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Fit for a Princess

Fluttershy's first date with Rarity will be coming tonight. She's overwhelmed with fear of how horribly the date could go if everything wasn't just so. It had to be perfect. Fit for a princess! Surely this won't backfire!

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intherainbowfactory

intherainbowfactory #1 · Apr 16th, 2023 · · ·

She would not fucking say that. Liked

Starswirl the Beardless

Starswirl the Beardless #2 · Apr 23rd, 2023 · 1 · ·

This was a pretty good story. Your premise was a good one, and while the execution was pretty standard, it was still enjoyable to read. Your dialogue was mostly good, and you had some good jokes in there as well. My biggest complaint would be that Fluttershy seems a little bit out of character in certain places. I get what you were going for, but her behavior feels more fitting of Twilight than Fluttershy. Aside from that, you had a few mechanical errors throughout, but not to the point of it being distracting.