Twilight gets a strange letter from the mail… and it’s from Moondancer, apparently she wants to hang out with the rest of our friends! It can’t be too bad…it’s just a… silly invitation, what could go wrong..!
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Stuff I used to make the cover!
Twilight Vector!
https://derpibooru.org/images/2638053?q=canterlot%2C+background+
Background!
https://derpibooru.org/images/1285588?q=amending+fences%2C+vector%2C+sad%2C+twilight+sparkle+
i mean unless letters got same day delivery from Cantalot to Ponyville then it is very risky hoping that letter will be there with time enough for Twilight to plan and leave the day after she gets the letter, plus Twilight is a Princess so she does have some duties to from time to time have her drop everything for a couple of days with out warning would properly stress Twilight out a little, properly have the meeting be a week out so that Twilight can write back to Moondancer and tell her that she will be coming and so that Twilight can plan a trip to Cantalot.
with Moondancer asking Twilight to show up the day after she gets the letter, Twilight would have to send a ASAP and hope that it will be there tomorrow or later in the day as it is only 8AM, and with it only being 8AM in the morning Moondancer most have send it yesterday and so tomorrow is today, which is would mean that Twilight is late
but intersting start looking forward to more
This is a cute story so far, and a good effort for a first story, but I do see quite a few problems with it. You have a significant number of mechanical errors (grammar, punctuation, etc) and some awkward phrasing that are very distracting. If you cleaned that stuff up, I think this story would be a lot better.
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Nice to know that you like it! if you can, could you point out some of the stuff you mentioned, any points in the story you think I should improve on? so advice would be appreciated!
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Nice chapter!!!
I liked it!!
Can't wait for more