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Moniker375


There is always room for inprovement.

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Carol Mathers is struggling to move on with her life after her mother’s death. Her father has fallen into a drunken depression and she is left to fend for herself. Carol drives off a Bridge and somehow ends up in a strange new world, full of talking ponies. A world that is likely to see another war soon. The Peryton clans are joining together under one ruler. A ruler who wishes to see the Alicorn Princess Celestia dethroned.

“Hi Moniker375, here. I just wanted to say thank you for reading this book. I am testing out writing with an outline for a story for a change! No more slap down the first thing that pops into my head. I am trying to improve my writing, so hopefully, each chapter is better than the last. I am also heavily editing before I post a chapter which I think helps a lot… I probably should have been doing that more in the past. Anyhow this should be my best work yet so enjoy and if you have any suggestions or tips to help me improve my writing don’t be afraid to send me a PM. Okay bye.”

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 9 )

Let’s see how this goes

Well this was, depressing, but good, I shall read on

This was pretty good, the endding was pretty funny tho, liked the song, I shall track this, keep up the good work bud!

Can identify. Christmas hasn't been the same since Mom and Dad died. They even went and left during the same year. It... sucks.

Is the story picture carol's new appearance?

I like it so far :pinkiehappy:

It is dead. Rip.

Why do I feel, that this is or would be, some strange version of Bambi? It's just, the picture and some of the description, really give me that feeling...

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