ExplicitEscritoire
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Mmhmhmhhmhm...I wish I had my true ponysona back then. But Electric wouldnt fit with RD. Meh.
To cut out possible confusion, PinkieSmile is my boyfriend :3
> I hope you won't let the fact that the OC wasn't super thought out change your opinion too horribly.
Err... I'll let someone else deal with this.
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Nono, tell me what you honestly think. I'm not super fond of the OC myself, and neither is the creator. It's an old OC, for an old story :3
Story of one of my OCs right there XD
Anyway the story was decent to day the least, and i say thats awful sweet of you for doing something like this.
1129466: Your a lucky guy dude
And as always, my signature gif:
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Byes
And heres a RD, because I can.
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Seems nice
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I lieky that picky. For some reason I want to take the straw out of the glass though. Its gonna fall! 
And hehe...I know I am. I fee- (Gonna stop the sappyness right here right now)
As a gift for your boyfriend you......wrote a story about his OC bonking Rainbow Dash?
That's...different
But whatever floats your boats I guess.
This I like
Nice work. Best clop Ive read... Dont know why I gave it a try but it was not as disgusting as most of the clop out there.
Pretty awesome. WOOT!
Double Rainboom~
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Good so far
You should have done rd x rainbowblitz from on cross and arrow
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The other pony is my boyfriend's OC :3 he's crazy about RD, so I clopped them.
1145723huh well it is a good pair rdxrb
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Nawt to be rude or anything, but hooves can't bleed, nor can a horse/pony feel when someone has bitten their hoof... A horse/ponies hoof is like solid brick on the outside of their leg. Understand?
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Ponies also can't be technicolored, fly, talk, cast magic, make dresses, etc. But for the sake of not being a dick, I'll remember it for future references :3 thanks for pointing it out~
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Same logic.
Pretty good, although the ending could be a bit more drawn out.
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I was actually waiting for this comment to pop up. The reason I shut the story down at the end without having too much detail into the sex thing is because I didn't want it to be "sex sex sex sex sex". I did something I don't usually do at all, and I actually cut down on the cloppyness by a lot. I did it because of the person I was writing it for. It wasn't somebody who commissioned me, it was somebody far more important than that.
Kinda generic, but hey, there is clop ahead, I'm not gonna judge yet!
1130502 Hilarious .gif and SmittyG to boot. You are awesome.
ANYWAY to the story: criticizing 'n' stuff
"Ho shit, did I forget to mention that they were clopping on a distant cloud?"
-I'll start off by saying I've read a fair bit of clop fiction. I like to think I understand some of the psychology that goes into it to keep a reader, ahem, interested. This right here, is jarring. It jolts you out of whatever state of emotion you were in to the state of "Why did the author put this here of all places?" Granted it could've been worse; "Oh, and don't worry about any fluids staining stuff, they're on a cloud you dumbfuck!" ...But either way that is a bit out of place, it is better to establish a setting early in the story.
On your repetitive use of the word "clop" in the beginning--clop, litterally (for the fandom), means masturbate (in our case, to ponies; in their case, in general). THEREFORE: you more or less said, "Rainbow Dash can't wait to masturbate with her new lover!".
I am not a good writer IMO, but I like to think I can give some advise every now and then. Yeah I know TL;DR for most people but whatever, I think I just broke my personal record for longest comment.
By about 3 times.
Bad attempt at constructive criticizim sorry, It's 2:53 ATM and I should be asleep.
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Yes, thank you for the compliment.
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Nono, any bit of criticism helps :3 to cover the "Clopping" thing, I've always had this notion that they would also call sex that. I guess it's because I've written so many fap-fics that the word sex gets a little dull after a while. There are other ways to say it, though. I'll keep an open mind about that in any future writings. Secondly, this story wasn't proofread so I wouldn't be surprised if there are several things wrong with it. On to the "Ho shit" part, that was a personal request from my boyfriend. I should have stated that in the story description .w.; I could probably edit it out for the public version, however, so just let me know what you think is best. Also, if you have any suggestions for words other than clop/clopping, please let me know :3
Ok, so you wrote a story about your boyfriends OC doing Rainbow Dash?
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*Reads the story description again, just to make sure.* Umm. Yeah. Pretty sure that's what I said.
I wonder why I keep getting this question.
have a moustache.
listen to this during the race:
1161541 Random note of randomness!!!
That used to be my avatar.
My normal comment:D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww