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Excellent work
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Hot damn, way faster than me when I wrote my fimfic. Keep up the work.
Great story keep up the good work
You use names far too much author, vary it, use she/her describe the character like "the purple pony" "the yellow pegasus" "The fashionista" Always avoid repeating words
"and will never be found and is heartbreaking." You know author there's something like 'talking too much' and 'overly explaining' in histories, This is an example, the thought should have ended in "Lost" You extending the phrase only makes things awkward to read, you could write something like.
[ It felt like the child was lost, like she would never find her way again, the mere thought was heartbreaking]
A shame that you didn’t continue.
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Been having some personal issues, Hopefully I will be able to post the next chapter soon but life is abit chaotic right now.