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[1] I can't tell if this is referring to Pixel getting her revenge, or if Pixel is getting revenge for her father?
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Fixed! Thank you for pointing that out, I really appreciate it!
so the story is going to end in the next chapter because the whole point of said story was about a technomancer in equestria, and now that he is dead the story is basically over, great
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Read the authors notes. Also there is still a chance for Pixel to save him. Though there will most likely be some permanent consequences. Assuming I can think of some that would fit and make sense. Partial memory loss for example.
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Fixed.
A bit of both really but it's mainly her getting her revenge.
Uh, this is a bit embarrassing but I wrote parts of the past two chapters weeks ago. So I originally wrote it so that Pixel would get killed rather than Gerhardt getting hurt. I had to change it since people voted "Gerhardt" in the poll. I guess a few mistakes slipped through in the editing process.
question. when the gods in the mlp universe find out about the interference (likely soon as two greater spirits are fighting and that worth attention from them) in their world from a outsider would it be likely that they would assist in helping the human empire and catching and slaying the nature god?
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It's possible. I guess I could set up another poll to see if the Gods of MLP sense Silvanus helping Natura. They wouldn't react very kindly to that.
Amazing chapter, and I'm very much looking forward to seeing Discord rip Natura a new one, even if he might need a bit of help to do so. With that said, I'm hoping you don't kill off or neuter Pixel's dad(can't spell his name and too lazy to try lol)
As far as ideas....well, something that could be fun is the return of the wendigos. Given Equestria has gone to hell in a hand basket, there's undountably enough reason to justify their appearance. And given they're winter spirits....the cold they emit would kill nature in vast amounts, weakening Natura enough for Discord to finish her off. Actually, building on this, Discord could secretly release Wendigos across Equestrian for the express purpose of killing nature. Something like that would definitely be a good way to show off his clever cunning.
As another idea, perhaps Discord helps with project Divinity and becomes a full fledged god, since I don't think it'd be lesser god.
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All good suggestions! Thank you for your input!
And don't worry. I know that if I killed off Gerhardt the story would end. I don’t plan on ending the story here. However, I will be trying to think of permanent consequences he could suffer from receiving so much damage to his brain. Not enough that he would be "neutered", but just enough that it would have some impact on the story.
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mabey you could have his soul damaged slightly and then have both his kids get together and learn from eachother and eventaly accend their dad so he will be at full strenght again.
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Those two "Nature" Spirits are so F***** DEAD RIGHT NOW!!!!!!! It's bad enough that the human Kingdom got miltary casualties, sadly.
And even Gerhardt "died"???!!! WHY did that have to happened???!!! He's the main character, and he should have back up bodies, right?! I hope you don't makes his life harder than it already is.
But, why does the f***** Ponies and Equestria get in the cross fire as well?! They haven't done any crap against this spirit a-hole??!!
I hope that both Celestia, Luna, Twilight, and Discord has made ENOUGH!!! And teach this stupid invading deity not to f*** with their species and their planet!! And I bet that it will have heavily consequences on having Equestria DESPISE nature spirits now, or finally learn about God-like beings.
And Celestia, Luna, Discord, and Twilight will probably have to talk to their own gods, and possibly be pissed at them that they haven't notice Silvanus/Natura, or stop this massacre much sooner!
Edit: I'm finished typing, if that's what your wondering?
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Great suggestion, however I personally wouldn't include that last part. Him healing. I do intend for the consequences to be permanent, or at the very least long lasting. If he survived this without any serious repercussions that would make him a mary sue and I don't want that.
I may actually use the part about his soul being damaged, however.
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Oh, you wanted a response. Okay. I thought what you were saying was just a statement.
Anyway, Celestia insulted Silvanus by saying he's just as bad as Caedis and as we have seen all throughout the story Silvanus is extremely petty and tends to hold a grudge. So that's Silvanus' reason.
As for Natura, actually the ponies did a lot to her. Enslaving her for 50,000 years. She doesn't care that they forgot she ever existed, all she cares about is the fact they manipulated her against her will. So yeah, unlike Silvanus she actually has a legitimate reason to be doing all of this.
I won't spoil anything though so you'll see what will happen in the next chapter or so.
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I wasn't actually tying to make a "statement". I'm just mad at what happened to our heroes. And I do want a response from you on how this is going to end up?
As for Silvanus/Natura? While Silvanus is just a major hypocritical heartless bastard!!! And he gets what he truly deserves!!!!!
And while Natura does have a "legitimate" reason. It doesn't frickin matter if Discord, possibly Deus, or even the Equestria Gods themselves be super pissed, and wants to beat those two to death for their sins/crimes against the Ponies/Equestria, and Gerhardt hopefully.
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A statement as in you were just saying something. Not a statement as in the idiom "making a statement". I guess I should have been more clear about that.
Also I missed the part about Gerhardt in your last review so I'll just respond to it now. Well Gerhardt isn't dead so much as he is dying. Pixel can still save him, though it won't be easy. And unfortunately this is going to have to make his life a bit harder somehow. Such is the cost of living through something so severe. I already have a few ideas. But they shouldn't be horrible to the point that the story is no longer any fun to read so don't worry.
