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A M Shark


The Shark is a mild fan of MLP who is writing an MLP version of a story she didn't like to see if she can do it "better" and wishes to share the results for critiques.

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This story is a sequel to The Draconequus with the Dragon Tattoo


WARNING: Some comments may contain spoilers.

It's been a year since Discord cut Fluttershy out of his life after the events of The Draconequus with the Dragon Tattoo, but their paths are destined to cross once again when two of Fluttershy's close friends are murdered and all the evidence seems to point to a certain draconequus.

AU Fluttercord set eleven years after the first three seasons minus the Discord episodes. Inspired by Discord and Fluttershy's relationship both in the show and several fanfics (*cough* Bride of Discord *cough*) Based loosely on the plot from "The Girl who Played with Fire" by Stieg Larsson. Like the first story, this one has some plot-related Murder Mystery Elements in it so is rated T just to be on the safe side.

Edited by Nightwalker

Constructive Criticism is welcome.

Cover art belongs to me so please do not take without permission. Thank you.

Chapters (15)
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Comments ( 303 )

*gasp* It's here it's here it's here it's really here!

Update soon!

And the next chapter in the saga begins! :yay:

Really looking forward to seeing where this one goes.

I'm so pumped for this story!

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What a great start. I'm so upset how they're still missing each other, even after a whole year. I can't even imagine how the reunion will go. I'm so excited for what's to come.

Yay! It's finally here! :yay::yay::yay::yay: Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Yep yep yep yep yep yep yep good wtf discord I mean I understand why he left like that but...but....but....idk maybe just maybe you won't get this comment :applejackconfused:

6586728 *Chuckles* It might help if you explained what parts the "yep, yep, yep, good, etc." were directed at.

Poor babies! Find each other soon!

6586991 *Smiles calculatingly* They will when I feel the time is right. Oh, by the way you remember that little detail you noticed on my avatar regarding his neck?

:raritystarry: it came! It came!! It came!!!
:yay: :yay: :yay:

Already loving this so far! :pinkiehappy:
Oh no Angel! I really enjoyed his role in TDwtDT. Not that I hated him in the tv show. While he has been horrible often, he has always shown a supportive side for Fluttershy as well. Looking forward to the next chapter though.

6586741 I know that comment was all over the place I was still analyzing what I just read
It was great I couldn't help saying no chanting Fluttercord Fluttercord Fluttercord I read to many fluttercord stories :raritydespair: but its so beautiful :rainbowkiss: anyways I laughed histericly at discords humor and wanted to strangers him with a tuna fish after I heard how he left but of course I know why he did it like that which i won't explain so how was you're Halloween?

I have no idea what's happening, but this is horrifying and insanely intriguing.

Onward! So excited this story is posted!

6589180 Glad to hear that. And don't worry about not knowing what's happening in the prologue. I promise all will be revealed in time.

Ok I already commented on fan fiction, but I wanted to give a comment here as well. That dream thing was awesome. Has he been trying that for a while? Can he tell from her reactions from within the dream that she wants him too? And still, this villain makes me super nervous. I don't know what to think of lil miss treehouse.....I'm tied up in the romantic tension, but constantly suspicious. It's great.

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That dream thing was awesome.

Thanks. Glad you liked it.

Has he been trying that for a while? Can he tell from her reactions from within the dream that she wants him too?

He has, but he thinks he's just manipulating his own dreams about her. He doesn't realize that he ended up magically hacking into her dreams in the process, so he thinks he's just getting reactions from some idealized dream-version of her, *chuckles* rather than the actual reactions from the real Fluttershy.

As for the villain situation ... Bwahahaha I'm afraid you'll have to just wait and see what happens as the chapters come out.

