EXCUSE MY IGNORANCE BUT LEAVE ME THIS CHAPTER WITH FACE
ONLY PARTS OF PHILOSOPHY
FOR EVERYTHING ELSE IS GOOD CONVERSATION THAT IS ME NU ENCNTO Amethyst LITTLE GRUMPY and bitter BERRY BERRY BUT SHE IS JUST A MARTIAL ARTIST THAT SURPRISED ME SHE HAS SOME PROBLEMS WITH MARE?? OR WAS THAT JUST misunderstood
That was something I didn't expect a sequel chapter to this story I thought it was a one shot. But still it's interesting to see how the other ponies respond to Lero.
3729464 It was. I decided to add this one to it instead of making it a new story.
3729978 Yep. It seemed fitting for Lyra. Admittedly, the idea for the scene came from Mick Farren's Necrom.
3731977 Thank you for the corrections. I can't BELIEVE I wrote "sifter" through the whole thing. Yikes.
3730903 She doesn't have problems with a mare, though she is a troublemaker.
3732108 Unless I misunderstand you, Berry Punch's mantra was lifted from Hemingway's A Clean, Well-Lighted Place, and landed straight in her brain. She doesn't know that, of course. Either way, it wasn't my attempt at making sacrilege of the Lord's Prayer.
Thanks to everyone else for your comments. I'm working on future chapters, and I hope you all will enjoy them as well. Here's a picture by Gashiboka, which is where I got the idea of Berry Punch being a Drunken Hoof master. derpicdn.net/img/2013/8/30/414325/large.png
Nice job of showing the alien nature of Lero from the common pony's perspective. Several perspectives, actually. I'm very happy to see this has become a compilation, and I look forward to more.
Also, I have to wonder whether this old post I made in the Xeno forum had anything to do with this chapter.
Nice chapter. The name 'Red Harvest' connected to pegasus pony aroused my suspicion but tommy gun cutie mark confirmed it. Someone has to write his story, especially how he got his cutie mark One last thing, Drunken Master class (Grandmaster) FTW!
Well done! Dash with a thing for stallions in uniform and Twilight having a dream about 'performing' in front of Luna and Celestia in particular made me laugh.
I loved the way you wrote both of these stories (chapters?), concentrating on the different perspectives of everyone in them as you did. Reading this was a real pleasure.
I wasn't accusing you of riffing on the Lord's Prayer; my comment was referring to an old joke:
A couple of travelers passed by an open field where a meeting was taking place. The people gathered before an altar said prayers to 'The Great Nullity', and on either side of the altar were two banners; one had a '0' while the other had 'Nada' on it. One traveler asked his companion "Is Nothing sacred?"
This was a very good story/chapter/thing and I really liked how smoothly you covered so many different aspects of the world in so little time, although I am definitely wondering what is going on with Red Harvest's Tommy Gun mark. There has got to be an interesting story behind that one, and I would like to see what it is.
More milking of this universe. Now a different version where twilight is a princess. I love it! I remember that in some other story from another author Dash had a nightmare of the future, she was sharing the bed with a celestia sized princess twilight, woke up in the middle of the night to find that Lero and Lyra where both long dead and she was old. Then she really woke up and felt sad for the dream.
3732431 I think he meant in the literal sense that 'nothing' as a concept was the genesis of Berry Punch's mantra, usually considered a semi-religious and spiritual thing.
Ahhh… Great stuff. There's some pretty funny stuff going on in there. I thought the scene at the bar tavern where Red Harvest talked about his attraction toward Lero was good. If I told you all the stuff I liked though, I just end up writing a summary of the chapter.
The Steam Donkey had been in the same spot since Ponyville’s pioneer days, and while it had never been the classiest of places (even less so now that tea houses were the pony public’s gathering of choice), the clientele were not bothered by its reputation.
The Steam Donkey had been in the same spot since Ponyville’s pioneer days, and while it had never been the classiest of places (even less so now that tea houses were the pony public’s gathering place of choice), the clientele were not bothered by its reputation.
Lero’s arm pulled around Lyra’s upper barrel, and let he let his hand be caught in her hooves.
Lero’s arm pulled around Lyra’s upper barrel, and he let his hand be caught in her hooves.
Barry Punch and Amethyst traveled down the alley toward Amethyst’s house.
Berry Punch and Amethyst traveled down the alley toward Amethyst’s house.
I almost literally peed myself laughing at that. Probably shouldn't have held it til I was finished the story.
Bravo. A fantastic effort. I would love to hear more about Red Harvest, the human loving, gun toting pegasus. Or at least maybe a tiny chapter where Lero tells him that his abstract cutie mark ain't that abstract. That would be VERY interesting. The thing that defines yourself as a pony and signifies what is unique and special about you is from an alien dimension!
