I'll bet you never heard of the Dusty Bolts before, here in Appaloosa we consider them the best fliers in Equestria. Being on the frontier we can't substantiate the claim, but we can say that after seeing the Wonder Bolts come to town those poster ponies have nothing on the Dusty Bolts.
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Author's note: I know it's been a while since my last story, this one has been in the lab for the past few days, I've been working on multiple stories at once and I had a big move recently. Enough of my excuses, this story seems a bit rough to me, I had to fight to get past my typical writer's blocks and I still don't know how I'm going to finish this one. I'm working on the second chapter right now, but can't guarantee a quick submission, let me know what you think. Should I keep submitting stories or shut up?
Good story. It kept me involved until the end.
My only criticism is that you need to get it edited for grammar. There are many repeating mistakes, and while they don't really take away from the story, it would make the story MUCH easier to read, as well as a little clearer. Simple things, like making a new paragraph for every switch in dialogue, putting in semicolons, and shortening your sentences can go a long way!
If you can finish this story, you should.
I look forward to more, if you have it.
1215752 'Preciate it, I'll do what I can about the grammar. I often have that trouble allot of my stories write themselves and I have to keep up or I loose focus and leave it half finished. Give me a heads up when you put out some stories, I'm always looking for new inspiration.
Author's Note, Cliff hanger my bronies! This chapter has been the easiest to write so far, kind of disturbing.
Oh well at least the story is progressing. I wanted to post this, we got a bad storm coming through where I am right now. Let me know what you think,as far as story content and improvement to grammar, and I'll get back to you when it's not raining anvils outside. 
Hmmmmm, I liked this chap, but I could tell tht you finished this quite easily, now though, he's about to kill a drgon due to rage felt from the core of his very being, I feel so much Sympathy for the Dragon, and it also makes me think what could hapen if Flutters was there?
I'm relly just mad at how late I am to continuing thisstory though........
That was a good chapter as well, I could easily tell the difference from the last
, keep it up, I'll be reading, Trust Me!
1299470 Funny you should mention that, I don't want any plot spoilers, but let's just say there are unforeseen repercussions as a result of the Dragon Slaying. Are you sure you aren't ghost writing this?
Author's Note, Well I have been previously occupied lately, but I have so many ideas bouncing around in my head, I wanted to post a different chapter than this one but this was just short, sweet, and practically wrote itself. It's not so much an actual chapter as it is a break in the story and a rest for me, but still hope you enjoy.
Yea, this one really seemed to relax and ease up the tension, basically almost like a filler, but different in purpose, I think I may understand.
Author's note, This chapter was a chore to write, if it shows it's because I don't do that sappy romantic trash. This is actually my first attempt at it so let me know if it sucks and any recommendations for improvement, I tried to keep the dialogue as true to life as possible so I'm hoping that makes up for the lacking heartthrob scenes. The accents were also murder to write and slowed the whole thing down even more, on a side note, I don't think I've shared what the inspiration for this story is. Well in Reno they have an annual International Championship Air Race, personally I am not at all fond of flying, pilots, or their egos, but for all of that I still admire their nerves and skill. Much of the cynicism and saltiness comes from the mentality of two tours in Afghanistan and all of the aggravation that comes with it. No matter what you do nothing prepares you for what you experience there.
I'm sorry, but Romance and most sappy things aren't my strong suite, you may have to ask another author that you think would be best at giving you advice, hope you have the best of luck, but I don't think you did bad to be honest, I was just saying that because I may not have the best opinion
1327168 Thank you for the feedback, sometimes it seems like I'm writing this story for myself.
Author's note, I really like the way this one turned out, believe it or not ceremonies aren't about polished boots or starched uniforms but more the hassle of trying not to pass out and the unwritten expectations that you get it right or else. Of course it's something that has to be done, even if it is a hassle, I really wanted this chapter to be longer but once again these things have a way of writing themselves.
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1345356 Thank ya' kandley.
Author's note, this was a painful chapter to write, hopefully it is less painful to read.
This is my life lesson to you, never give up on life, and always face up to your mistakes, and to Flutterstrucked I know you saw this one coming, thank you for your continued support. 
Yea, and whew, you pulled it off splendidly, I believe in that lesson too, and this story had put out a great example of it, can't wait for the next chapters, also I wonder if the Wonderbolts have anything that would impress the dusties, bcuz from how Silver pulled off that Rainboom, they may be lagging behind if they didn't step their game up since Rainbow saved em.
