Remorse, Regret, and Realization
This just keeps jumping from bad to horrible.
I didn’t mean for all of this to happen. Oh… how I wish I could just go back in time and start all over again, and not make the same mistakes.
Poor Fluttershy.
How could I think that she would be joking about such a tender, serious subject? What a terrible friend I am, to believe that Fluttershy would harbor such a sadistic sense of humor.
I was trying to find my special somepony. But in the end, I’m still single, Fluttershy doesn’t want anything to do with me, and now I’m probably the most hated mare in all of Equestria. I’m going to lose my confidence, my business, my friends, my sister… Probably even my parents if word of this reaches them all the way in Fillydelphia.
I’m going to lose everything. And all because I’m the most insensitive, uncaring jerk in Equestria. Of all the worst things that could happen, this is the WORST…
POSSIBLE…
…
No. It’s not even worth it. Feeling sorry for myself isn’t going to make the complete obliteration of everything I love and cherish any slower.
Some element of generosity I am.
“Well… at least you’ll never hate me, right Opal?”
“Mmm… moww.”
And… she’s walking away. Fantastic. Even my own cat has turned on me.
What could possibly shed a light of hope on all of this misery? Maybe I should just be like Fluttershy, and hide myself under these covers forever…
It’s not like anypony would miss me, right?
♪ Good times and bad times ♪
Hmm— huh?
What’s that?
♪ I can count on being with you ♪
Where is that singing coming from?
It sounds… so beautiful…
♪ Have to catch up when I see you ♪
Is that… Sweetie Belle? Oh, my. I never knew she had such a— such a lovely voice…
♪ And you are the reason I can make it through ♪
This song… it reminds me of something.
♪ I'm so glad that I met you, being with me whenever ♪
It reminds me of—
Of—
♪ We're made for each other forever ♪
Of the day that we first met…
“Oh, my! Are you all right?”
The lost yellow filly, a pegasus fallen from Cloudsdale…
“Hello, there. What’s your name? Are you lost?”
“I— Uh, I…”
♪ Just like a river that flows ♪
“Don’t worry. You don’t need to be afraid of me. I promise I won’t hurt you. Please, I just want to help…”
“My— my name is Fluttershy…”
“What was that?”
“My name is F-Fluttershy.”
♪ Just like the stars in the dark night ♪
And then, all those years later…
“Oh, hello there! You must be the two pegasi that Pinkie Pie was telling me about!” She extended her hoof to us. “The name’s Rarity, pleased to make your acquaintance.”
♪ Lead me in the storm ♪
The chance reunion…
“Your name’s Fluttershy? … I thought you looked familiar! It’s you, isn’t it? That yellow pegasi I met some eleven or twelve years ago, lost from her family in Cloudsdale? That was you!”
“Uh, I… yes. That was, that was me.”
♪ Lead me in the dark ♪
“Oh my word, what are the odds?
What were the odds indeed?
Such wonderful memories… And yet, still something doesn’t add up.
Rainbow Dash told me that Fluttershy has been in love with me ever since she moved into Ponyville. But… it never seemed like she did; she never tried to tell me before now.
♪ You are the light of my life ♪
Unless…
“I completely revised it and I know you’re going to love it! Just wait one moment. I just have to… finish this last stitch. It’ll take only a moment.”
“Oh… okay.” Shuffling her hoof on the ground… looking in every direction…
♪ I can count on being with you ♪
“Excuse me, Rarity?”
“Mm-hm.”
“Well, we’re waiting, um… can I share with you something… sort of important?”
“Of course. What is it?”
♪ I thank you for staying so true ♪
“Well, it’s just that, um… I was kind of, hoping to— I, I don’t… You see, I—”
Oh, my. Was she— she was, wasn’t she?
The more that I think about it… she actually did this quite a lot.
“Ooh! Hold that thought for a minute, Fluttershy! It’s finished! Now put it on!”
“Oh. Um… okay.”
♪ You are my lifetime and true friend ♪
“What do you think?”
“I… love it.”
“Oh, you’re just saying that.”
“She even tried to offer me an exclusive contract. ‘Seven thousand bits a year! It is the perfect offer, how could you refuse this?’”
“Oh, my. Well, they do say that Photo Finish doesn’t like to lose a valuable client easily.”
“I’m so happy that’s all over. I know I said this already… but I hate modeling so much.”
“But look on the bright side. It’s all over now. Just you and me together, the best of friends, in a spa. Where can we go wrong?”
Where did we go wrong, indeed?
“Truth be told, perhaps I shouldn’t ask you to model for my anymore, no matter how desperate I am.”
“Oh, that’s okay, Rarity. For you, I’d be happy to model anytime.”
♪ My heart will always be with you ♪
“But darling, you just said you hate modeling. I wouldn’t want to force you to do anything you don’t want to do.”