Due to the unexpected interest in Red Harvest, I'm working on an interlude chapter about how he got his cutie mark. Predictably, it will be a ponified, schoolyard parody of Dashiell Hammett's Red Harvest. It'll be posted at the same time as a "normal" chapter of this story.
Spoiler concerning his cutie mark: Red Harvest knows that his special talent is "manipulating factions and individuals against each other". This fills him with guilt, because he loves the values of harmony.
I really want to know what happens with Berry and how she got Our Father as a mantra, as well as the opening line for the Hail Marry. In fact, with the order given, she's basically starting a rosary.
Berry Punch, Rock Lee & Jackie Chan in a 3 way drunken fist grudge match (if drunken fist masters are even able to hold grudges?) Lets make it happen! Also a tommy gun cutie mark? That's foreboding...
3732431 After this chapter, I think Berry Punch being a Drunken Master makes all too much sense. I guess I got a new headcanon. "It's not public intoxication, Officer...I'm practicing my art." * Hic *
Amethyst really needs to do something about that attitude. Not as racist as Honeydew, but sheesh mare, does your breakfast consist of lemons?
I thought this was a one shot?
I see someone did some research on tantra.
EXCUSE MY IGNORANCE BUT LEAVE ME THIS CHAPTER WITH FACE
ONLY PARTS OF PHILOSOPHY
FOR EVERYTHING ELSE IS GOOD CONVERSATION THAT IS ME NU ENCNTO Amethyst LITTLE GRUMPY and bitter BERRY BERRY BUT SHE IS JUST A MARTIAL ARTIST THAT SURPRISED ME SHE HAS SOME PROBLEMS WITH MARE?? OR WAS THAT JUST misunderstood
GOOD STORY
That was something I didn't expect a sequel chapter to this story I thought it was a one shot. But still it's interesting to see how the other ponies respond to Lero.
Welp, that was fun.
"snifter", not "sifter".
"heard"
So, I guess nothing really IS sacred in this fic.
Gets my thumbs up.
3729464
It was. I decided to add this one to it instead of making it a new story.
3729978
Yep. It seemed fitting for Lyra. Admittedly, the idea for the scene came from Mick Farren's Necrom.
3731977
Thank you for the corrections. I can't BELIEVE I wrote "sifter" through the whole thing. Yikes.
3730903
She doesn't have problems with a mare, though she is a troublemaker.
3732108
Unless I misunderstand you, Berry Punch's mantra was lifted from Hemingway's A Clean, Well-Lighted Place, and landed straight in her brain. She doesn't know that, of course. Either way, it wasn't my attempt at making sacrilege of the Lord's Prayer.
Thanks to everyone else for your comments. I'm working on future chapters, and I hope you all will enjoy them as well. Here's a picture by Gashiboka, which is where I got the idea of Berry Punch being a Drunken Hoof master.
derpicdn.net/img/2013/8/30/414325/large.png
Nice job of showing the alien nature of Lero from the common pony's perspective. Several perspectives, actually. I'm very happy to see this has become a compilation, and I look forward to more.
Also, I have to wonder whether this old post I made in the Xeno forum had anything to do with this chapter.
Nice chapter. The name 'Red Harvest' connected to pegasus pony aroused my suspicion but tommy gun cutie mark confirmed it. Someone has to write his story, especially how he got his cutie mark
One last thing, Drunken Master class (Grandmaster) FTW!
Hah. He have a tommy gun cutie mark and don't even know what it is :D No pony know. Interesting.
I really liked the description of what Lyra enjoyed and why. It makes a lot of sense that she would like the act of intimacy.
3732431
Still nicely done.
I especially liked
3729316
Its kinda funny how she ridicules RD, Twilight and Lyra for having to "settle" with an ape, while Lero is giving his herd the best sex in town.
Well done! Dash with a thing for stallions in uniform and Twilight having a dream about 'performing' in front of Luna and Celestia in particular made me laugh.
This chapter brought so many feelings through out the story.
Irritance at one of my first favorite background ponies amethyst star, laughed at pinkies little meeting with lero.
Curiosity at the slight connection towards lero and berry punch and Im wondering if that will expand at all.
Anywho it really is strange and very interesting on how a sapient equine would view a human being physically.
Hope theres more soon. ^^
I loved the way you wrote both of these stories (chapters?), concentrating on the different perspectives of everyone in them as you did. Reading this was a real pleasure.