Author's note, I had meant for this to be a simple filler chapter to give me a rest but it quickly got out of hoof, yes the ending is abrupt I want to go to sleep! Originally I had wanted this to be a story all to itself because there was so much that I could have written about it, I wanted a sort of Tom Hank's Pacific feel to it hope I pulled that off. I always have mixed feelings on writing things like this, firstly writing anything in relation to what I do gets annoying fast. As far as the reference to the Raiders, no disrespect is intended, it's just a fictional unit in a fictional world, if you want their real story do your research, Carlson's Raiders WWII The Makin Atoll raid and Carlson's Patrol on Guadalcanal. Also a big thank you to Raugos for letting me use his story Night Guards as reference for the overthrow of Nightmare moon I highly recommend his story.
Author's note, This chapter turned out better than I expected, I wanted to write up the back story on Kid for the longest time but couldn't find the opportunity until now, so here it is in all of it's jaded, salty, bitter glory, hope you like it.
Okay, I'll try out his story, and I was slightly confused, I Thought that the whole banishment thing was about some thousand years ago, so does this fit in as a alternate universe?
Dude, give yourself more credit, it's not bad, and in my eyes it's a pretty decent read.The worst things that I can say is that ur probably having a few grammar errors, but they're depleting after each chapter.
1397497 Shoot that completely slipped my mind, apparently Mr. Trench is a 1000+ years old, oops.
He ages well for a unicorn? Marines don't die they go to Tartarus and regroup? Maybe I should have renamed him Chuck Neighris. 
Hmmm, I don't know if I can fix that one without some major alterations to the story. I'll see what I can do.
Author's note, well you may be wondering why this story was released so soon after the last one. Truth is I was working on both at the same time which is why it took so long to post the last chapter because I absolutely had to finish that one before posting this one. It fell into place beautifully if I do say so myself.
Yesh, it surely does, and I loved the past memories he had. It gives you more insight on the type of character Crazy Wing was, I look forward to the next chapter, and I wish more people would type in the comments as well, just so I can see what they think of this, I mean I would practically begged them to type here, but hmmph, can't have everything you want. I mean when you think about, it seems like we're the only ones who're here...but I guess their just missing out
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1409727 Eh yeah, we'll see what happens, I'm just hoping that if I continue the story it'll show up on the what's hot bar eventually. If not then I know I did my derndest. I wonder if this was how Beethoven felt when he couldn't hear the applause for his symphonies?
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Well, you're not exactly like him, I mean you have Me right *Shrugs nervously* eh heh, but I have full hope in you being on the what's hot bar, and you always have a supporter, and silent supporters... here whenever you need them, c ya
Author's note, Can't stop I'll loose all my good ideas! This is the first story I might actually finish and it's got me hyped! Flutterstrucked thanks again, I think I just added another 12 chapters on to this monstrosity with that plot twist. I wonder what happens next?
The anticipation, Wow! I must say, thanks is not needed, from one friend to another, I'll always help, and I sure do wonder whats in store for the next chapter!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_grin.png
Author's note, Yes this chapter is short, my coffee is failing me, another Dusty bites the dust. Don't worry though none of the other Dusty Bolts will die, just wait until you see what happens to Tumble Weed, evil cackle, if only you knew!
Sorry it took so long to respond, I had a lil mishap with my laptop and had to wait sometime before I could exactly get back, I love how this is going and I can't wait to see the way this arc will be handled. It's a relief knowing that no more dusty bolts would die, thus meaning that thats something really unfortunate for the Minotaurs, oh I wonder what Iron Will is doing in the midst of all this.....dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Fluttershy_lolface.png
To the loyal readers, sorry about the delay in the story it's been a horrible week. The good news is I have some great new material brewing in the lab, I just need to catch up on some sleep so I can finish it. Also Flutterstrucked, unfortunately Iron Will doesn't make a cameo however in the timeline of the series I see this as shortly after his ad campaign in Ponyville, he fell under surveillance of the Night Guard after this incident but when they didn't find anything suspicious he was left alone. The story outside of the story.
Author's note, Yes the wait is over! Thank you all for your patience, another short chapter but I figured you all waited long enough for some new material time to get back to my writing grind.
Yes, despite this chap being short, it had a good meaning to it, almost like a cooldown time between rounds, I'm still wondering whats gonna happen, and this seems to be something that much of the team will have to think about and then they'd have to do battle while taking this stuff in... No break for the Dusties eh, but they're use to itdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy_umad.png
*Edit*: Wow, now Ads are taunting me, one said "Written a Book?" just after I finished scrolling down the page....
Author's note, I wanted this chapter to be a little better written, especially the battle but the story is already beginning to wrap itself up.
