All things must come to an end. Equestria is no different in this aspect. One day it begins, the true ending of the end. Strange phenomena encircle Equestria, slowly consuming everything on it’s path. As everyone try to stop world from it's doom, Twilight and her friends are able find out who is behind it all. Who would seem, that they would find an answear for one of the greatest questions in all creation.
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It definitely has potential, but is a little fast paced. My only story is like that, too, though, so I can’t really complain.
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What did you particularly like in this chapter and prologue, what did you dislike.
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I like the storyline, and the fact that Equestria does have the necessary materials to go to war, but the need never arose before. I liked in the prologue the implication that Discord wasn’t truly reformed, and/or the fact that he has reason to want the Empire gone.
On the other hand, the grammar and phrasing isn’t the best, and things aren’t completely clear on what’s happening; everything just goes by so fast, like when Twilight was teleporting in her battle with Tirek. Lengthening the chapter (more detailed descriptions, more dialogue) and running it by an editor would probably improve the story a lot.
So discord is like a world ender?
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