Hate to say it, but this story was rather disappointing. I was really starting to like it at first, but when it got into the clop parts, it didn’t impress me that much. For starters, I think you moved too fast with the sex scene and should take your time building up the moment instead of going straight to intercourse. Remember, this is my opinion, so not everyone has to agree with me, but please be respectful to the writer whether you liked the story or not. I, however, did not enjoy the story, even though I really wanted to.

-Blue

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this was a commission, Incandesca had to work with my word count.

11619243
I see.

Well, it’s… not bad, but it could use some improvement.

i have legit just found 2 copies of this exact story

11619396
I commission multiple people for the same story premise, just to see who can do it better.

11619474
But it’s against FiMFic’s rules to post the same story at least twice.

nice

11619782
With all due respect, writing a story that shares the same prompt with others does not make it a 'copy' of said stories. The content within is still wholly my own, and I read neither of the other fics Talesic commissioned before working on this.

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as long as the stories aren't the exact same, there's no rules being broken. This site is filled with stories with the same premise, sometimes even general outline.

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I see.

Thank you for clarifying. Sorry for the misunderstanding.

11619837
Alright, I understand. Thank you for pointing that out.

I apologize for the misunderstanding.