This is an entry for the G5 Bingo Contest.
Hitch was exhausted after the Mane 5's adventure. He came home hoping to get some well-deserved rest. But a smart little puppy has other plans...
This is my first ever story on FiMFiction. I don't expect it to be coming home with a prize, but I enjoyed writing this so I hope you enjoy reading it!
Prompt #092
obligatory
good luck in the contest!
11101070
Never heard of this song before. đł
Thanks!!
In a story, every detail is important somehow. In this story, there are many details.
Any reader would be familiar with Hitch.
What is an average sized TV?
That sure is Cloudpuff...
There are too many details for a regularly paced story.
But I think beginning with excessive familiar details (like Hitch), then going into an unfamiliar scene almost feels intentionally guided. It's the delirium before sleep where your mind is seeing in snapshots, where your body is on autopilot and you numbly take in what you do as it happens.
You acheive lucid thought,
and then drift off again...
...into dreams.
Almost.
For me, this fic straddles the line between intentionally breaking a rule, and unknowingly breaking it. I think the overuse of adjectives may not have been intended to hit in this drowsy way. Not intended to gum up the pacing and overload the imagination with object upon object. What I mean is, There's not much tactile sense. It's all visual, which is how a scene would normally work; but the narrative lost sight of what was important and what wasn't, so it just decided to throw everything in there.
Having the G4 show be an actual TV series in G5 puts Sunny and Argyle in a interesting light. I have to admit it's a compelling subject.
I feel like normally when a song or a scene shows up like this--
--in the middle of a piece of literature, it's to comment on something important. So I guess to me this scene feels strangely important. I have to admit, the colored lines work really well.
I liked it when it started to drizzle outside of HItch's house. I don't know why, but that struck a chord with me.