Like with any incredibly well-written and engaging story, it is important that this be said, considering the time it took to write this.
*ahem*
This was worth the wait. And I would have waited much longer for this, to boot, so considering, you actually did this quite fast in my opinion.
Your imagination is something to be envied, my friend. I realize that you're taking this story from a published novel and making it your own, but that doesn't mean there's no originality, for when I read this, I see originality everywhere. The part where Discord shaved his hair, only to remember why...The part with the hornets-turned-butterfly-turned-moth was a stroke of brilliance in my eyes. I do not think I would have thought of it, I honestly don't. If there's anything I love in writing, it's creativity and imagination, which is crucial when taking on Discord as a subject. I applaud you there, I really do.
And the TreeHAB and the dream....I love a good pun, and I love a romantic dream even more, especially when it was Discord actually attempting to court Fluttershy and waking up and growling at his failure. Because that was actually quite funny to me. As you said...so close!
And as I tend to do, I am beginning to overthink things. You ended this with Angel Bunny leaving the world for a better place...and I can't help but wonder at the timing. After all, we all know Angel Bunny loves his owner, especially with the way you write him. And as you described in the chapter, he's stubborn too. He will die when he's READY to die...but he finally let himself go at the end of this, when Fluttershy had a potential new friend in the house and a hopeful dream about the one she misses.
I just wonder if Angel Bunny felt that he could finally go, knowing that Fluttershy wouldn't be alone, that she'd be okay...? Am I reading too much into this?!?!?

Ooh, already suspense

wow, the dream part was a bit trippy but adorable. and oh, i knew it was only a matter of time before angel kicked the bucket.

OMG they were so close!! And NOOOOOOOOO NOT ANGLE BUNNY !!!!!:fluttercry

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You ended this with Angel Bunny leaving the world for a better place...and I can't help but wonder at the timing. After all, we all know Angel Bunny loves his owner, especially with the way you write him. And as you described in the chapter, he's stubborn too. He will die when he's READY to die...but he finally let himself go at the end of this, when Fluttershy had a potential new friend in the house and a hopeful dream about the one she misses.

I just wonder if Angel Bunny felt that he could finally go, knowing that Fluttershy wouldn't be alone, that she'd be okay...?

Woah0-0...I didn't think about that. Now that I have, it does make sense story wise:pinkiegasp:

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Heh, glad you think so. Sometimes, it's fun to overthink things. Not always (goodness no) but when it comes to reading analysis, it can be fun. :pinkiesmile:

ANGEL, NO! :fluttershbad: To be fair, he actually survived longer than I thought he would. I'm already in love with this sequel, and that dream sequence was adorable, if I'm right and Discord didn't even know Fluttershy was experiencing it herself. I can't wait until they get back together, maybe just as partners at first, and try to solve whatever's going on in the prologue. :yay: So far, my theories:

I don't know if I'm supposed to put my theories in spoiler tags or not, but my theory so far: Skywishes is either linked with the prologue, or already knew Sunny Days was dead, which leads to more questions... :trixieshiftright:

Need..update...NOW!!!
*says the pony who is not patient like the rest of ponydom*:twilightblush:

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Writer! I want answers, and I want them NOW! Oh, and I also want action! And romance! I came to this story for love!

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*Laughs nervously* Working to rectify that. Unfortunately some chapters are going to take some time to get ready, but fear not. I promise they are on the way.

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Thanks! So I'll try to be patient like most of ponydom!:trollestia:

6626066 Harumph. Alright, but there better be feels! Good feels! And yelling! Ooh, that goes in a Fluttercord. Oh, and maybe could Discord save Fluttershy or something? I love it when that happens.

Alright, alright, I'll stop backseat driving, but I need my daily dose of fluff!

OH COME ON!
you tease us with the last story and then with the dream and then end it like THAT!?
WTF?! XD

6629217 *Laughs and shrugs helplessly* Well, I got to do something to entice people to keep reading.

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*Chuckles* What's the point in writing for a character like Discord if you can't indulge in a little trippyness?

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I'm already in love with this sequel, and that dream sequence was adorable, if I'm right and Discord didn't even know Fluttershy was experiencing it herself.

Glad to hear you're enjoying it so far, and you would be correct there. Discord doesn't realize he's hacking into Fluttershy's dreams.

I don't know if I'm supposed to put my theories in spoiler tags or not, but my theory so far: Skywishes is either linked with the prologue, or already knew Sunny Days was dead, which leads to more questions... :trixieshiftright:

Whether you want to put your theories in spoiler tags or not is up to you. You have some interesting ones, but at the moment I can neither confirm nor deny them.


