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The Royal Newbie

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Scarlet was adopted by the two princesses of Equestria. She was found in the castle garden without any explanations, so the two princesses took the young pony under their wings. After a few years of living in the castle, she still manages to find ways to be clumsy.

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616e6f6e

616e6f6e #1 · March 28th · · · One early morning ·

"Yes. Don't get me wrong, you are a stronge filly [...]

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Found this fic by accident, since nobody bothered to point it out yet. There are so many I I I I I I'es in this story it might be an eyesore for more picky readers. While you should not avoid saying " I " like a plague, you could try to cut it down by ten or twenty percent.
Please do not take it personally. Even if you don't change a thing there but keep writting new chapters people will look the other way at any mistakes if you make them and keep reading for entertainment value alone.

Looking forward for more.

LeJugePoney

LeJugePoney #2 · March 28th · 1 · · One early morning ·

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Oh thanks for the corrections, you see, English is not my first language (I'm French). So I'm grateful that you point out my mistakes so I don't make them in the future.

So thank you for that, and I hope you enjoyed reading it ! 😭😭

616e6f6e

616e6f6e #3 · March 28th · · · One early morning ·

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English isn't my native language either. Your writing overall is better than mine so I was unable to register anything else that was in need of corrections. You are doing well so far.
I did.

LeJugePoney

LeJugePoney #4 · March 28th · · · One early morning ·

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I see, in any case thank you for the advice once again, and thank you for taking the time to read,
I'm already working on the next chapter. :)