TAG-TEAM FICTION

This story has been marked as having adult content. Please click below to confirm you are of legal age to view adult material in your country.

Confirm

Comments ( 9 )

Viewing 1 - 50 of 9
- Newest First
- Oldest First

Axel Nyan

Axel Nyan #1 · Oct 11th, 2012 · · · Chapter The End ·

Hm... interesting.. might give it a go..

Axel Nyan

Axel Nyan #2 · Oct 11th, 2012 · · · Chapter Epilogue ·

SO! Here's your official review by yours truly! Quick note:

Red means spelling error.
Blue means punctuation error.
Brown means capitalization error.
Orange means tense error.
Green means personal note.
I will put asterisk's (*) next to each error so you my see where it is.

"Okay what the hell happened.* I go* to sleep on the goddamn* couch*Uh... Just a note. I think you may have missed some words here. Read this again. That is, read your story again.* when I wake up, get ready to go out ,and find out that our house has transported out of the city onto an open pasture” said Chris.

So yeah. Mistakes like these found in the FIRST LINE OF DIALOGUE. I suggest giving your fic the once over. You know, read it again, fix errors that pop out as you go.

~Axel Nyan, One of TWE's many Official Reviewers, Resident Stalker, Friendly Proof-reader/Editor, Neutral Brony, D'aww Creater, and Enthusiastic Mexican't.

Rainbow_Dashtruction

Rainbow_Dashtruction #3 · Oct 11th, 2012 · · · Chapter Epilogue ·

*Jeremy sighs and proceeds to walk with Chris following*
The two walk through the forest for a couple of minute before they find a village

Wait, so if you were gonna make it like a chat site and put astrixs for things, why did you suddenly switch to regular type?! Which btw had grammar errors. You wern't kidding about 1AM.

AkTourettes95