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Twilight has invited her friends over for a sleepover, and things quickly turn to video games. Will they all succeed? Will they fail? Will they actually make it out of twilights without doing a rage quit? Find out in this fic!
Inspired by My Little Pwny and Rainbow Dash's Lets plays.
Cover art by Episkopi on DA
OC's made by Joy Stick and Dj Vinyl Scratch.
First fic, hope you enjoy!

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 93 )

First chapter :moustache: I hope you enjoy the fic :twilightsmile:

1078179 Not bad, don't know why people would dislike it. One thing though, you need to separate what the ponies say. After for example, Twilight's done talking, hit "Space" and "Tab" if you want somepony else to talk.

Concept is interesting but has several grammar errors, and suffers from 'wall of text' syndrome. Separate talking into different paragraphs and put in more descriptions of background and pony faces/actions.

1079495 Exactly, those are the only problems with it.

Might wanna give credit the artist who made that wallpaper. Episkopi on DA :heart:

it suffers from grammatical errors, but it is a good idea. i can edit if you need me to...:pinkiehappy:

"A gaming marathon at Twilight's?" said Joy Stick.

Joy Stick is a gamer stallion, with a 1970's joystick controller for a cutie mark. My OC.

"I'll bring my Play Stable 3 and GameColt Advance!" He yelled with glee.

Let's tally up the players....
Mane 6 (6)
Cutie Mark Crusaders (3)
Random Party Crashers (2 and literally :derpytongue2: )
11 gamers total. Not bad.

I sense Ponykart. :rainbowdetermined2:

Hang on. Let me bring my PC so I can own these mares at TP2! (Team Pony 2)
*five hours later*
Dayum. Can't believe how badly I lost. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_sad.png

Too short in between dialogue changes.

I just want to see who PWNS at the games and what games they will be playing hope to see more!@!!!!!!!!!! :moustache:

A well written opening. I've only seen one spelling error so far. keep it up.

Ooh, this looks good. The story does have some formating issues, like wall of text and grammar, but I like the concept. Tracking!

Ok, if anyone has ideas for any kind of video game, for anything, even internet flash games, post and i will try to work them in. So far got rayman raving rabbids (for fluttershy) Portal 2 (Twilight) and Scary maze game (Pinkie pie) So bring on the ideas :pinkiehappy:

1081150 Sonic Riders: Zero Gravity for RD

Also, I call 5:55 Faiz o' clock. Look up Kamen Rider Faiz for more infos

I sense some super smash bros, some mareio kart, and maybe some fighting games like UMvC3:pinkiehappy: this can only end well!

1081141
I was hoping you'd say that. :pinkiehappy:
Play Stable and GameColt are are copyrighted products of Blystone Industries (Joy Stick of FIMFiction, MegaBLYSTONE of Youtube)
Please give credit if you use those names.
Same with my OC if you were being serious. :moustache:

1081136

okay, contact me in a PM or something when you finish writing?

Well written, but PLEASE use a script format when writing dialogue!!!

It makes things far easier to read enjoy :pinkiehappy:

But otherwise you have a like, favorite, and a watch my good sir.

1081652 Yush, I am serious. I will give u credit:scootangel:

1081913 I was origianly doing script format but that would conflict with publishion rules :facehoof:

Working on Chapter 2 where Twilight plays Portal 2 :twilightsmile:

1082930
Here are a few names for games as well :scootangel:

Street Pony 2
Uncharted 3: Daring Do's Deception
Legend of Celestia: Marejora's Mask
Super Mareio Brothers
Maretroid Prime
Elder Scrolls 5: Skyrein
Call of Duty: Modern Warmare 2
Pac Mare

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My OC's personality is a cross between Pinkie and Twilight btw
Acts rather crazy and has a sunny mood. :pinkiehappy:
And is 100% nerd when the situation demands. (and by that i mean he is a know it all when it comes to games.) :twistnerd:

This is funny cause this also how I act in reality. :pinkiecrazy:

sorry for the wait, been a bit busy :twilightsheepish:

1111803 They could get freaked out by headcrabs :pinkiecrazy:

BATTLEPONY 3 FOR SCRATCH XD Cuz that's how she rolls (In a tank that is :) dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png or Dj hero dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl2.png because so pony's gunna win


And a suggestion for Derpy = Garrys mod ;) Oh and im loving this story so far keep up the good work.

Scratch outdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_shock.png

Oh and Oc suggestion of mine :) ....His name is Sulfex (his friends call him Sully or his stage name F3X-Trap) Haywire he is an alicorn but is the same height as everypony else he is a cross between rainbow dash,vinyl and Derpy because...

#1 he is a Hardcore gamer and 2nd most highest DJ in Equstria (Apprentice of vinyl).
#2 he is a funny happy Stallion who likes competition and has a good humour
and is a bit silly but a good friendly bubbly attitude.
#3 his cutie mark is a Vinyl disc with a red crosshair .
And he'll bring his AlienMare and his Pbox 125
If not,dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_sad.png im ok with that :) at least I tried still gunna be an awesome fic ill be back later dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png

1122714 thats a good OC. I'll work him in somehow :scootangel:

1122727>>1089668 Both your OC's are introduced in this chapter. Hope I got their personalities right. If not, back to editing! :rainbowdetermined2:

Just a chapter to introduce the 2 new OC's, made by Dj Vinyl Scratch and Joy Stick. Thanks for the help, guys! :twilightsmile:

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