In this alternate dimension, the land of Equestria is a dark and dangerous place filled with humans! Follow the adventures of the brave heroes who are the equivalent of the Mane six on their quest to restore balance and order to this strange and wonderful land through the power of brotherhood!
*note* I am just a little unhappy with how this story turned out, but I have no doubt that there is someone who could make a much better version. That said, if you can build off of the premise then I give you my blessing to retell this story however you want.
Chapters (12)
Well.
This is promising.
dat cover
1703570 damnit Regidar!
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Might wanna space between paragraphs.
Other than that, keep go, bro.
Faved and liked, expecting moar in the near future...
Here, have some cake dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_cake.png
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First again? That's more like it! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png
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You gais.
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Dude, you are everywhere.
1703695 Get over it.
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but, whatever...
1704091 Can't excuse what never had manners...
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Interesting start. I keep tying to wrap my head around some of the horse-pun names in a world devoid of Pony; it hasn't reconciled yet. Otherwise, some basically solid imagery here and a pretty good physical drawing of your two principals. I find myself wanting to have gotten more deeply into Jack's mind; in a more realistic high fantasy universe where we are concerned about practical matters, asking the sole proprietor of a working farm to abandon it for a few days is a bit of an issue, and since looking at the basic Pony world through this very lens seems to be your goal, I would have liked to see at least a moment of ambivalence. Also, what is Jack, a peasant farmer, doing with a sword, pretty exclusively a killing tool of upper-class knights and trained soldiers? There's a good story-flavor opportunity there that could be capitalized on.
Keep it up! Oh, and, source on your title picture, please? It's very pretty, and I'd like to see it in higher res.
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As for the pic, I literally just googled "human ponies " and that was the only one I found of male mane six.
I'll find the artist if I can.
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Much obliged.
Sweet! Can't wait to see the others!
Also, Pinkie most definitely has to double wield kitchen knifes... It is a must.
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I was thinking more along the lines of a flail.
Kind of like the balloon themed weapon I could think of.
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i think you meant "which"
but besides that, it's great story
isn't it "full breath" ?
but the story?
this, i like
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Well i found one teeny mistake but it's no biggie
Missing an h in with.
But keep the story running!
I want to thank all yoos guyses for giving me such support!
It means a lot, and will hopefully propel me towards my overall goal of making it on the front page of Equestria Daily!
I'm not sure why, but the flail definitely fits pinkie in a strange way I wouldn't have thought before... It is scary in its own way.
Can't wait till the next chapter dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Sweetie_happy.png
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I tried to chose a weapon that fits each character. Pippin gets a flail because it's unpredictable and hard to control.
Shit just got real... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
This story is good, really
I'd like to see spike a lot more though.
You and your fancy magic mathematics. Magimatics? Mathemagics?
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Thaumology
If you would like to know more, I'm writing an instruction book that thoroughly explains all about Magic and Thaumology from a pony's perspective!
Just look on my page!
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When will that be finished up? Also, I've been reading your comments throughout. I'm honestly surprised at how much thought you seem to putting into this, this kind of work usually only is associated with the 'big shot' fics, so color me impressed. I'm liking this so far, keep it up.
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Honestly, I pretty much make it all up as I go along. I know of some writers that make elaborate story-continuum -lines and such, but I usually just thread the pieces together as they appear magically in the loom of my thoughts. But overall when I write, I just take the best aspects of all the authors that I've read and amalgamate a style that fits me. So in a away, everything I read increases my writing ability.
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That works too! As long as it's coherent and non-contradictory, it doesn't really matter where it comes from! Hell, it doesn't even have to adhere to that, just look at any long-running Marvel or DC comic series! Actually, all that really matters is that your inspiration is just that: inspiration, rather than straight-up plagiarism.
BRING IT ON!!!
Can't wait till the next chapter
Proceed
I'm now working on another story as well as this one, so if you are bored waiting for this one to update, you can check it my other ones on my user page!
Yeah, first.
So who won the drinking contest?
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If I recall, the Ruffian's leader, or Derrik, was passed out on the floor, while Pippin was still sound enough to dance on tables. Who won? YOU decide.
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That is a clear win for Pippin, as it should be for a Pinkie character.
Shit has definitely gone down and first
This was great, it reminded me a bit of my adventuring days against the blackwold brigands in LOTRO... Damn, those were fun raids...
Oh my... Shit just got real
Epicness inbound, I can tell! 
This was a good read so far. Though judging by everything, I'm assuming it's a dead fic. RIP in piece.