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Reflections of a Dark Past

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When Princess Luna is visited by her own dark subconscious, can she defeat her mind and vanquish Nightmare Moon forever? Inner conflict reigns in this story of self loathing and jealousy.

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Chapter 1 · 13th Sep 2012 · 660 words
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chapter 1 · 3rd Sep 2012 · 614 words
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chapter 2 · 7th Sep 2012 · 1,813 words
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chapter 3 · 9th Sep 2012 · 1,252 words
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chapter 4 · 4th Oct 2012 · 1,073 words
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FrontSevens #1 · Nov 1st, 2012 · · · chapter 2 ·

So, some thoughts... I hate to sound overcritical. Trust me, I mean well
There were several grammar errors and whatnot. I understand, English is a hard language to master. :)
Also, like most viewers of your story, I am a brony. ;) So, not everything has to be explained to the reader. ("Like all dragons, Spike had what seemed to be an insatiable appetite for gemstones.")
On that note, in general, you don't leave much to the imagination. The narrator explains everything, sometimes even repeating himself.
Otherwise, I like the premise of the story.
If you'd like more of a review, or specific examples, just let me know and I'll pm it to you