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Moonriseoversunset


Love writing and wished to branch out to see what other stories I could make. I hope you all enjoy what I write.

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Yay it’s up!!!!! I can’t wait to see what becomes of this story! Good luck :twilightsmile:

"LEAVE CADENCE!" Celestia bellowed in the Royal Canterlot Voice.

Man, if Celestia would have broken my eardrums I’m suing her.

It was used by Starswirl the Bearded to banish creatures or items that were a danger to ponies life.

So starswirl just said “f*ck the humans.”

She was sore and could barely move once they were all done. Afterward, they pumped her full of sedatives and unclipped her from the bed. They half dragged half carried Sunset out of the room. She couldn't bring together her thoughts enough to notice the direction they were going. She soon found out it was a bathroom. They tossed her inside and proceeded to grab the power hose and spray her down with cold water. She was then dragged fully to her next stop, a small white room with a grey bed. They threw her on the ground and proceed to walk out the door. It would be how Sunset spent the rest of her eight years in this world. Being a genie pig that was tested, poked, treated like a prisoner, and in a way, she was. She would stay that way for years to come, slowly losing herself and where she came from, until the day that she snapped.

Man, f*ck the government. Also, is this going to continue? Because I wanna see sunset rip all of them to pieces.

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It is going to continue. I'm just plastered with work and with the whole Corona virus my hours at work have increased, so I've been too tired to write. Though I plan on updating my first story soon then working on the next chapter. I already have a plan in motion for how the chapter will go. Also stsrswirl didn't flip the bird on the humans. He only knew that the human dimension was magicless. Thus magical artifacts are useless without the power to work, ie magic.

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If magic artifacts are useless then how were they able to be used?

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The Mirror is linked with magic and the Element of Magic is an object outside of regular magic. It doesn't follow the rules because the rules dont apply to something that powerful. The Element of Harmony at least my head canon, on the movie, is that the Element was able to access the magic from Equestria and thus in doing so created a foundation on which it can use its power. This foundation allowed other artifacts to work as well like the memory stone. A counterpoint would be the Sirens as they use magic before the blast in the first movie. But the way I see it the Sirens seem to have had energy/magic stored up and they needed to use it to cause enough to use their powers while also gaining magic and also sustaining enough to keep them alive. That's why Aria complains about fast food. The Element of Magic building its foundation caused them more access to magic and thus why they were able to affect the whole school with their suggestions in Rainbow Rocks.
If you read closely you'll see how Sunset will be able to use magic.

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So, your saying that because the main 6 used that rainbow magic in the first movie it caused a chain reaction that allows other magical artifacts to work? Also, your saying sunset is going to use magic in the next chapter?

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That's my head canon for why items that no one knew about suddenly started to act up and why the sirens became so powerful so quickly. Also yes but I wont explain too much.

Wow I am so intrigued! Can’t wait to see more! Definitely going to track and favorite this story! :heart:

I was getting a bit of a Korosensei and Elfen Lied vibe in this chapter when Sunset escaped.

I've only seen bits and pieces of those shows. I drew more inspiration from Hellsing Ultimate when Seras goes on a rampage.

Even if they had remained alert in the following minutes, nothing would have saved them from what would happen next.

Uh oh

"Pathetic. Is all you can do is glare at me?" The man's voice was deep guttural as he turned his back on SBJ 015.

You paralyzed her so of course that’s all she can do.

No one would dare to attack us, for if they did, you, along with the others, would destroy everything of worth those pathetic nations value.

Others?

With you under my command, sooner or later, Equus would become mine, and I would rule everything."

He knows about equestria?

"It's a shame, really. You should have heard 'her' calling out for you. Unfortunately for you, it's too late to save her. Had you joined me sooner, you might have been able to save her."

A frail and stammering voice broke its silence, "S-s-six-sixx-six-x-t-teen?"

Who?

I shall see if you can survive the forging process. Should you survive, there might be a place by my side, or perhaps not."

Forging process?

You did an excellent job of mastering this world's magic, but I suppose being a Goddess's student and being trained by killers would do that to someone.

The human world has magic?

Shadowy figures began to form around the building's perimeter as the girl shook with the amount of energy gathered in her body.

Who is it?

That was when the Aurora Borealis light up the sky broke through the clouded skies.

What’s that?

Two lone figures stared at the destruction, one above on top of the mountain, and the other staring out a room its edges glowed from the heated metal. Feeling a heated glare on them, the room's occupant looked above to see the glowing blue eyes stare at them in the darkness. Its glare burned into their skull.

Who are they?

" You can count yourself lucky to have survived. You were the only one to make it out," a voice sounded in their head. " You'll act as a messenger. You tell him, should he search for me. The weapon he groomed will turn on him and his country, leaving nothing but scorched earth and poisoned skies. "

Who is that?

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Others are sixteen and 1 through 15.
Equus is the name of the country in Equestria girls.
Sixteen will be introduced at a later date.
The lava, and something else that will be revealed in the next chapter.
Yes and no, Sunset is a beacon of power, magic, and thus creating magic and its slowly spreading into the world. Think of it like a bowl with food coloring small drops are slowly coloring it red or blue. She got her power when the electricity mixed with the portal. Essentially Sunset has magic but it was locked away when she went through the portal. The portal is comprised of magic and thus has not limited by the dimensional rules. When Sunset was electrocuted her magic rises to defend her but it was stuck in her. However when she interacted with the portal that caused the portals energy to be look for a suitable place to contain its power as it became unstable. That is why it broke in Equestria with Celestia. As one of the rules throughout the multiverse is that entry cant be created or destroyed, thus Sunset became like a sponge and now has both her magic and the energy of the portal. It one of the reasons she's able to use her magic. Shes unknowingly changing the rules for the dimension to allow her to use her power, the portal is just allowing her to use more of it and at a new intensity than she could in Equestria.
The others magic is seen as mutations allowing them to use powers based in science. Essentially they're espers.
Just guards surrounding Sunset.
Aurora Borealis is the northern lights. Which are caused by solar flares impacting the magnetic field around the earth. So Sunset essentially calls upon the sun and her own power enough to effect the earth's magnetic fields.
Sunset and Shining Armor.
General Grogar.