“Well yes, but… I wouldn’t disappoint you either, Rarity. After all, that’s what friends are for, right?”
“Hmm. True. Very true. “
♪ I will be there when you need me ♪
“I love you, Rarity.”
“Ohh, I love you too, Fluttershy. You’re the best friend anypony could have!”
“Umm, no, I don’t… I don’t mean it like that. You see, I really love you. Like, like—”
♪ And I know you'll do the same ♪
“Hi, girls!”
“T-Twilight?”
“Twilight, darling! I wasn’t expecting to see you here!”
“Well, I had nothing else to do, so I was wondering if, maybe I could join you girls?”
“Mmm, fine by me. Is that alright with you Fluttershy?”
“Um… sure, I… guess.”
♪ I can see you, I can hear you in my heart ♪
“Now what were you saying before, dear?”
“Oh, um… well, I was just saying that— that this is… so relaxing. Yes. Now this is a wonderful way to spend an afternoon.”
“Isn’t it, though?”
Fluttershy… what have I done?
We were once the best of friends. You and I, always sticking our necks out for each other. Always hanging out, sharing our secrets and skills.
♪ You will be here if I need you ♪
I helped you learn to sew, and you even taught me a few things about it. That time I lent you my umbrella for the harsh April rains. The red and purple scarf you knitted me that saved me during the bracing December winters.
No matter which way or when. Neither rain nor snow, we’ve always been there for each other, together.
♪ I will never have to guess ♪
I should’ve been a better friend. I should’ve seen all those signs. I shouldn’t have treated you like that. You don’t deserve it. You’re such a perfect pony. You have a brilliant personality, always so kind and… very, very sweet. You’re full of nothing but compassion for all of your friends, and the animals of the forest you dedicate yourself to taking care of.
♪ Because we are very special friends ♪
And you’re so beautiful. If you weren’t so shy, I bet you could land yourself a date much easier than I could. You have such a wonderfully flowing pink mane and tail, and such a magnificent yellow coat. And those pearly turquoise eyes…
Wait, what? What am I even saying? I don’t— I don’t think of my friend Fluttershy in that sort of way… do I?
♪ Memories you can recall with me any time of day ♪
I love stallions, right?
She’s my friend, my best friend even. We share so many common interests and pet peeves… We’re like sisters, but— but not.
I-I don’t know. I mean, it’s not like she isn’t a lovable pony. In fact, she’s probably the cleverest, most intelligent… most beautiful… and sweetest pony that— that I’ve ever had the pleasure of knowing.
♪ You can reach out, you can ask me with your soul ♪
No… could it be true? Am I… am I love in Fluttershy? No, no! I like stallions! I need my prince! My shining, heroic prince to come and… save me.
♪ I will answer when you call me, I will come no matter how ♪
Oh, who am I kidding? Really, just who am I kidding?
It’s her. It’s always been her. I just couldn’t bear to admit it. Fluttershy is much more than a friend to me. She’s the one I want to be with…
♪ Because we are very special friends ♪
Fluttershy, I love you too.
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...read.
Now for Rarity to fix things.
The drama!
Anyways, incredible story and good job with the monologue, I like how she fights with her inner self and her wishes, though I would have loved if it had been longer, you know more character development and stuff. But good, very good, I had to control myself to avoid skipping lines, and getting a heart attack.
I need more
Oh and those flashbacks, awesome!
You did very well. It does not feel forced. I can't wait to see how it progresses. I must ask though, With The Gemmed Satyr about to conclude, do we get any hints on episode 3?
I bought the Wii Version of Sonic Unleahed. It was so bad, I gave up before whatever part that song plays in.
I actually played this while I was reading.
You can't leave it hanging now! MOOOOAR!
I was waiting for this. Rarity finally realizes that Fluttershy has been trying to tell her how she felt for years, but something always happened. Rarity had to think about her want of her prince, and how deep her feelings for Fluttershy truly goes.
You did a great job with Rarity's monologue. I just wish Rarity had more of an inner conflict between her upbringing and her feeling. I eagerly await the next chapter.
Please let these two finally get together ( as well as Rarity doing a LOT of groveling for forgiveness.)
Huh.....impressive though it does seem really....hpyocritic? (might have spelled that wrong) Rarity thought that mares who loved other mares were the worse, for her to change change that even if slowly seems OOC....I don't know. And well we seen Rarity's lighter side, now for Fluttershy's darker point of view.
Excellent job, Rarispy! Nothing was forced for me. And now, the dreaded suspense.
FInally now... please make more I want to read it so badly now that we are etting going.
Not bad
I'll be honest, that didn't really work for me. After all the time spent putting Fluttershy through the wringer (shame on you, by the way!
