While useing a teleport spell the mane 6 find themselves in a tropical island resort that got hit by a zombie outbreak.
Can they survive with friendship? Or end up zompony?
Dead Island / MLP Crossover
Rights to their owners.
“The difficulty lies not so much in developing new ideas as in escaping from old ones.”
While useing a teleport spell the mane 6 find themselves in a tropical island resort that got hit by a zombie outbreak.
Can they survive with friendship? Or end up zompony?
Dead Island / MLP Crossover
Rights to their owners.
I like the idea, but their's way too many errors to take it seriously.
Here's an example: "Were I going to find a safe place?" Obvious misspelling aside, you gotta know that people are, well, people. They're going to say words like 'gonna' and 'gotta'
Secondly, usually when a second person continues the conversation, it starts another paragraph, like so...
"I know I know, but it was lucky that Rainbow Dash was nearby and she grabbed a raincloud to put out the fire.”
Spike chuckled, “Yeah, thank Celestia that I’m fireproof!”
Thirdly, and this is just a nitpick, but I'm pretty sure you don't need to describe how the ponies look like, when everyone already knows who they are.
Hope this helps
*Reads title*
*Looks at picture*
Before reading summary: Dead Island???
After reading summary: Dead Island...
haven't read it yet but i'm about to, why is this rated teen? i played that game, seems like a good crossover would contain copious amounts of gore.
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OK so i've read it...hmm, nice idea, but the grammar and spelling mistakes are a bit rampant, so much so that i couldn't really read it comfortably
nice originality for a first try but overall the mistakes make it very hard to read,it would a have been a good idea to look through the story a bit after writing. maybe could have got a lot of them.
edit, yeah i do now...
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Nice triple post...
Ya know there's an edit and a delete button, right?
i.imgur.com/j4Nnv.png ~Wolf
Read it liked it gonna watch this and give you tips (not dollars or bits) on spelling and other stuff good job and have a moustache for having fox in your name.
Really good so far.
Your welcome! Glad to help you, but keep that in mind, that I'm not a proofreader and not THAT good with grammar. So there're probably some mistakes. I did all I could do.
Good chapter by the way, this means I'm the first viewer.
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YOUR HIRED!
1554507 Oh god, I'm bucked.
its a really good chapter however you should make them longer.
I'm OK with grammer I noticed lots of mistakes and I wanna help but I'm only on my phone most the time but I can still proofread/edit>>1554507
i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/newsfeed/000/236/815/903.png I...love....it
Wow, this has been awhile.
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Told ya, wanna save it?
4953711 Yeah. I'll add it to the group and see if we can get it continued. It's one of the few crossover ideas that seems fairly awesome.
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Thanks man.
4953804 Are you going to do more or not
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I ran into the wall of china....
5823778 are you really doing this to me
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And where did ya seen that?