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phantom ghost hunter
I like many different stories by the way boo timber light yay flashlight.
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I'm trying to remember if you adapted "Zuko Alone" or not. I checked, and you didn't. That's too bad. That episode did a lot to paint Zuko in a more sympathetic light. Timber would have really benefited from having a little more backstory. Then again, "The Storm" gave both Aang and Zuko some needed backstory which both Flash and Timber are missing here.
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Well I can probably work in some flashbacks but I'll see what I can do.
Yeah, we're not missing anything by skipping over the school episode.
10146121
Oh okay any other thoughts?
10146124
Your characters seem to lose their own personalities and take on the personalities of the Avatar characters they're playing the more you write them. They're hardly recognizable as the characters from the show. Unfortunately, that's not a good thing.
10146130
Hmm well I don't really know how else to right them but I would say Timber has better personality now.
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No argument there.
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Also Flash isn't acting like Aang you know he's not a vegetarian or anything.
10146309
True, but he's not quite as fleshed out as he could be. It doesn't help that you keep giving him Aang's lines, so even if he doesn't act like Aang, he still kinda talks like him.
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Well I'm watching the actual show to go on but I'll try to change it up. But just for the record the next chapter will be more about Shining.
That's out of character for her. In MLP, schedules and plans were HER thing.
Umm, if I remember correctly, Flash ran into Meadowbrook, not Mistmane.
10147507
oh right thanks for pointing that out.
Why would an Earth Kingdom island have such a stereotypically fire-related name?
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I didn't think it mattered but if you have a better name I'd love to hear it (not sarcastically I would really like to hear it).
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Quartz Island?
10147935
hu okay then.
She isn't quite sympathetic enough, but Chryssy does make an amazingly creepy old lady.
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Ya I couldn't think of anyone else to use for that part but I think It worked out after all she controlled shining armor in the show before.
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Also just so you know I'm mostly excited for the boiling rock chapter but that's a little ways away.
I just hope the scenes Twilight shares with Timber end up significantly less shippy than Katara's scenes with Zuko.
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okay but question in the series the next episode is about the dragon thing but in my fic it would be moles do you think I should skip that episode I mean earth bending doesn't work the same as fire bending.
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The point of the next following episodes is that they gave each of the characters time to bond with Zuko. You can skip that episode, but you'll likely need to replace it with a different, possibly original bonding episode for Flash and Tmber.
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Okay I'll need to think of something got any ideas?
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All that's coming to mind is a backstory episode.
Well, having Marble and Limestone escape with them was a nice touch, especially since they'll stop being relevant in the next chapter.
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Ya in the actual episode his friends stayed behind the second time so I made a change in my fic be ready up next we meet the man who killed Twilight velvet (or is it Velvet Sparkle?) well be ready.
"The Boiling Rock" was better.
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Ya I had actually been excited for that one but I do have a question do you think the ember island players episode was important or should I skip it?
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I don't think it was important, but it did give us a much needed break before the finale.
Hmm, if Flash had any reservations about killing Gladmane, you kinda glossed over them.
10376234
Your right well I'll figure out something.
10376234
You I'm not sure if this is bad news or good news but I might put this fic on hiatus for a while because I have a new fic idea I want to try also do you have any idea about the names of Flash Sentry's parents?
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Every writer seems to either make up their own or borrow someone else's.
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Oh okay also what until you see the pun in my new fic.
This feels rushed. It's like you were writing it just to finish it and get to the end, which I can understand. At the same time, because you were probably rushing through it, this chapter suffers from a lot of the same shortcomings as previous chapters.
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Ya I am kind of in a hurry to finish (also I was wondering when you would drop a comment).
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I've been busy.