Gothic loli doctor octavius here we gooo!

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Hopefully I can carry this torch!

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Cute

You better do this one justice, or else!

Piece of advice.

Don't rewrite 29 chapters. If you want to redo a story, do something different and new. A reimagining, if you will. 98 percent of stories that a writer decided to rewrite....die. Here is why. when a writer writes something new, everyone is excited. The fans are excited, the writer is excited, everyone gives feedback. When a writer rewrites chapters.....no one cares. No one is excited, no one gives feedback. It goes from something fun, to.....its work and the story almost always dies. By the time the Author has rewritten 29 chapters, what that actually means is that he wrote 60 chapters and by that point, the Author is sick of the story. Nothing of actual value is created, he just regurgitated what was already there and he is almost always burned out on it.

To be clear, I'm not saying not to do it. I'm saying you have to be smart about it.

Monk

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I've been a fan of the og story for a long time and finally have had some time to attempt a rewrite to add detail and adjust some not so great choices from the original story. I'm hoping to add to the content of the story and make a new experience while keeping at least somewhat close to the original authors intentions for the story, I'm sure its gonna be a bit of a slog at first but I really enjoy the premise and characters of the original and hope to recreate that and expand on it as much as possible. Thank you for the advice though and I understand exactly what you mean, I don't expect this story to blow up I just want to be able to make a satisfying end to a great story.

Don’t make this a complete rewrite, as those tend to die rather fast. Put your own spin to it. Anyways good luck and I look forward towards the results.

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That's the plan, working off of what the original author wrote while changing aspects of the story, next chapter will hopefully be done in an hour or two and will hopefully show that I am attempting to expand in my own way

Fun cant wait for more.!

"What, how the hell did I get shorter?!?" I yelled out before quickly clasping my hands over my mouth in shock, why is my voice higher pitched? I sound like an 8 year old and that's clearly wrong I'm 22. I quickly rush towards the bathroom and stare at the full length mirror attached to the back of the door. This is clearly the worst choice I've made today as all I see is some small child with pale skin, white hair, light blue eyes with a much deeper blue limbal ring. She's wearing a black and white gothic dress with red highlights, and I very much am not an 8 year old goth child. After several moments of increasingly shallow breaths and a rising panic I notice 4 black tentacles emerge from behind the child, wait no me, they emerged from behind me and each "Looks" towards me as a feeling of concern radiates from my back I quickly notice one is holding a black doll shaped like a dog towards me. For some inexplicable reason I grab the doll from the tentacle with extreme urgency and suddenly my panic begins to fade as a feeling of calm begins to fill my head.

There's something called a paragraph, maybe you heard of it?

After several more moments of the three small ponies chatting animatedly and seemingly ignoring Butter they suddenly rushed towards me and grabbed my legs and drug me out my door. I desperately clawed the floor and all four tentacles radiated amusement at how quickly I was overpowered by three ponies smaller then me. Butter let out a startled noise but hesitantly followed as the three drug me to a fate unknown to me.

Dragged* drug is a whole other thing