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I just wonder if Angel Bunny felt that he could finally go, knowing that Fluttershy wouldn't be alone, that she'd be okay...? Am I reading too much into this?!?!?

Woah0-0...I didn't think about that. Now that I have, it does make sense story wise:pinkiegasp:

*Laughs* I wouldn't say you're reading too much into it, but I'll probably go the same route I went with Discord's tattoos and leave Angel Bunny's time of death open for interpretation.

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This was worth the wait.

Thanks, that means a lot to me to hear that.

Your imagination is something to be envied, my friend. I realize that you're taking this story from a published novel and making it your own, but that doesn't mean there's no originality, for when I read this, I see originality everywhere. The part where Discord shaved his hair, only to remember why...The part with the hornets-turned-butterfly-turned-moth was a stroke of brilliance in my eyes. I do not think I would have thought of it, I honestly don't. If there's anything I love in writing, it's creativity and imagination, which is crucial when taking on Discord as a subject. I applaud you there, I really do.

*bows in response to the applause* Thanks again. As I've said before, I've always admired your ability to get Discord's voice and personality just right in your work, so the fact that you've been able to enjoy what I've done with him here is a real honor.

I love a good pun, and I love a romantic dream even more, especially when it was Discord actually attempting to court Fluttershy and waking up and growling at his failure. Because that was actually quite funny to me. As you said...so close!

Bwahahaha! Even when they're apart the fluttercord will not be denied! *Chuckles and shakes head* Sorry, Discord, but it's not going to be that easy.

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But I swear that if the end of this if discord isn't plowing fluttershy into the ground...I will be very disapointed

6629897 *Laughs maniacally* I may be a Fluttercord shipper, but I make no promises!

EDIT: Though I have to say, the idea of him plowing her into the ground is making for some disturbing images.

6723945 Hopefully sometime this month. I can't give an exact date, but I can promise that the next chapter is on its way, and I will post it as soon as is reasonably possible.

EDIT TO ADD:
Okay, so I couldn't get it out by the end of December. However, I can say that as of Jan 2, 2016, I do have most of chapter 2 written and am now working on editing it, so I can say it will be available this month.

I was conflicted on this sequel at first. It was a case of whether I wanted more of this amazing story, or my lovey ending sooner.

I can wait if the writing is this good! :twilightblush:

Yay its been a while but that's okay. Thank you for the new chapter!!! :yay:

Ok this chapter was good. And Granny Smith is gone too now... :fluttercry:
I'm starting to guess Rainbow might get killed off, as she is close to Discord at the current moment, and he's supposed to be accused of the deaths in this story, right?
Also, who the heck is H? Please tell me that's just a red herring and its actually going to be Soarin?! :pinkiehappy: I ship them so hard!!!
Oh well Discord is coming to Ponyville. :yay: Can't wait to see how this goes...

Ponies and pets need to stop dying, that is not okay! :raritydespair: (sees description) And there's still more! Gahhhh

Oh, god, will they even see each other, now that they're both in Ponyville? I'm not worried about waiting for them to reunite, I'm interested enough in what's going on. But man, what's gonna happen?! I'm excited!

Ok I'm super into it. Thanks for keeping this going. For no fluttercord moments, I'm still feeling like I had some by getting into their heads and seeing how much they are thinking of each other. I can't wait to see how they react to each other!

