Murder. A word not heard in Equestria in a long, long time. Perhaps not since the Princesses ended ancient conflicts and brought the three pony races together in harmony.
But there is a new race in Equestria now, one not so unaccustomed to violence. The terrible task of unraveling a horrible crime falls to Shining Armor, and against his wishes, finds Twilight volunteering her help. All the resources of the Royal Guard are available to them, but will that be enough to keep anyone else from dying?
Rated and tagged as such to be on the safe side.
(Several chapters edited and re-written.)
Chapters (8)
seems interesting.
Wow, this is a well-written and interesting story. I do think you were too casual about the humans appearance in Equestria, that should've prompted some kind of national emergency. But you quickly move us past that and into the heart of the matter. A murderer. In Ponyville.
I like how you have the toughest and hardest of all ponies working the case, and how utterly lost they are. Whereas humans can track you from the touch of a finger on metal, the ponies literally do not know how to respond to it. Twilight's knowledge of humans and experience in combat is pretty extensive, but she has not been formally trained in combat. Shining Armor has, but he's not quite as good at tracking as Twilight is. Then, there's his responsibilities to the citizens and his sister. Poor guy.
I'm really liking this so far, and hope it gets updated soon. Twilight is getting in more and more danger the closer they get to the criminal. We all know that. I'm just waiting for the lights to go out and the blade to drop. Keep building that tension.
(Why hasn't the Princess come? Murder is a pretty damn serious business)
Don't know why you got so many dislikes. This story is amazing in its ability to portray the ponie's helplessness in dealing with pure cruelty, and setting up a good mystery feel. A plot twist with a murdered human? Brilliant. Keep writing man, and don't hurt Twilight. :)
Language could use a bit more work, otherwise it's interesting.
I am loving this thus far. Quack.
This was good! Don't get the dislikes? Quack
Ah, true name magic. Yeah that doesn't work that well on self-insert names.