraph. So that stuffed it up a little :raritydespair:

1998616
So, shall I be your editor if you like?

1998629
OK.
I have no idea how this editing things works. Do you email the story?
I hasn't the slightest of ideas. :unsuresweetie:

1998657 I have no idea either.
Lets just use email for now.

1998665
oki day.
PM? Or actual?

hyrulehistorian@gmail.com

Also: Permission to write out the part before Storm enters Equestria?

1998674 ummmmm..... actual? I dont even know what they mean :rainbowlaugh:
But you can write out that first part, and if anything extra needs to be added, I will do so afterwards :eeyup:

1998694
OK. Awaiting email.

Comment posted by ChoccieWings deleted Oct 21st, 2013

i loved the story so i left a like

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