Interesting style of first person writing you have here, it works really well so far.
It feels almost blasphemous to make such a small criticism to a very well done introduction, but one thing did bug me a little - near the beginning "apple buck harvest" grates on my eyes a little, buck and harvest are both verbs describing the event, in this case both mean to gather the fruit. (AJ uses the phrase "apple buck season" in the show referring to harvest time in order to get around this)
Anyways - I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter! (and poor rarity, AJ's gonna steal Spike from her! )
Hmm, if you keep the pace and bump the details a notch, you can make something really good of this. Also, bare in mind that I don't comment on fics unless they show potential
You my good sire have my attettion, I shall be watching such an amazing idea and story, I love this pairing and am really hoping for more, I shall aid you if you ever need any ideas, help or advice, and FINALLY....someone does Aj's voice right for once.
All I can say is that I am in immediate need of more of this story, AppleSpike is one of my favorite pairings and you writing a fic with involving it only makes you awesome in my book.
I kinda hope this will not be so explicit, for some reason i can't figure in my head the figure of teenage-spike... Anyway you,sir, caught my attention, i'm looking forward for another chapter ;)
I love big mac^^ He always knows exactly whats going on but never says anything to it. He basically just walked in on his sister asturbating and all he says is "Keep it down" Gotta love the guy^^
Ah know it ain't exactly "normal" for a pony to find a dragon physically attractive, but the heart wants what it wants, right?
Um, Applejack, I don't mind to be rude but are you sure that this is your heart that's speaking her part here? Sounds more like simple lust to me...but what does a male understand a womens heart, I guess?
my sparity boner noooo
BUT ANYWAYS, I'm interested, since I've only seen one other AppleSpike fanfic dedicated to the pairing.
Why My good sir I do find this to be quite interdasting please memefolder.com/image/697.jpg
Somehow I feel this wont end well for Spike even if he gets laid.
It's not AppleDash, so I give you points for that. I like the Applejack/Spike shipping pair more, anyway.
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*satisfied nod*
Quite the enjoyable little read good sir. Please, continue!
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Apple Spike, the ship that got me into pony fics...
I'll be the odd man out here and say I want some plot.(not that way, I mean in the literary sense)
Still, this is good
...I'm not even gunna touch this one .
this is quite pleasant, i may need to stalk er' watch this dude just to see what happens next.
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1147924 yes, weird boners are often a side effect of viewing most honest pony's masturbatory fantasies.
I like this a lot. Well-written, in character for the ship, and generally well described.
Eager to read more
Interesting style of first person writing you have here, it works really well so far.
It feels almost blasphemous to make such a small criticism to a very well done introduction, but one thing did bug me a little - near the beginning "apple buck harvest" grates on my eyes a little, buck and harvest are both verbs describing the event, in this case both mean to gather the fruit. (AJ uses the phrase "apple buck season" in the show referring to harvest time in order to get around this)
Anyways - I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter!
(and poor rarity, AJ's gonna steal Spike from her! )
First thoughts for Spike:
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Now? Well.....all I can say now is:
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.....Well, the direct approach then!
Being a big fan of these two, I approve!
Hmm, if you keep the pace and bump the details a notch, you can make something really good of this. Also, bare in mind that I don't comment on fics unless they show potential
great chapter can't w8 to read more
Let's get it on!
Now...proceed... :3
Sad?
Oh noes.
Oh, and I eagerly await the next installment.
you sir are my new hero.
Hm...
Can't really make any constructive/destructive criticism on the plot right now...
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I shall watch this with great interest!
You my good sire have my attettion, I shall be watching such an amazing idea and story, I love this pairing and am really hoping for more, I shall aid you if you ever need any ideas, help or advice, and FINALLY....someone does Aj's voice right for once.
All I can say is that I am in immediate need of more of this story, AppleSpike is one of my favorite pairings and you writing a fic with involving it only makes you awesome in my book.
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(insert me gusta and fapping memes here)
not bad at all, keep up the good work.
I kinda hope this will not be so explicit, for some reason i can't figure in my head the figure of teenage-spike... Anyway you,sir, caught my attention, i'm looking forward for another chapter ;)
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I'm laughing like an idiot, out so loud you can't even imagine XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
I like a fave and a track for u sir
My first thought was I will read this and proble not like it. WRONG it's is so awazing can't wait to read more
Big Mac certainly isn't bashful about telling his sister to stfu and quit masturbating.
Hmm, a first person Applejack fic that's also a clopfic with a crack pairing?...Colour me intrigued.
Every time a story like this gets posted, the mane 6 and 3 princesses take turns raping me...... So please post more!
Hmmmmm... I don't often see Applejack portrayed in this light... I require Spike's reaction!
3/5 mustaches because anything can be improved. Good start though.
I love big mac^^ He always knows exactly whats going on but never says anything to it. He basically just walked in on his sister asturbating and all he says is "Keep it down" Gotta love the guy^^
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coming from an incerpt of " The company of quick people" I would have to agree.
Must continue reading
Um, Applejack, I don't mind to be rude but are you sure that this is your heart that's speaking her part here?
Sounds more like simple lust to me...but what does a male understand a womens heart, I guess?
Thats very forward.
How I felt the entire time reading this:
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And it was awesome.
I'm sure Applejack will want less fantasy next couple of chapters.
Friend reactions:
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Lust, love same thing
That...was Steamy
I already adore AJ and with this certain perspective of her...Goddamnit, I'mma keep readin'
Well that escalated quickly
Geez AJ, horny much?
DAYUM @#$% GOT STEAMY REAL QUICK!