• Member Since 26th Jul, 2019
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EroPony1000

I want to make clean, concise and elegant eroticism... about horses.

EroPony1000 Joined 26th Jul, 2019 · Offline

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LewdChapter
LewdChapter #4 · Mar 18th, 2022 · · ·
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I really wish this was longer. You start to paint an interesting picture, but there's simply not enough words to get us there. Like, I don't even understand exactly what happened here, because you didn't give the story enough room to breathe. My initial assumption is that her drink was spiked with something. I can't think of another explanation as to why she suddenly began diddling herself.

Also, the continued mention of the kids running the place is really weird to me, doesn't seem necessary.

Thank you very much for your submission!

EroPony1000
EroPony1000 #5 · Mar 18th, 2022 · · ·
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Thanks for your comment and criticisms. Cheers! :twilightsmile:

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