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I guess I understand on what you trying to say on what a statement is, thanks.
Anyways, as for Gerhardt? I hope that eventually, he can get thru this. And be more stronger/smarter, and have a better durable body than ever before.
Just like Luke Skywalker did between the end of Star Wars Episode 5: The Empire Strikes Back and Episode 6: Return of the Jedi ( Still didn't like of what happened to him in the Sequel Trilogy. His Legends version is a bit better. ).
And Avatar Aang and Korra from their own "down but not out" moments in their T.V. Series.
Finally, I hope the "consequences" is not as worse as what happened to the Emperor/God-Empeor of Mankind in Warhammer 40K. You know what I mean?
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No, the consequences won't be that bad. That would be so bad that the story stops being fun to read. Just bad enough that it doesn't seem too unrealistic. It will have an impact on the story but it won’t be unreasonably bad.
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Okay then.
You know in truth actual nature is the purest form of neutrality it doesn’t care if you live or die and that plant you found is as likely to be something that could be used as a disinfectant as it is to be something that will kill you when ingested to that end these spirits of nature are entirely self contradictory though a concept is an understanding not the actual thing ie plants, animals, bacteria and all the other things that make up nature would still exist even if we didn’t have the concept of it and seeing as spirits of things in your universe are the living form of concepts that means that means that Pixel could just change what it is the concept of nature is called then a spirit of nature couldn’t exist because everything that makes up nature wouldn’t be nature it would be something else
Also how would Natura (or any nature spirit or god) react in a better mindset if someone from our world pointed out that by controlling nature they are doing something unnatural as in our world nature is not something that attacks you because it hates you predators attack because of hunger or for territorial reasons, herbivores defend themselves and plants only hurt you if they are particular ones when touched
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Changing what a concept is called would just be renaming the concept, not eliminating it in its entirety. And nature specifically is a concept that is sort of intrinsic to understanding things and is going to always be a concept so long as organic life and natural processes exist and there is an intelligent species to categorize it.
Heck even if it doesn't have a name at all people would still understand that these plants are organic and grow on their own in large areas all over the world without outside influence and the weather and seasons happen on their own without outside influence. Whereas other things only happen so long as there are people to make it happen. Thus nature would still be a concept even without a proper name.
Thus to destroy the concept of nature one would have to either eliminate all organic life or convert it into artificial life and would have to eliminate all other natural processes such as the weather and seasons and make them inherently unnatural. Thus they would have to make such natural processes completely controlled and potentially even purely technological in functionality. Thus for nature to no longer be a concept then there cannot be anything that can be defined as natural and knowledge of such things would have to be erased from the minds of everyone who knew anything about them.
Thus Pixel's desire to destroy the concept of nature in its entirety as revenge is very extreme. But such is the influence of the Alicorn Amulet, especially in a situation like this where it could exploit her emotions so easily.
Anyways, Silvanus wouldn't care. Neither would most gods of nature. It's their job to manage nature. Granted, Silvanus is most definitely perverting what it means to be a god of nature by exploiting it in the way he is. His job is to manage it and oversee its general health on a planetary scale. However he is using his power over nature in ways that were not intended for his job. Sure causing a random hurricane, drought, or famine here and there to punish mortals is completely within the perview of nature gods. However Silvanus isn't doing that. He is actively manipulating nature on a massive scale to exterminate a species out of spite and a desire for revenge. So yeah, he would care even less than a normal god of nature.
As for the spirits of nature like Natura, well, they aren't controlling nature so much as they ARE nature. So to them it's the same as you or me using our limbs to move. So everything they do is natural in their universes even if it would be unnatural in ours. Different physics different rules.
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his soul was being tracked and had a teather of it didnt it? mabey you can toy with the idea that the part if was connected to is lost. you could have it be something like his magic not working properly or if you want to make it so this makes him kick it up a notch you could have it be something like his race identity. mabey the gods of the mlp world see this soul that has a chunk missing and find out about everything and as such help him but make it so he has to agree to become a pony is body and soul (i dont think he would agree to ignore the human empire but him being forced back into being organic and having feelings could be a good price to pay for his life and soul repair)
He has functional orbital cannons??! Why didn't he use them before he got almost killed? Like if there was ever a time where it was appropriate to use them the time where you're saying anyone not already gone is already dead would clearly be the time to do it.
Gerhardt aside from access codes has both knowledge and experience building and working with high tech equipment and fighting, the loss of which would severely set back their progress and they need every bit of it just to hold back the current enemy.
I think we were gearing up for a battle with silvanus at some future point which likely won't occur with pixel as she's too preocupied with natura and I don't know that she would care about silvanus even if she wasn't unless something happens and she learns silvanus set the whole thing up.
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He didn't use them for a few reasons. One, he knows they aren't going to be an instant "kill" on the Nature Spirit. Yeah, they would hurt it but they wouldn't destroy its body. Granted that would have been more effective than what they were already doing, but still.