), "it's always been her" comes out of nowhere. I could see Rarity realizing she was being ridiculous and agreeing to give Flutters the chance she deserves, but to go from zero to feels in 0.1 seconds stretches my credulity a bit. There was a Flutter/Dash (...Pinkie/Dash?) with a very similar situation, and there's a little time skip it uses where they start dating and the next chapter it's been three months and NOW they're in love, and I thought that worked a bit better.
hmmm, as much as I hate to say it, I think some sort of dithering where Rarity questions everything before she actually goes Fluttershy might make it feel more real, but Rarity making a sudden dramatic choice like this is in character. In any case it's not this one moment of music induced revelation that's most important, but how she acts after it. Otherwise the really tricky bit is the next chapter, because now she has to start being reasonable about dealing with all the issues between them.
Being disgusted by the thought of dating another mare to in love with Fluttershy, even if it has been building for years, is a bit of a stretch. I think if this chapter ended with Rarity deciding to give Fluttershy a chance it would be a bit more believable.
sorry
It was a wonderfully written story and I can't wait to see the conclusion
Ciao darling
Mmm, could have been better to be honest, but the pacing, delivery, and style all work really well.
This revelation would have worked better if there had been more ironic "Rarity is the only one who can't see she loves Fluttershy" foreshadowing throughout.
All the same, I'll enjoy reading the long-awaited conclusion.
Well, I have to say that I am very pleased with this story as is, you're doing a wonderful job.
I'm kind of glad that I haven't had any time to read in a while, it let me build up on more chapters of this story!
Lastly, that song choice was perfect for the flashback scene.
And to think it took her all this time to realize her true feelings for Fluttershy. Well better late then never as they always say.
But we still don't know what caused Rarity's outburst and whether she'll get her clients back. I'm saying Discord is behind the former and the later probably will occur in time as the ponies move on and forget as some newer, juicer gossip rears its head.
Also way to ruin the moment there Twilight.
The story took a few steps forward!!!
(PS: Please don't hate me! I kid!
)
So many feels
I am going to explode from the anticipation of how this ends......
explode......
And then Sweetie Belle got her cutie mark.
1900497
What are you talking about? I have been giving you hints towards Episode 3, since all the way back to the start of The Sweetest Gem...
1900498
I thought the end already came about two weeks ago. Hmm... didn't seem like much happened.
1900583
It plays during the end credits. Sonic Unleashed is my favorite Sonic game, so I had just finished playing it for... probably the sixth-hundredth time.
1900590
Well, in all fairness, she hasn't quite fully forgiven her yet. It might take a little convincing...
1900636 1900755
The feeling I was trying to evoke was that Rarity has always had her own hidden feelings for Fluttershy, but her hetero-centered upbringing and desires have kept her in denial, until now. That's basically why I asked for opinions on that scene. Because I myself was worried about how convenient and OCC it might sound.
1901189
Yeah, I decided to experiment with this particular chapter by writing a couple of scenes driven entirely by the characters' dialogue, with almost no internal or descriptive narratives breaking it up. I think it turned out rather well.
1901777
The backstory you have between Fluttershy and Rarity here reminds me strongly of another story.
But that's okay, because that's an amazing romance of it's own right.
1901909
Purely coincidental. I haven't read that story.
Though, it does look pretty interesting. And by Steel Resolve, no less. Huh. Maybe I will take a look at it... after I've done writing this, of course.
About ti e Rarity realised her fellings for Fluttering. In all honesty, after last chapters, I was about to think this story was going to end with Rarity telling Fluttering that, even though she's not attracted to mares, she will always be Fluttershy's friend. Which I would thought would have fine ending. But now we know Rarity is going to end up with Fluttershy.
Question: Is Rarity Bi or lesbian in this story? I'm sorry, it's just left me curious.
i really liked the way you made her realize that shy tried to tell her that she loved her and rarity in fact loved her too..
1902527 i think she is lesbian but because of her misconception about needing a prince somehow made herself believe she was straight.. would add a bit too the drama rarity has to face now she realized her love for shy..
1900755>>1901028 While I see both your points, you have to give a little credit to how much was done within a relatively short timeframe. We saw a nice progression of events. Rarity reexamined her whole relationship with Shy, a chance comment misunderstood here and there, a constant feeling of closeness that she always took for sisterly or friendly feelings. These are things she would never have looked for in her female friend, she had a rather large blind spot when it came to mares. Now a declaration of love? Well, that's a bit of a stretch, but not by much. This is exactly why the Flarity ship works, they are that close already. For it to turn romantic really only takes a realization that they are attracted to mares at all. You still have to bring us home Rarispy, but this did work for me. Nicely done.
