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Pony ballbusting artist and now also a writer. Living for the comments sake, so please leave a word!

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Suddenly her “real” name sounds a lot more ominous and testicular torsion-y

My other ideas for the title were "Tempest of Testicles" and "Tempest in a groincup". But at that point Tempest in the Groin had been the working title for so long I'd have felt weird changing it. :twilightsmile:

...and just now I realized you were referring to her real name Fizzlepop Berrytwist. Wow, that's almost basis for a new story in itself! :rainbowlaugh:

Thanks! Sounds like I did a good job then! :raritystarry:

I like the thought of Tempest casually busting Zephyr from time to time after this just to 'remind' him of the lesson he learned.


Be fun to also have her tutor him privately and make his balls match her fur color >:3

I doubt I'll get around to it myself, but if anyone wants to turn this into a trilogy the last part would be him getting fired, with Celestia punishing him for letting the intruders into the castle. And I think we all know what that would entail. :raritywink:

Hey, Contest Judge Dryspell here, giving you my quick review of your story. Sorry for coming at ya so late, by the way.

I'm not sure if this was intentional, but the story is pretty funny. Enough to have the comedy tag, even. I don't mean to take your kink less seriously then others, but I couldn't help but chuckle when the fact that Tempest had literally busted his balls came up so often. Again, I'm sorry if this wasn't your intention, that was just my interpretation. Other than that, it was well done. A little on the short side and not really about muscles, but something I could enjoy reading nonetheless.

Good luck to you in the contest!

This was a strange entry. That's not a bad thing, mind you. But it is a thing.

Everything from the premise to the feral nature of the characters to the characters themselves came together to create an experience that, for better or worse, isn't like anything else I've read for this contest.

It could've used a thousand words or so to let things really come together, but for what it is, I don't hate it.

Thank you for your participation in Muscle Mania 2020! We here on the judge's council wish you the best of luck!

This was hilarious. I loved every moment of it.
Great work.

This was a really good story. Wouldn't mind seeing more with the Pop mare.

Thanks! I had fun writing it. :twilightsmile:

WIsh there was more to this story. like a sequel.

Where they go on a date or something.

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