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Many ponies have lately disappeared in the Ever Free forest and people are getting worried. a group of volunteers go out into the forest to try and find the ponies that went missing, but instead find something much more dangerous.

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Icy_blue_orchid

Icy_blue_orchid #1 · Mar 27th, 2021 · · ·

Now I am curious as what the creature is! Thank you so much lol. But However I need to know something. How did the creature come to be? Why is it killing ponies?

BloodandRoses

BloodandRoses #2 · Mar 27th, 2021 · 1 · ·

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let me answer some of your questions for ya. the first one is what is the creature, that's quite simple it's a human.

the second one I can answer is why is it killing, well everyone has to eat.

the last question is a bit up to interpretation, where did it come from. for me I like to think that it has always been there, or at least has been there for a very long time.

ultimately I'll let you decide, it'll be interesting to see what other people come up with.

Jaycren

Jaycren #3 · Mar 28th, 2021 · 1 · ·

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I can honestly say this reads like a first story. Which is good. Watch for repeating words, you used clearing several times in the first paragraph. Try to rely more on dialouge and the senses to convey your point. There seemed to be a far amount of telling on this. Otherwise this was a good first attempt and as you write more what I mentioned will become more second nature. Good Job and I hope to see more from you.