3732431
I wasn't accusing you of riffing on the Lord's Prayer; my comment was referring to an old joke:
A couple of travelers passed by an open field where a meeting was taking place. The people gathered before an altar said prayers to 'The Great Nullity', and on either side of the altar were two banners; one had a '0' while the other had 'Nada' on it. One traveler asked his companion "Is Nothing sacred?"
I snorted Pepsi out of my nose at that line. It burns.
This was a very good story/chapter/thing and I really liked how smoothly you covered so many different aspects of the world in so little time, although I am definitely wondering what is going on with Red Harvest's Tommy Gun mark. There has got to be an interesting story behind that one, and I would like to see what it is.
3732431
So, is this nada to become a nada of nadas?
More milking of this universe. Now a different version where twilight is a princess. I love it!
I remember that in some other story from another author Dash had a nightmare of the future, she was sharing the bed with a celestia sized princess twilight, woke up in the middle of the night to find that Lero and Lyra where both long dead and she was old. Then she really woke up and felt sad for the dream.
3737109
You're thinking of "Living the Dream" from the other Side Stories collection. It's actually written by AnonAuthor, who did the original story.
3732431
I think he meant in the literal sense that 'nothing' as a concept was the genesis of Berry Punch's mantra, usually considered a semi-religious and spiritual thing.
Does Red Harvest appear in any other stories?
3734885
I haven't heard that joke before. Thanks for sharing it.
3747784
I never wrote about him before. I just did a search for "Red Harvest", and it looks like two other stories have a character with that name.
I didn't expect this interest over a character I wrote as a throw-away gag.
Ahhh… Great stuff. There's some pretty funny stuff going on in there. I thought the scene at the
bartavern where Red Harvest talked about his attraction toward Lero was good. If I told you all the stuff I liked though, I just end up writing a summary of the chapter.The Steam Donkey had been in the same spot since Ponyville’s pioneer days, and while it had never been the classiest of places (even less so now that tea houses were the pony public’s gathering place of choice), the clientele were not bothered by its reputation.
Lero’s arm pulled around Lyra’s upper barrel, and he let his hand be caught in her hooves.
Berry Punch and Amethyst traveled down the alley toward Amethyst’s house.
3749226
Well, the tommy gun is intriguing, and for some reason I found him very interesting. Can't quite put my finger on why.
I broke down laughing when I read this.
Alexander, presumably. Nice one, particularly in a universe practically built around a terrible Greek joke.
You broke my brain. I spent at least a minute just staring at that sentence. Odd assortment of rectangles... black... well dammit.
btw, I spotted a "Twilght" in there. Might wanna fix that
I almost literally peed myself laughing at that. Probably shouldn't have held it til I was finished the story.
Bravo. A fantastic effort. I would love to hear more about Red Harvest, the human loving, gun toting pegasus. Or at least maybe a tiny chapter where Lero tells him that his abstract cutie mark ain't that abstract. That would be VERY interesting. The thing that defines yourself as a pony and signifies what is unique and special about you is from an alien dimension!
3837969
Thank you for your comment.
Due to the unexpected interest in Red Harvest, I'm working on an interlude chapter about how he got his cutie mark. Predictably, it will be a ponified, schoolyard parody of Dashiell Hammett's Red Harvest. It'll be posted at the same time as a "normal" chapter of this story.
Spoiler concerning his cutie mark: Red Harvest knows that his special talent is "manipulating factions and individuals against each other". This fills him with guilt, because he loves the values of harmony.
That sounds friggin' awesome!
3733790 Its funny when you also think that Lero is in a herd with the strongest and most dangerous mares in ponyville, and Equestria
I really want to know what happens with Berry and how she got Our Father as a mantra, as well as the opening line for the Hail Marry. In fact, with the order given, she's basically starting a rosary.
I love drunken master Berry Punch!
Berry Punch, Rock Lee & Jackie Chan in a 3 way drunken fist grudge match (if drunken fist masters are even able to hold grudges?) Lets make it happen!
Also a tommy gun cutie mark? That's foreboding...
About time! I've wanted a good lyra scene!
4225518 especially with a name like Red Harvest...
*encased
Sounds like Berry is the tougher of the two.
Missing quote marks.
This is not a proper sentence.
Berry is currently being That Guy.
Secret thoughts like "I wish you tasted better," and "how dare you be empty right now."
Celestia is laughing at your embarrassment, Luna. And I probably would have too.
Berry, you voyeur!
I honestly can't tell if Berry is insane or trolling.
He's visiting from Detrot, isn't he?
Yes, Lero, she's all wet for you.
Berry Punch is hilarious.
And Lero is a lucky lucky bastard!
3732431
After this chapter, I think Berry Punch being a Drunken Master makes all too much sense. I guess I got a new headcanon.
"It's not public intoxication, Officer...I'm practicing my art." * Hic *