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>She quietly screams
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What. Did. I. Just. Read? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_smile.png
100% dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_hmph.png Approved. Oh and Bon-bon too. Can't forget her. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_gaze.png
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Heh, sorry, I didnt mean for it to seem that way.
Its Starting too fast... you should make up the story a little but its a great story anyway
Yeah, it was quick, but nonetheless good. I haven't read any clopfics that focus on the Nurse, so it's nice to see those coming along nicely.
Well done, mate.
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Yeah apologies for that, this story was me putting my toe in the metaphorical sea that is Clopfiction writing. Im currently working on a new story starring the Princess of the Sun and the Princess of the Night. Hopefully that'll turn out better.
I tried to hold back anything negative I might have said, so let me gently say you need to space the lines so top and bottom are not touching. Its a choir to read without any visible breaks to let us know we can bookmark a line and find it easily, instead of having to look through multiple lines just to find our place again.
Perhaps a little more story, I know you wanted to keep it short and like you said this was rushed but you still could have put a little more for us to feel before or during the sex. I have nothing ill to say about the sex.
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Dually noted, will be included in my next story I can promise you that. Also, on a sidenote, thank you for the constructive criticism.
Only real problem i noticed was this, "Alas, you arrive at her southern lips" A very poor word choice as 'alas' is a negative word, synonymous with unlucky and unfortunate.
i don't think ponies have a hymen...
1036306 its just for virginity, even so everything has virginity in one way or another
1035558 I love this, if it could be continued that would be cool, but i figure you probably dont want to. Although i absolutley love redheart so this was really nice
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I'll see where i can take this...perhaps I'll write a better backstory for this about them dating and whatnot
1038325 Thanks, i'm glad to see you'll give it a try, i appreciate it!
1034359 I believe the politically correct term is "oxymorons."