The Touch Of The Pony

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Nephilim

Nephilim #1 · Sep 24th, 2020 · 2 · ·

It's too good. The use of vocabulary and syntax and all that lingo is amazing! Would it hurt to give me a few pointers on writing stuff like this? I love this rainbow pony so much and the way you wrote this really tugged at my heartstrings.

9spaceking

9spaceking #2 · Sep 25th, 2020 · · ·

more artful than sexual, well done

Natalya Nurmatovna

Natalya Nurmatovna #3 · Sep 25th, 2020 · 2 · ·

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Thank you.

Would it hurt to give me a few pointers on writing stuff like this?

Gladly!

1) Read, study, analyze and rewrite the works of the best English writers.

2) Finish a story first, then forget about it for a time from two weeks to a month. Focus on another project, another book, or another hobby. The point is to forget that the story exists, to achieve an impartial attitude towards your own work.

3) When the time is up, you return to the story and edit it sentence by sentence, making sure that all the words in a sentence are in the order that sounds and flows best. Such edits may take months at first, with hours spent on a paragraph alone, but you'll learn a lot about writing in the meantime and your own writing will change for the better. With practice both writing and editing will take less time, will become a second habit. When editing, compare your writing to the best of the best of the English language.

4) Do a second editing to remove uneccessary paragraphs, paragraphas that add nothing to the story.

5) Learn how to use rhetorical devices.

6) Read about as many different topics as you can - from Jung to Eliade to botany to Vajrayana to Abhinavagupta to geology and geography and beyond. This way you'll have a wide assortment of material for creating unique comparisons, similes, and metaphors.

7) Be absolutely ruthless to your own writing. Praise is good but it dulls you into false complacency. You'll believe you made it and, as a result, cease to make efforts. Always treat your writing impartially and seek areas of improvement (Is your prose too dry? The scenes too long? The action undeveloped? Vocabulary too small? Characters don't sound right? Don't know how to write a good plot?) Find a critically acclaimed writer who, in your opinion, overcame your particular problem, analyze the writer's methods, apply them in your work. Pay extreme attention to comments that spot flaws in your story.

8) Pursue your own writing vision no matter what others say but be ready to handle opprobrium and criticism. No matter how good of a writer you are, there still would be people who won't like you and who'll criticize your writing and your themes. Treat them and their opinions with respect. We are all different and so we like and dislike different writers and different styles - what for one is a masterpiece is turgid labyrinthine piece of purple crap for another - so be tolerant of "haters."

Spazz Kid

Spazz Kid #4 · Sep 26th, 2020 · · ·

The most mesmerizing is the overall effect. Rainbow’s lotus, pink in rest, in arousal bright red, stands apart from the overall azure of her skin and never fails to attract your attention. It indeed looks like a lotus floating on the aquamarine surface of a mountain lake, virginal, pristine, by humankind untouched. It’s an amazing feel – a swell of pride threatening to burst your chest – to know that you and only you are allowed to touch its petals, to gather viscid dew from their surface, to drink the dew from the source, from its deepest centre rimmed by those vibrant and delicate leaves.

I feel like I'm reading an article about Mountain Dew for some reason...

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