Luna, meet the Sandvich

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Luna finds the Sandvich one day while trying to eat lunch. Nothing strange happens. But, this is equestria, and the concept of strange is slightly... skewed.

(made this on a 6 hour challenge. After that, i could work on it no more)

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0XIxIX0

0XIxIX0 #1 · Aug 13th, 2012 · · ·

Okay guys and gals, I wrote this in one day on a self imposed 6 hour challenge. I write a one-shot in 6 hours and once those hours are up, i stop. No proof reading, no adding sub-plots, nada. If there are any mistakes, feel free to point them out. This was just a test to see how i would do under time constraints. This concept was one of the ones on my blog that i decided would be great for a one-shot, and since i am more of a 'dark' kind of writer, i though i would go for comedy. Didn't work out as planned, and you can still see hints of that 'dark' aspect in there. guess that means i need to work on my comedy.

jmlop0

jmlop0 #2 · Aug 14th, 2012 · · ·

Does the end have to do with the upcoming update?1081433

The Grey Pegasus

The Grey Pegasus #3 · Aug 14th, 2012 · · ·

So many minor errors. Not pointing them out.
Resolve the problem by SAXXTTTOOONN HHAAAALLLLEEEEE!!! It is proper.
1083832
Thought the same exact thing.

Ponysun

Ponysun #4 · Aug 14th, 2012 · · 1 ·

>six hours

It took you this long to make this? God op, you sure are a massive faggot.

blazikenking

blazikenking #5 · Aug 14th, 2012 · · ·

The last line was just perfect.

0XIxIX0

0XIxIX0 #6 · Aug 15th, 2012 · · ·

1083832 Really up to you to decide. I never explained how the sandvich got there, so use your imagination. If killer robots teleported it there, then sure.

1083998 SAAAXTOOON HAAAAALE fixes everything. also, i won't be fixing any of the mistakes. I never went over this draft with a keen eye before my 6 hours were up, and i won't be fixing any mistakes because this was a test to see, if i typed in a six hour period, how many mistakes would i make, how coherent would the story be, and how badly would i procrastinate. not completely sure how that fared, since no one seems to want to give any decent information to average out data

1084280 What? no seriously, your comment makes no sense. I typed this in 6 hours. from 5-11, while i still had stuff to do. I did this in the time i had between all the stuff. Also not my genre, so i expected this to suck. horribly. Surprised it got seen at all.

1086398 Thanks. Really, i wish i had more time to really flesh everything out, but i put myself in a 6 hour time span.

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