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Sea Gnash


Idle no more! Been bitten by the writing bug <3

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With the advancement of technology, magic is waning in Equestria and ponies are beginning to earn their cutie marks later and later, sometimes reaching adulthood with a blank flank. In an effort to help ponies know their calling, Princess Twilight Sparkle founds an organization known as the Cutie Mark Bureau as a temporary solution while she searches for a true answer for the phenomenon. The Cutie Mark Bureau, informally known as the CMB, finds a way to inject magic into a pony to create a temporary magical surge large enough to allow a cutie mark to manifest.

The bureau has stood as a shining light in a time of worry, eventually becoming a normal fixture in Equestrian life after standing for nearly a century. However, their latest patient has suspicions that not everything is as bright as everypony else believes it to be.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 10 )

looks interesting, might read it later when there are a few more chapters.

Interesting start! we need more!

Melody's hoof returned to stroking her braid. “Melody Veil, twenty-sixth day of the growing season, eleven-fifty-two AT.” She watched nervously as the mare across the desk lit up her horn to use her magic to type on her keyboard.

I like this bit of detail. You could have gone for real world months, and instead went for this.

This is a really cool concept, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it.

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Thank you! It’s a little headcanon I’ve had with me for the longest time. The ponies control the seasons and we only ever hear the word “month” said once through the whole series, so I figured the four seasons were just more important for them to base their calendar on. :twilightsmile:

This is very intriguing! Especially considering what we've seen from FiM canon when cutie marks are swapped or removed. This only begs the question; what happens if you just give somepony a cutie mark?
I think this is a great start; the summary draws my attention , Melody Veil already feels somewhat relatable and not too out of character. The world building is written simply so far , but I feel like it's still a good start and will hopefully keep up the pace (✿^‿^) Sometimes short and simple are sweet.
I look forward to reading how this plays out!

As for that last part...
I'm wondering if parts of Melody's life were changed , or her memories , in order to match the cutie mark she was given? It's pretty suspicious when the "professionals" can't even tell you what your mark is supposed to mean and such. Also from their conversation it sounds like they're trying to cover something up. Something huge. What roll does Twilight play , and how big a roll? Does she even know what's going on?

Just some thoughts. =D

This is really interesting so far, and I look forward to more! :D

Finally got around to reading this! :pinkiehappy:
And I have to say I'm intrigued! The premise of the story is quite a thought. I'm excited about where you go with it!
Have to say I like the birthday thing you used, but I have to ask, what's AT? I feel its, "after," something. Regardless, look forward to the next chapter!:pinkiehappy:

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AT stands for "After Twilight,' like our BCE and CE modes of keeping years. :twilightsmile:

10871245
Ah that makes sense. Though, 1152 years after Twilight. o_O That's quite a long time. Well, maybe not for an alicorn. :twilightsmile:

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