• Member Since 31st Aug, 2012
  • offline last seen Sep 2nd, 2012

Silly Pony


Don't expect any good from this. This is where I will put stories I'm too embarrassed (with good reason) to put under my regular name.

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Applejack is supposed to meet Rainbow Dash for another fun day in Ponyville, but things take a bizarre turn. A cold room. Painful lights. Poor writing. What is going on here?

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Comments ( 11 )

That description made me laugh.

This story sucks balls.

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I wrote this terrible story one day because I was feeling tired and needed to warm my mind up my writing literally the first things that came to my mind. I hope my little exercise here hasn't caused anyone too much pain. I'm a better writer than this, I promise.

:trollestia:

I actually didn't think the story itself was that bad... I think it had a rather touching theme. :twilightsmile:
It was sweet~:pinkiesmile:

Well, hmm. This isn't a bad story, or at least not bad enough to have earned the downvote brigade. I wonder if people are reacting to the story's structure of deliberate quotelessness and hitting the redthumb with a knee-jerk motion.

That having been said, it's not a great story, either. If you were to go back and edit it I'd really recommend playing around with the quotelessness, because it's not always clear whether a given non-italic line is Applejack speaking or a description of her thoughts, and there are a few stray "she saids" that make very little sense. It also wanders a bit thematically, not really feeling like it's telling a story that matters. For a writing warm-up exercise, though, it certainly seems like it did its job.

1195332

ur in fimfiction. where suddenly they think their opinion matters.

and since its open to even the dumbest of people, bigotry ahoy!

1195332

Hello, fancy meeting you here! I read No Regrets a few days ago and thoroughly enjoyed it. I did not expect that this "story" would receive a comment from you. If you would like to see some stories where I'm actually attempting to create something with literary merit look at Blue Hour Pony. It would be great to receive feedback from a writer of your caliber.

I thought the end was a bit funny.

And later that night Rainbow Dash and Applejack had a slumber party together where Rainbow Dash expressed her true feelings for Applejack and then they kissed a lot and they were happy and I’m too tired now to finish this story, but it’s good right?

:rainbowlaugh: That happened fast. :rainbowlaugh:

1195416 Noticed it on the front page, saw a description that didn't visibly explain the relentless downvoting, got curious as to whether story was trollin' :trollestia: or bad :trixieshiftleft:, read it and found neither. Glad you liked No Regrets!

I did wander over to your main account -- thanks for the pointer, although if you truly are trying to post stories here you don't want linked back to it, you might want to edit your comment so you're not telling the world who you are. :scootangel:

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