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Is that what they’re called, espers?

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I think. I just know that magic powers and esper powers are different. I know magic is more folklore and esper is more based in science.

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Interesting fact. Also, what were those two voices inside of sunset’s head?

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Well one is the demon we all love and hate and the other is the one that made Sunset remember her time in Equestria at Canterlot Castle with Celestia. In other words one is the demon and the other is a younger more happy Sunset.

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She has multiple personality disorder and a slight schizophrenia.

Comment posted by Pete100 deleted Jan 7th, 2021

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How many personalities?

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Three in total.
The demon is the one that was born from the traumatic experience.
The angle which is the younger innocent version of Sunset.
And the slate or the blank she listens to the other two and chooses a what to do.

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Have we seen the slate one yet?

Here's some examples. Also the fight with the between the voices. Slate is the one not italicized.

Doing as the voice said, she began to draw in the energy from the lava. As she raised up in the lava, the surrounding temperatures started to cool. As her head broke the surface, the surrounding lava cooled and turned to stone. The swirling lava pool that once burned with a metallic smoke was now nothing more than a slab of obsidian and basalt. Sunset herself shined like a miniature sun as she broke her way through the formed crystals and fine stone. With every breath, she expelled small wisps of fire.

Slow eyes looked towards the guards above the lava pit, pointing tranquilizers at her. Sudden hate consumed her as the guards fired the darts. The darts came within five feet of her before they were sent flying up into melted glop. She raised her left arm up and made a slamming motion. A firey appendage appeared, connected to her hand, above a guard's head before it mimicked her motion. The ghostly image crashed down as the guard's screams of terror were cut short. The hand lifted up, showing the guard's crushed and charred body that burned with a purple flame. A swatting motion led to the second guard being cleaved in half. The upper half was crisped and smoking as it fell out of the spectral hand. The lower half flopped down, as a pile of blood formed from the torn half.

Lowering her arm, the fiery arm vanished as she stared at her hands. Slowly clenching her hands caused her arms to glow as bright as the sun. Her hands sparked with electricity as she changed the form of her fire into a more chaotic form of energy. Electricity sparked around the room as it struck the unseen barrier. Letting the focused magic from her arms stopped both the lightning and the glowing of her hands. Looking at the walls, Sunset aimed at the room's entrance before lifting her hand towards it with a closed fist. A fire like a blow torch slammed the walls and melted through moments after it slammed against the door. The flame bent the metal as it forced outwards from the force and heat. After stopping, Sunset once again drew in the heat and flames recovering some of her spent magic.

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So in other words, it’s like that troupe of having the angel and demon on your shoulders? Also, you didn’t push reply so I didn’t see this until now.

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In a sense but they are more prominent. The best way I can think of it would be Raven from Teen Titans in the episode "Nevermore".

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Ohh. One more question, is sunset unbeatable?

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No shes not. She certainly is powerful but not unbeatable with the amount of magic she uses corresponds with her bodies condition. The more magic she uses the weaker she is after and that's only speaking of her physical capabilities.

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Her mental state can affect her ability to perform in a fight.

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So she’s powerful but her body might not be able to keep up?

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Yep. Think of her as a bottle inside of a bottle. The first bottle has an infinite amount of water. When Sunset uses her magic the water is released into the second larger bottle. But it can only hold so much water before it explodes.

I have other things that I want to keep quiet for know, as they will appear in later chapters.

Comment posted by Pete100 deleted Jan 8th, 2021

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That’s an odd way to put it.

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If you have anymore questions dont be afraid to ask.

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You said her mental state can affect her ability to perform in a fight. How exactly?

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In my fic magic must be calculated so if she is distracted with something else or if she is not mentally stable than she will waste magic and not be as effective as she could be. She will also be prone PTSD hallucinations.

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Hey sorry I didnt see your comment. I swear my notifications are all screwed up and I was just looking back through my story and saw your comment. I really appreciate your favorite and tracking.

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You read my mind Pete. Rip them limb by limb Sunset!:flutterrage:

Also Moonrise, I still like to think that every world has magic and Starswirl is just an idiot who takes the easy way out and think that other wolrds don't have magic.:ajbemused:

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I might have explained that poorly. Magic for me is like how you state it, however I like to think of it like dirt in that its everywhere but without a catalyst it's just dirt it needs water, i.e. the Elements of Harmony, the potential for magic was always there but it was too scattered and shapeless. When the Element of Magic was brought over it solidified the magic potential making artifacts and banished magical creatures more powerful which is why they dont appear before the first movie. However with the explosion of the portal magic was amplified but remains shapeless which will be explored later in the book.

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You read this story, too?

Actually, that would make sense. There are possibly millions of dimensions, equestria can’t possibly be the only one with magic.

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Wow, that’s a lot. I may have gotten a headache.

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I mean it’s a lot to take in.

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