1902019>>1901909 I find that authors who understand Rarity and Shy tend to choose similar themes and moments. I had this happen with Absoluteanonymous and Jot Jiggety Jog in their Flarity fics. Neither had read the fic you speak of at the time. Frankly that is a good idea if you are writing one yourself, try to avoid fics of the same couple or you will end up being influenced by that author's perception of the characters. The Rarispy has his own unique take on them, which I am enjoying.
1901777 No need to snap
. I understand but as a writer I understand that nothing is really set in stone. Something definitive is what I meant. Oh well, regardless of my hurt feelings I still await it fervently
Well done I don't think it was to OOC for Rares like that
I think it was put together maybe a little fast but well when you hear music your thought processes tend to change especially if the song is good. 
It seems very canon that Sweety Bell is a very good singer though she doesn't see that yet 
I was hoping Rainbow would of knocked some sense into her physically at least one hoof slap before talking like she did but still interesting from the previous chapter 
I do hope Rarity can fix things with Fluttershy I mean all the hell she went through she deserves something though I believe Rares will want to go slow since she hasn't explored the Mare-amore way of thinking 
but I'm sure she will realize more of how she feels after time though she has the basics from her monolog there but I still think she would tread lightly because of how she was brought up 
I look forward to how you conclude this. 
1903106 I liked this. Current train of thought slightly lost though.
1902797 Sorry? I don't mean to offend. I'll stop doing that in this story then.
1902527
Bi. The feelings she's had for the various stallions were genuine, but so were her hidden feelings towards Fluttershy.
1903163
Sorry. Wasn't trying to snap.
1903273
I never really minded it, personally. In fact, "Commence read" made me chuckle a few times.
1903352
Well, I'm glad I was able to do so. 
Rarty's ending monolouge is very well done and feels completely natural. It flows perfectly.
1901777
I prefer Generations myself. Unleashed felt a bit too much like it was just holding the boost and occasionally jumping (Not just the Wii Version, though that's even worse). I like the mix of Adventure-Style platforming and Unleashed-Style speed. The 2D isn't bad, but I skipped Colors because it was a retail-price game consisting mostly of 2D.
There are not may ways for an author to have his character fall in love/realize existing feelings within a single chapter, and have it not seem rushed. That being said, this is among my favorite chapters thus far, simply because of how well you pulled it off. It didn't seem rushed at all, the flashbacks and Rarity's inner monologues flowed together almost seamlessly and the pacing matched up with how the rest of the story flowed.
On another note, you are among the few authors that can get away with shipping (almost) everypony under the sun, within the same story, without it becoming trite or overly clichéd. Which is impressive within itself. Maybe the four of you should start a club, or something.
1903352 No biggie. You're still pretty awesomesauce.
One character hiding a secret crush on the other while the other's feeling are in flux...
Have I read this before?
I know exactly how you feel about the monologue from Rarity... Having a character go from "I feel X" to "I feel Y" in a short time span is tough. It's interesting though; I knew exactly what was going on in her head... but not from reading it. I think you could have done better, but it wasn't bad.
I feel that you left too much unsaid at "I love stallions, right?" There is just so much subtext there, but I'm afraid that most people won't see it. Saying something like "Like Blueblood. No, not like him. Like that nerdy one, or that other one... What was his name?" You know, something to show how they don't really stay in her mind for even a few days, whereas she can remember these little details from years back with Fluttershy.
Maybe find some way to show that she's more enamored with the idea of a stallion being her rescuer that stallions themselves.
I think the realization was just a bit on the fast side... It was definitely better than most, just.. fast, a bit, sorry... I think q97randomguy had a good idea, having Rarity try to recall stallions she's dated until realizing she can't, though that probably would have changed the 'Rarity is bi' idea you're setting... Sorry, long comment, enjoying the fic! Can't wait for more!
1906108
Probably. I'm pretty sure I'm not the first person to do that by a long shot.
1906311
How chaotic, indeed...
1906449
Mm, I suppose. Like I mentioned in another comment though, my implication here is that Rarity is bisexual. What she's felt for various stallions over the course of the fic, and her childhood desires to be romantically swept away by her "handsome prince", were still genuine.
1906806
Ah, should've read all the comments, I suppose.
Maybe a more definitive "But then again..."
Oh well, it's your story, and it worked as is, so it isn't too big a deal.
1903273 It's not that, it's just that you always put commence read, it's like saying 'FIRST! - will read now'.
I don't mean to offend you, I just hate when someone posts something for the sake of being first.
1902019>>1903106
i would suggest going and reading Green as soon as this is finished, however. that way you get the goodness of your own, unaltered take on it, and you get you enjoy reading one of the other best Rarishy fics out there
1907044 Well I use it as my comment no matter where in the story it happens to be.
1907548 I find it adorable. But do remember to add another comment afterwards to tell me what you thought. Sometimes I miss that you edited your first comment.