• Published 10th Dec 2012
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Prepping For School - Charles Wolfe



A pony (or two) getting ready for school

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Getting Ready

"DINKY! SCOOTY! WAKEY!" Derpy Hooves shouted as she flies backwards up the stairs where her two children sleep.

Dinky Hooves pops right out of bed and goes to the bathroom to freshen up while Scootaloo lays on her bed, trying to go back to sleep.

"Five more minutes!" she cries.

"Sorry Scooty, but you gotta get up! School's an important part of your edumacation!" Derpy replies.

"It's EDUCATION Mom, not eduMAcation." Scoot yells as her mother lands in the room.

"See? Schools teaching you and making you smart!"

Angry, the orange Pegasus shifts the covers further up and covers her ears. Derpy trots over and tosses them from the bed. She lifts up her daughter by the wings with her teeth, much to the protest of the filly.

"Hey! Put me down! That hurts!" she squeals.

"Are you going to get up then?" he mother asks with a smug smile on her face.

A nod and Scootaloo drops to the floor. She bounces up and dashes to the bathroom with her sister. They brush their teeth and brush their manes.

"Why is Mom so crazy about school? What's so important about three plus three? How does that help me when I'm flying with the Wonderbolts?" Scoot asks her sister.

"I dunno. I think it's so you know how many degrees to place your wings to get the most efficient drag-lift ratio. I know that angling you wings about twelve degrees upward will give you more then triple the lift you get with them at ten degrees." Dinky answers.

The look on the wannabe is one of pure astonishment and awe. She looks at her sister with both respect and jealousy. For a moment she thinks Ranbow Dash, the one she looks up to more than her mother, told her that.

I bet Rainbow Dash told her all of that! But if she told her, why wouldn't she tell me? Maybe it was Twilight. She's such an egghead... Scotaloo mutters in her head.

"Who told you that?" she asks out loud.

"Nopony. I figured it out because Miss Cherilee told me all about numbers and stuff. If you take the drag constant of twelve point six and multiply it by the coefficient of lift, which it thirteen point nine nine two, you can find out how much power it takes to get an instant liftoff. Instead of the lift coefficient, multiply by the lift contstant and now you know how much it takes to sustain a straight flight. Then there's my favorite, calculating Boom speeds. If you wanted to do a Sonic Rainboom like Ranbow Dash, you would have to take the weight of the pony, multiply it by the air humidity and divide by the distance you want to reach it in. Then you facor in the lift and drag constants before finding the square root of the whole equation."

Dinky starts to weave back and forth, feeling light-headed. She takes several deep breaths before returning to normal. He sister stares at her with a face of too many expressions to distinguish any of them. Dinky pays no attention as she starts searching for her bag and supplies.

"Hold up! How do you know all of that? Who told you?" Scooty sqeals, running after her sister.

Thier mother looks at the two of them, wondering what has been going on. She doesn't stay to find out as the oven dings.

"MUFFINS!" she screams as she flies down the stairs.

When they are alone, Dinky speaks.

"I didn't get taught it, I learned it by my own. I was just thinking one day how you could figure out the speed to do a Sonic Rainboom and started fooling around with numbers. I even learned about something called a 'Sonic Nightboom'. It's when you fly faster than the speed of light. So far, nopony can do that, not even Celestia! I mean Princess Celestia...."

"You actually were thinking? I didn't know you could do that!" Scootaloo shouts.

"I didn't either!" replies Dinky, not noticing what was actually meant.

"Wow. You are just so....ugh! I just don't get you!"

"You're silly sis."

"What in the name of Celestia? I...."

Scootaloo stops talking as she picks up colored pencils, crayons, and glue from the floor. She stuffs them in her bag and clops down the stairs, her clumsy sister still looking for stuff.

"Where's my glitter? And my bubbles?" she wonders aloud.

She rummages about, tossing everything out of the way as she looks. She finds the stuff and puts it in her bag, walking down the stairs.

"Make sure you eat before you go!" Derpy shouts as she leaves the kitchen with Scootaloo in tow.