Second, he knew that using them while he and the princesses and Deus were in such close proximity was a very bad idea since they would have gotten caught in the crossfire. Granted, they could have solved that by teleporting away but if they did that then Natura would likely do the same. Since Ponyville was already destroyed he didn't exactly want Natura to teleport away since if she teleported to a city and he had to use the orbital cannons on her, he would destroy the city in the process. Deus wouldn't care about this particular concern in the least, thus the reason why he was more willing to actually use them than Gerhardt was.
Third, if you pay attention to the sequence of events you will realize he didn't really have enough time between everything that was happening to actually order them to fire. It happens like this: 1. Natura breaks free and destroys the barrier protecting Ponyville. 2.Gerhardt shuts down the portal arch to buy time and has to explain the situation to the princesses. 3. Natura destroys Ponyville and sends Gerhardt and the others flying. 4. Luna tells him to go get the Main Six and he does so. 5. He brings the Main Six to Ponyville and the Elements of Harmony fail to do anything to Natura. 6. He teleports the Main Six back to Canterlot and then gets swatted away like a fly. 7. Pixel teleports in from the Crystal Empire and sees him get swatted like a fly. 8. Natura attacks Pixel and ends up mortally injuring Gerhardt (he's not dead, just dying. Silvanus is celebrating his "death" prematurely).
No where in that sequence of events does he really have time to order the orbital cannons to fire, unless he wanted to kill himself and Deus and seriously injure the Princesses. He obviously doesn't want that thus he never actually has a chance to use them. And he hasn't given Deus the codes because he doesn't trust him with them, for obvious reasons.
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Even if I do decide to go the route of Gerhardt's soul being damaged as Silvanus' tether is ripped out, I won't be making Gerhardt a pony. That's just not happening. That's not what this story is about. However in the hypothetical scenario in which I did make him a pony, he would just build another mechanical body to replace his organic pony body. And that body would more than likely be human like his current one. Hands are just way too convenient to give up, especially in his line of work. I mean why waste energy on using telekinesis to manipulate tools when you can just use tools with your hands without wasting energy on it?
Not that I'm dissing your idea. I'm definitely not. I suppose it would provide an interesting twist in its own right if done correctly. However, it's just that I would rather not go in that particular direction with my story. Him becoming a pony.
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I think you already have a grasp on what sort of injury he should take. He's already questioning his own strength and goes to great lengths to ensure pixel's safety and he's doing dangerous experiments to help him get stronger. You can use this experience to dial his anxiety and paranoia up to 10.
Maybe it'll be like that one dnd greentext where an adventuring father dies, and the daughter uses a wish ring for her father to save her, and since children see their parents as invincible, he gets resurrected into basically superman. Except in this case it would be accidentally rebuilding him and his partially dissipated soul into an actual god. That would be cool. Dunno if the author would go for it though.
Maybe deus could see the chance to gain a stronger ally in the fight for humanity and take the partial soul and do like gerhardt did to make him, except with a larger portion of a soul as the base.
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Deus doesn't have the morals stopping him from doing the thing, anyway.
I kinda wish that Gerhardt is fixed just enough that he can still walk, talk and do stuff so he can rip Isabelle's heart out just for fun.
"I don't believe it" - Stanislavsky.
All because of fake emotions. Yes, I will continue to nitpick on this. Unless his EPU got permanently re-fused in a way that he can no longer access it.
But you know, I appreciate not handling out plot armor.
And Silvanus affecting the half-elf's mind... Why didn't he try to alter Geary mind then?
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He does love her even if that love is artificial. So that's exactly how he would react and the alicorn amulet would only make things even worse. He wouldn’t immediately shut off his love for her because he wouldn't be thinking about that at the time. No, the only thing he would be thinking about is that his daughter was dead/dying and that he wanted revenge and later to save her. Maybe after he calmed down a bit he would think to change his emotions, but not at the moment all of that was happening when it was still fresh in his mind.
Also, Silvanus didn't try to alter Gerhardt’s mind because Gerhardt didn't want anything that Silvanus could potentially use against him. Unlike Isabelle there wasn't even a single part of him that wanted to free Natura. He didn't want to kill the Changelings, though he was prepared to do so if they forced his hand. There wasn't a single part of him that genuinely wanted to hurt the ponies. There wasn't a single part of him that wanted anything like that. So Silvanus couldn't enhance those emotions like he did to Isabelle because they didn't exist in the first place and a more direct form of mind control would have been too obvious to really use against him as he would suddenly start acting completely counter to his usual behavior completely without warning or apparent reason.
And with some of the things I have planned for Deus, I would say he is most likely going to get the kick in the balls he needs to genuinely want to change. That is if I can write them well enough.
Also, there would have been even less plot armor with Gerhardt getting hurt and having his magic crippled by having it cause him excruciating pain every time he tried to use it. However after seeing the rather negative reaction to the original versions of chapter 27 and 28 I decided to go back and change it because I thought this would be a better direction to take the story. Though I am still debating whether or not I should rewrite chapter 28 to kill off Pixel. Anyways, you can find links to the original versions of the chapters in the author's notes at the end of the chapters if you’re interested. Chapter 27 is pretty much the same while chapter 28 has changed quite a bit.