A Canterlot Gala

by Gold Meddle

Presented Perfection

Dawn approached as the two princesses sat in front of a flickering fireplace. "I think this was Blueblood's best Gala to date," remarked Celestia, "his replacement certainly livened things up."

"You'd trade a burden for a bedlam?"

"I would have preferred malice-free mayhem, but I'm told all the ponies we found in Blueblood's chambers were unharmed."

"A silver lining."

"The maid? She was among them, yes."

Luna rolled her eyes. "I suppose it's this wit that allowed you to uncover the fake prince's ploy."

"Not at all, it was simple overconfidence on his--or should I say, her part."

"I see you've made progress in your interrogation."

"It was a breeze, we're already proceeding with negotiations."

"Where does...she stand as of now?"

"The freedom of her and her subjects in exchange for the release of some fifty ponies."

After thinking for a few moments, Luna nodded. "That sounds equitable."

"It would be, if one of those fifty wasn't Blueblood."

Comments

[Ri2]

Can't they keep him?

[sirenc0re]

one of the funniest stories in the new blood contest. immensely enjoyed this one!!

[Gold Meddle]

11655308
Thank you, I hope the judges feel the same.

[PseudoBob Delightus]

Here's your New Blood Contest feedback!

This story was one of my favourites, and I have it in my original notes as "Jam-packed with comedy chaos", without much in the way of negatives. I think that holds up quite well on a second reading, but of course, I do have more to say...

This story is hyper-efficient in the way many Thousand Word Contest stories tend to be, and this is good in that it packs a lot of punch in a small wordcount - but also bad, in that it feels almost too efficient. It's all conspicuously terse and running at a blazing pace that leaves little room to appreciate the great moments.

And great moments there are in abundance, regardless of how little time they're given. It's not quite a for-want-of-a-nail story, but it clearly takes from that tradition, with many interconnecting plot threads weaving "Blue Blood"'s actions in with the events of the Gala.

Overall, despite some fundamental criticisms, this might be the best episode remix story I've seen on the site - and besides that, it was hilarious!

I really enjoyed reading this, and it was a great pleasure to see this in the New Blood Contest. I hope you keep writing, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future!

[Gold Meddle]

11753567
Thanks for the sneedback. This fic definitely was cut back--perhaps too much--but I'm mostly pleased with how it turned out, and I'm happy others share that view.