The walk over and grab muffins from the tray on the counter and munch them slowly.

"Blueberry!" Dinky shouts in glee.

"I know they're your favorite! I made 'em special just for you two!" Derpy squeals back.

Dinky hugs her mother as she finishes her muffin.

"That was so yummy!"

"Thanks Dinky Winky!"

"Yeah, it was delicious," Scootaloo grunts. "It was the best thing I've ever tasted."

"Really? Thanks Scooty! I love you both!"

"Yeah Mom, love you too."

"I love you too Mom!" Dinky shouts, hugging her mom tighter.

"I packed your lunches, they're on the counter over there!" she says, pointing to two brown bags.

"Oh goody!" Scoot says sarcastically.

"I know!" Dinky and Derpy say, not even hearing the tone.

Scootaloo sighs as she finishes her muffin. She grabs her saddlebag and walks outside. Her sister and mother follow.

"Bye, my little muffins! Have a nice day at school!" Derpy shouts as they walk away.

"Bye Mama!" Dinky shouts back.

"Yeah...bye mom," Scootaloo groans.

The two young fillies walk off into the sunrise, making their way to school.

Author's Note:

Report all spelling and grammar mistakes to me in a comment or PM. I will adjust at the soonest time possible.

Comments ( 83 )

inb4 Redigar. *trollface* :trollestia:

Comment posted by Tachyon Xenophile deleted Dec 10th, 2012

1777089 Fixed. Along with the other error.

1777212 Sorry about the double post. Deleted second version.

A short Slice Of Life fic in which two little fillies get ready for school with the help of thier mother.

I'm no grammar expert, but the way I would write that is: A short Slice of in which two little fillies get ready for school with the help of their mother.

Derpy Hooves shouted as she flew backwards up the stairs where her two children slept. Dinky Hooves pops right out of bed and goes to the bathroom to freshen up wile Scootaloo lays on her bed, trying to go back to sleep.

See the tense change? Wile is also while.

"Sorry, Scooty, but you gotta get up! School's an important part of your edumatcation!" Derpy replies.
"It's EDUCATION Mom, not eduMAcation."

You go from eduMATcation to eduMAcation, "Sorry, Scooty, but" flows better as "Sorry Scooty, but"

Angered, the orange Pegasus shift the covers further up and covers her ears.

Once again, one of these tenses is not like the other. Also, shift should be shifts.

thier teeth and brush thier manes.

their and their, you either need to try auto-corrections, self-corrections, or getting an editor. Most of these mistakes are too easy to see and easy to fix too, if English isn't your first language then finding ways to correct these things seems like good practice.

Even more corrections, yay.

I bet you Rainbow Dash told her all of that... Scootaloo says in her mind.

Ermmm... Who is this you you speak of? Unless Scootaloo has an imaginary friend, in which case you could have mentioned it. Also, "says in her mind" is tricky, you can't exactly say thought because I'm (at least 70%) sure that thought can't be used in present tense, and thinks also sounds silly. I don't know why you even went with present tense when past tense would have flowed better in this story anyways, but I've never even written (wrote?) anything so I'm no expert.

twelve degrees upward will give you more then triple

Watch your then's and than's.

Also, your lift equation is... What? If it was meant to be confusing then it succeeded, but if you were meant to understand anything other than a few jumbled words then you failed. I guess I'll be the first person to thumbs down on this story, not really sorry about it.

Also, I'm pretty sure a "Nightboom" is the same thing as a "Rainboom" except without a rainbow mane, but that's up for debate.

I would give you points for originality with the whole Scootaloo thing, but it's been done once or twice (still pretty original, mind you) and the way you wrote Derpy was the plastic-mold-dumb-blond-muffin-loving way a lot of other people have done it, and Dinky was the same-small-silly-smartypants she's usually portrayed as. Not that I could ever hate Dinky. :twilightsmile:

Great! Fav'd and up'voted. Seriously, this is awesome! It's not a fail like my first story!
Okay, just some, er, suggestions?: Try to, um, describe more instead of letting them talk; like for example you could describe how Scootaloo's related to Derpy and Dinky, or maybe how she feels about it. That's...uh....it. But whatever you want is fine...:fluttershysad:
Wuv the cover pic and title! You're gonna do great on this!

