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MorganaTheNotCat
I'm an amateur writer and a Glim Glam lover that writes short, lewd stuff. Mostly. I write in my spare time, don't expect a consistent upload schedule.
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To the author: you might want to disable that source link for the cover image, since the site rules don't allow hyperlinking to NSFW materials.
In anticipation of that, those who want to see the unedited version of this pic should check out 1520622 on Derpi (or check out 1520623 for the all-nude version).
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Thank you for warning me, and for handing out the link to those interested lol
Now, that's a wet dream fantasy...
Hm, a little distracting in the beginning when it can’t decide whether it wants to be present or past tense.
Also, a bit disappointing that Sapphire never got off, especially since she was supposedly doing it for her own fun. Also, lol, I guess it shows that it’s your first anthro, because there’s not even one slight mention of boobs in the whole story! Completely ignored! Doesn’t have to be a huge focus or anything, but you’d think that he’d at least touch them a little when she gave permission to feel her up. And also the cowgirl position is great for touching some titties during sex.
Overall, though, not bad. And the ending explains a lot.
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There was in an earlier draft, a few comments relating to boobs and breasts. I had planned a part where the character would play with her nipples, but I eventually scrapped it from the final publish and I'm not sure why. But you make a good point, I guess since I'm too into the lower body myself I don't really consider the upper half, but that is a good point to keep in mind, would definitely make the scene hotter
This was a decent little story. It had a good scenario, good choreography, and the execution was serviceable. I will say that the story is dragged down a bit by the prose, which has a significant number of mechanical errors and some awkward phrasing that made it hard to follow in some places. I think this could have been much better if it had gotten a bit more proofreading.