I'm sorry, all good things come to an end, but hey there are still at least three good chapters left maybe more. I've had some ideas for other stories also so if you like this one be sure to check out my new stuff when I get to it. Here's a look at a few story ideas, don't steal them then you're just cheating yourself out of an original product. The Fairest in Equestria, Rarity talks to Princess Celestia's Mirror of Souls about why Applejack is more beautiful, this one is going to be a short story. Derpy Goes Postal, haven't yet come up with a plot for this one yet but it's a comedy where something pushes Derpy over the edge and she goes on a rampage, this one will also be a short story. Sympathy for Discord this will probably be my next big project and I need some recovery time before I start on it, also don't have a plot for this one yet but it will be based off of Rolling Stones song Sympathy for the Devil. Thank you all for the views and the favorites I got to go to sleep now or I'll wind up like Sand Blast at work tomorrow. 
Heh, I look forward to them stories of yours, and will remember this story long after it's done. Thank ya kindly for your piece of work
1488305 Thanks that means allot, when I started I honestly didn't know how the story was going to turn out but I knew I wanted to write something that had meaning to me and hopefully to those that read it as well and actually I'm not expecting anyone to remember this story. One day down the road when MLP has run it's course and all the kids are laughing at their brony parents I doubt even this story would change their mind about how "lame" the show was, unless you're like one of those legit Gran Torino bronies.
Like it, and you can polish em up with however long it may take, these are the final moments, and I'm sure you want to give this story a great show-off.
We'll be patient....well I'll be for the most part...but, yea, if you feel as though there's more that you'd want to do then it should be done, it's your story and whats the worse that can happen, heck, I wouldn't be surprised if you'd want to go on back to this chap and add what you wanted to because I know how fritzy it is when something seems to not be done the way you deem it to be.
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Author's Note, I liked the way this Chapter turned out, I couldn't find a good way to end it so I decided to see how the story would play out. I always think it's funny when people expect every place they go to have all the latest commodities, which is why people camp with RVs instead of tents, they can't live more than a day without a shower, and God forbid they can't get signal on their I-phones.
Hello all it's Pony Bones, I'm back most of you probably didn't know I was gone but anyways. Went out on a three day sabbatical it was nice, got to ride a jet ski for the first time and man I rode it like I stole it, got thrown off six times and when I say thrown I mean thrown not feet but yards. That was fun, if you ever get the chance to rent a jet ski and you think it's not worth the money, pay anyways and ride as hard as you can.
Haha, liked this chap as well, man I say that a lot now, anyways, heard about your trip and now I'm thinking Hmmmm, I should probably go on vacation...... Then I remember that all of my vacations are in Mississippi so I was like Yea....I can hold off on that.
Note: I'm a teen so my vacations are family vacationsSeem like you had a blast, and man I just resisted every urge to make a pun just now...., I'm going to probably have to wait half a year before I do anything like that, or even close to it, but I'm surely going to do something when I get the chance, oh and I've been wondering... Do you have a Steam account or PS3 I'm willing to add if you play either of those, but also I can only play on weekends though...Edit: My "Vacations" are family get-togethers, not joy-spending mostly
1580008 Well as far as the gaming, I play X-Box but I've never heard of Steam unless it's a multi game platform network, the only other thing would be I'd have to check on the time difference Okinawa is already a day ahead but as far as time of day it might be middle of the night over here, I'll see what I can do.
Okay though, thanks for telling me, and Steam is PC based
Author's note, This chapter was meant to be a back story on Sand Blast but then it kind of morphed into more time with Crazy Wing. Writing Crazy Wing as a ghost without making it too cheesy was head to the keyboard painful, but it opened up a whole other can of worms with Silver which kept the story going nicely I think. By the way if you're wondering what I look like typing up these stories you can picture me as that creepy Matrix nerd off of Grandma's Boy.
Hahaha, this chapter meaningful and funny, made my day, sorry that I've been late recently in the readings, you know how some things can get, but still like how its going. I like the send offs that this story keeps giving. Make me think what other send off can be right round the corner...
Author's note, So a couple chapter's ago I told my loyal readers the story would be wrapped up in the next couple chapters. Don't worry this is not the last chapter I tried to stretch it out as much as I could but the last two chapters are in the works right now. It's been one Tartarus of a ride, when I read back over the story from chapter one it's hard to believe I came up with the whole thing from scratch chapter by chapter, even I can't explain where some of the inspiration came from. Even though some of the chapters are rougher than the others this has to be the best piece of work I've put together so far and I'm glad I'll be able to finish it. I've said it before and I'll say it again, thank you all for the views and the favorites!