• Member Since 12th Feb, 2012
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Face on Fire!!


MY FACE IS ON FIRE!!

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Princess Celestia summons the Mane 6 to track down a powerful sword that could spell the end of Equestria. Meanwhile, a young fencing prodigy uncovers an unknown relic in his fathers collection...

Humanized, but with wings and horns (if that makes any sense).
This is going to be edited by my friend, Tactical Bacon.
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Tactical%20Bacon

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 2 )

I don't get bothered by humanized ponies stories.
the horns barely make sense, but they make it.:eeyup:

Your idea is good, but, again, just like other's first stories, you need to add PACE, don't rush the things, build up.:applejackunsure:

Also, there are some plotholes, that, well, you need to fill, like: how does Celestia know that this Sabre guy has the Discord sword?:derpyderp1:

this has potential, I hope your editor helps you to improve this because this story, it promises

and finally DON'T EVER MAKE CHAPTERS LESS THAN 1000 WORDS!

1592783 There's a problem with short chapters?

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