Yipeeeeeeee! Chapter 2 is out for us to read!!!!!!!!!!:yay::heart: See, I made a rhyme:raritywink: Sorry for the kinda delayed review:/ But, I was so excited to read this and after reading it, favorite chapter so far:pinkiehappy: (even though I keep saying that for every chapter of this story so far hehe:twilightblush:)
Before I begin, just to get it out of the way, first Angel dies and now Granny Smith:pinkiegasp: Oh man, I just wasn't expecting that at all :rainbowderp: Not only a good plot twist, but also a good follow up(dang good is a bad word for this context:/) to Angel's Death...in a sense. Here, let me explain: Angel, like Fluttershy said, passes away almost on his own terms and leaves the earth almost knowing that he is no longer needed. He already fulfilled his duty in protecting her when she needed him the most. Thus, another pony and/or creature will take over his spot so that she can move on with her life. Granny can finally pass in peace because she finally solved the great mystery about her grand daughter and Applejack was finally returned to her after all those years. She was able to have one last year with her before passing:pinkiesad2: She fulfilled the role she was meant to play and was there for Applejack when she really needed her. And now it's time for...let's just say....somepony to take care of Appleajack:raritywink: Though, I have no idea who:derpytongue2:
Second:

According to Pinkie Pie, the card had said:
Ray,
See you at the usual place at the usual time.
—H

Squuuueeeee!!!!!:heart::heart::heart:XD
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Sorry, had to get that out of my system:raritywink::derpytongue2:
Third: Tehee, Wishie :3 New Nickname confirmed:pinkiehappy:
Fourth: Oh my gosh Pinkie!XD I know it's so Pinkie for wanting to bring out the "fun" in funerals, but still oh my gosh!XD So dark yet so hilarious! No wonder the others couldn't help but laugh, yet feel guiltyXD So portraying my feelings during that situation;) Also: love that joke Pinkie made about spotting a camo pony;) Only Pinkie can make Wishie smile;) Hooray for hilarious Pinkie in this chapter:yay:
Fifth: Dawww Mittens the Chameleon :3 Miss Maud Pony and her Pascal Chameleon:heart: Tangled reference for the win!
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I have a feeling that Mittens was a nice combination between Gummy and a kitten :3
Sixth: Hooray for nerdy Strawberry Swirl!:D
Seventh: (Dang, my list is getting long:/) What do you mean there's no Fluttercord moments in this?:rainbowhuh: There's Fluttercord moments even when they're not together cause our two cuties just miss each other soooooo much:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::heart: XD I mean, the little things in life remind them so much of their time together and it's just...my heart:pinkiesad2::heart: I love it:scootangel::trollestia::yay:
Eighth:

Oh, yes. To show just how little he cared, he wasn't just going to flash himself to Ponyville. He was going to arrive in style.

YES!:0
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Yes Discord, yes arrive in style. Yes Discord, please subtly reference "Make New Friends but Keep Discord" through this crushy clingy, needy potato boyfriend behavior:pinkiecrazy:
Ninth: Daww yay Fluttershy and Applejack comfort prep talk moment:heart::twilightsmile:
Tenth: Oh my gosh ScrewjobXD! You cheeky little devil you!XD
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I cannot wait for you to meet the others!XD
Eleventh: That tornado reminded me of...
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I've never seen the movie, but I saw in the trailer that it had a scene showing a massive spaghetti tornado and that scene reminded me of Discord's tornado:)
Twelfth:

Then the pegasus licked the tomato sauce from one hoof. "Not bad, but it could use some parmesan."

Derpy! :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::heart::yay: Yes to Discord and Derpy interaction:D
This chapter was so worth the wait:heart::yay:
PS I will message you back this weekend, promise:pinkiesmile:

Tim Hawkins. Athiest church songs. Best thing ever, lol!
Thanks for the update!:twilightsmile:
~Melly~

the only fluttercord moment i want to happen is them screwing on fluttershys table!
that must happen!
also im really happy this updated again X3
cant wait for the next chapter

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the only fluttercord moment i want to happen is them screwing on fluttershys table!

that must happen!

Never! Heh, heh, heh.

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Also, who the heck is H? Please tell me that's just a red herring and its actually going to be Soarin?! :pinkiehappy: I ship them so hard!!!

*Chuckles* I can't reveal that just yet, but you'll find out soon enough.
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Thanks for the comments, guys. I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the chapter and want to find out what happens next. And regarding what happens next, I'm glad to report that I'm already at work on the next chapter and will post it as soon as I can get ready.

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Oh come on! there has to be a scene where these two say screw it and just start having angry sex! XD

6898966 Not while the Shark controls the keyboard! Mwahahahaha!

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