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My god fox is a bloody asshole!!!!
Good chapter, also I was hoping zero would break Foxes leg, but aside from that pretty good, kinda scary that fox had gone so far to aim a blaster at Zero
Halo reference.
*<>* Fox is wäy out of charater . fight should have gone to protogen not fox (imo)- or at least a draw- this chapters pacing feels rushed especially in fox and zeros meeting into fight-
10082901
My guess is he was holding back for Krytal's sake. Fox is still some one she cares about so he didn't want to brutalize him, least of all in front of her.
pisk`cute
Fox Dick hed
*Cue halo music here*
Going to be honest. With how the action suddenly stopped when Zero's visor cracked I expected him to go ape shit on the fox . Probably a broken bone or two. And maybe he was but the gun/plasma weapon/energy blaster/wazer wifle always is the Ebrake in these scenarios. Was a okay chapter but I felt like it was a bit rushed. Also where the hell did everybody else go in that scene?
10082924
And his visor got cracked as well...does that mean Zero is secretly Master Chief?
Tag Falco for surveillance of Zero.
You remember Zero can lift tons with his arms? explained to be why wouldn’t he use this strength to stop fox, I’m not telling you to kill him but why not incapacitate him? One push with his unnatural strength a fox would be down for the count, Also why was Zero blinded by the light of the flashlight, doesn’t his visor adjust to the light? I’m not trying to make fun of you or anything I’m just pointing out some errors in logistic.
10082946
Probably just watched from the sidelines, also what’s a Wazer Wifle? I’m genuinely curious. Is that actually a thing or just a typo?
"Can't'
10083024
sorry I don't know what happened to my editor
10083019
It's just a fallout 3 and 4 weapon that came to mind when typing those all in. Also I am pretty sure that's how you spell laser rifle in OwO as well. So it fits.
Zero is very clever. No use of cybernatics to overpower his enemy and no use of weapons to keep at a hand to hand fight. He let himself get injured to show his dedication to willingly put himself in harms way to keep her save. Than Fox even draws a weapons on him having less damage substained than Zero had. Full victory for Zero in ever aspect!
Wits,fairness,honor,dedication and moral highground.
He dont wannt to critical injure someone dear to her.
Very very fine job. The art of winning by losing. There was his heart fully invested and his crewmate / friend on the line.
Rather than winning with ease and playing it smart.
The line was drawn and i think Zero refusal to step over it was very impactful.
10083014
Yes but only because there is a easy way dont mean its the right way. Zero was extreamly invested or ice cold calculated. Anyway victory for Zero.
Didnt expected him to go so far as to get himself wrecked to keep the highground.
Spike will think twice now after he sees what happend to Zero. ... He dont need to know he let himself get beaten
10083123
I see where you’re coming from, still I think we should have had an inner monologue of Zero stating or explaining why he wouldn’t use his natural abilities instead of having to assume the reasons. I understand your point for my first issue but what about the second one about the visor.
Cant find a version were they laugth after that.
You should know when to fight or let it go. Fox was not worth this fight. Next time hes pretty mutch:
10083128
I totaly agree. Ones this story is finished gramatic and chapter details needs edits. More stuff. Unless the next chapter focus on that exacly.
10082880
I agree, I usually like him but not this time.
MORE!! THE GODS DEMAND MORE!!
10083014
Probably idiot ball trope
You may have won that fight Fox, but you still lost your girl to him. All because you’re a stupid asshole.
Hi master chief
10084025
Ozpin?
Zero running on MasterChiefOS V.1.0.1
10083986
No, they are incredibly stupid and gullible
Fox get his butt kicked! Another great chapter keep up the great work
10083986
The one thing they got going for them is the quote "Roger Roger."
10082950
"WHATS UP GUYS WERE HERE TODAY WITH ANOTHER READ THEORY!"
All jokes aside, Hes gotta fall from atmosphere, and land with barely any injuries, before we can even entertain the thought.
10087156
Also punch a fucking nuke and live, John did that as well.
10087174
True true
So does this story not update on weekends? Also what is the new years resolution?
10088613
From what I can tell, he is currently writing other stories with daily updates and his resolution might be to write a furry story... possibly
Are you going to continue this story because one the best I read
10093282
Yes its just this one is longer than most
10094564
Good to hear!
10094607
I'm right now on *looks at it*
2,509 words?
10094628
Good man
Btw if you need an editor to look for any grammar/spelling/logic breaks I would be happy to oblige.
10097052
Sure
How long will it be whole story?
10098992
I...I don't really know yet. Long?
10099201
On average, a long story would be 250k-500k words. I doubt you're going to end up writing that much considering how tiny each chapter is. I'm used to 8k+ words per chapter so each chapter feels very rushed.
Have you made it a real ProtoGen yet or is it still an imposter?
10106082
Read and find out or shut up and leave.
More pls
Update?