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ChoccieWings


Derpy rules

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After one of Lyra's machine that was going to bring them to earth actually works, they are teleported onto 2fort, where they barley survive, but BLU team rescues them. They say they have to stop the invading RED team, which are invading battlements all over the world. And it seems that every pony is more than happy to help.

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New fic is out! hope you like
There was a delay for getting this out because i was busy, but here it is! I am planing to go thru every battlement in the game, the offical ones, that is, and maybe some user created maps. But I think doing surf and Jump may be hard :derpyderp2: and sorry about the weird ending for chapter. chapter 2 (may) be out in around a week, but may be a bit shorter. Stay Tuned!
Choccie Wings

A bit rushed but it has promise lad!

This'll be interesting...
lol I think you called Ditzy a 'him'.

"I hate to say this Lyra, but this might work!" Said Rainbow Dash!" there is no need for the " after the !
I can see your story going places but it would be a wise choose to ask for a proofreader :pinkiehappy:

You need to improve on your grammar and capitalization.
Other than that, great!
+1 like for you.

first off... Saxton Hale can NOT be a brony for two reasons: one, that show is typically rendered around peace, harmony and happiness; Saxton Hale beats the living hell out of hippies, and two; unless he has changed his persona a little bit he wouldn't reveal that to certain members of the team unless he was doing so while beating up a 500 pound gorilla in front of the camera

1282570 it's sort of always in TF2/pony fics:derpytongue2:

1282186 Thanks :pinkiehappy:
1282384 I'll improve in editing. and thanks for like :yay:
1282282 :facehoof: you can if you want?
1282195 :facehoof: will fix!

Gotta read this later!
I LOVE TF2 AND PONIES!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

1282694 sorry mate but i can't I'm a writer myself and through the comments I found an amzing proof reader. i suggest you ask in your next chapter for a proofreader! :pinkiehappy:

Forgive me if I'm wrong, but doesn't Red normally defend the points (Assuming its control points) from Blu?

1285059 They are trying to take over, as in control every facility. So lets say that they switched roles. Try and explain it more in next chapter :twilightblush:

must read more need new chapter

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