1778022 Well I'm not proud of my first fanfic either but in all honesty I don't think lots of us expect our first fanfic to be really good, it's sort of a trial and error process. :eeyup:

This is... this is actually pretty good.
Good character for Dinky, smarter than she looks.

two possible errors that I didn't see pointed out.

"Nopony. I figured it out because Miss Cherille

Is spelt Cherilee or Cheerilee

Instead of the life coefficient, multiply by thelife contstant and now you know how much it takes to sustain a straight flight.

Should life be lift?

1780443 I kept typing "life" and was getting so annoyed that I really just stopped all editing. And I know how Cherilee is spelt, just so freaking annoying when the keyboard won't type right!
1777537 Thanks, I'll be editing.

1777537 Nightboom is exactly what it says; traveling faster than the speed of light, which I and I alone can do. I don't know why I'm going to say this but..CAN'T TOUCH THIS! Back to the explaination: the Rainboom is whatever Dashie does and the Nightboom is what I do. As for Dinky's explination, it was supposed to be confusing and make no sense. Although, there is a way to calculate stuff like that.....

1781116

Eeeermmm... Oook then? I'm pretty sure the only difference between "your" boom and "Dashie's" boom is that Dash splits it, and you (presumably) just turn invisible, but there's really no point to an argument about it.

1782871 If you want more details on the Nightboom, just ask, I'm willing to tell you exactly what happens.

1782887
I don't really need a full blown explanation on it, going "faster than the speed of light" is enough, but thanks for the offer.

1782906 Okay then. Suit yourself.
1782909 Nu-uh!

I'm sorry if I hurt your feelings...

1782980 You didn't! I'm the one who's sorry.

1782985 *Derpy walks by and gives you a muffiin then leaves* It's okay...and are you gonna eat that muffin?

1783011 Nah, not thanks.

Two mistakes.

The walk over and grab muffins from the tray on the counter ans munch them slowly.

"Ans" should be "and."

The two young fillies walk off into the sunrise, making thier way to school.

"thier" should be "their." You got the I and E mixed up.

1787611 Thanks, I'll take care of them.

1787465 Yep! *pushes muffin towards you* Why don't you have it, and eat it for me?

1788979 Okay. *eats muffins* You're so cute, you know that Wishes?

1789037 Hm....let me think about that :trixieshiftright: ....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................hmmm..................................................................................................Nnope :eeyup:

1789052 How didn't you know?

1789057 Well cuz in real life I think I'm super ugly....even though other people don't think so of me.

1789080 You should never think such things! Ever! Noone should ever feel ugly!

1789085 I mean outside not inside; but otherwise, yeah, I think of me as not exceptionally beautiful.

1789096 You should not say that! Never! It doesn't matter your looks anyway! One one thing matters: what you look like inside. I look like a stomach, liver, 2 kidneys, small and large intestine, pancreas, esophogus and more stuff; how about you?

1789111 You're totally awesome you can't possibly be like that!

1789221 Okay, fine, I'll say I'm possibly pretty, possibly, if you agree to say you're totally awesome.

1789233 No, say you are beautiful and I'll say I'm kinda cool.

1789242 You're super cool.

1789265 I'll say I'm super cool if you say you are absolutely beautiful. I've seen pics of you so I know what I'm talking about.

1789269 Or....have you?

1789271 I have. With glasses.

1789277 :twilightoops: Uh....if you want to, I could actually send a pic to u...

1789284 No need. I have already seen you...I might pass out if I look again because you are SO CUTE! YOU ARE JUST AS CUTE AS FLUTTTERSHY!

1789290 ...I...wait did u see it on my Deviantart?

1789363 :twilightangry2: She figured me out! Yes...I did.

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