So, these are the proud-as-punch parents who were responsible for unleashing this horror into the world, and disciplining her so poorly she nearly destroyed all of Equestria in her endeavours. Well, as much as I'd like to publicly eviscerate them for the terrible job they did in raising her, this probably isn't the most opportune time or venue. As loathe as I am to continue masquerading as this awful creature, it might be tactically wise to let things settle down a bit before I announce that I'm not quite who they think I am. With any luck, they'll want their real daughter back and not want to keep me trapped inside this child's body. It might be less certain than I think... Celestia knows, I haven't exactly got the most winning personality ever, but compared to Cozy's, I'm Mother Theresa and Nelson Mandela wrapped into one perfect package. Now, onto the subject of how to break the ice with these unknown equines...
Whilst a pensive Starlight stared at me blankly and my 'folks' seemed to be auditioning for the Mannequin Challenge (guys, move on... that is so last year), I had the opportunity to assess the tense situation with a degree of nervousness, not sure whether to play it cool or lay out all my cards on the table. In the end I decided a combination of the two approaches was my best chance of success, and to kick things off a nice, friendly handshake would do for starters.
But as I ventured forward, left forehoof extended out to greet these nameless individuals (side note: the fingerless hooves are going to take a lot of getting used to), it turned out that Mama Cozy Glow already had other plans.
"M-MY BABY!!" blasted like a foghorn in my ear, and suddenly she launched herself right at me: 'Queenie' (my nickname for the pink mare until I learn what she's actually called) sailed through the air at light speed to unceremoniously grab me with both hooves and embrace me in the tightest hug I'd ever experienced. I bet people who wrestle bears don't have as much pressure forced upon their ribcages as I have right now. If I see Fluttershy later on during my (hopefully) brief stay in Equestria, perhaps I'll ask her myself.
Her wings were fully cloistered around me too, which in itself made breathing a real chore, when you have itchy feathers blocking up both channels of your airways. But as I gasped and choked and begged for the tension on my chest to be relived just a tad, the hug seemed to get stronger and stronger, and in my new punified pony form I could do precisely nothing about her over-affectionate administrations. It looked like I was going to be squashed as flat as a pancake by my own 'mother', before I even had chance to take revenge on the filly who got me into this mess. Talk about an ignominious end.
But just as it seemed as though It would be Queenie that would lead to my untimely demise instead of her woebegone offspring (oh, irony of ironies) a firm male voice sounded from just behind the crushing mare, which obviously belonged to the blue stallion I'd seen before. I suppose I'll be calling him 'Kingie', then. (I like naming things!! Please don't take this simple joy away from me.)
"That's enough Cozy Nook, can't you see she's had enough? You don't want to squeeze the life out of our precious when we've just reconnected with her after so many months of estrangement, do you? Please sit down... don't you realise you're embarrassing Miss Glimmer with that over-the-top display, too? " Kingie spoke with an undertone of wry amusement, as though he was used to this kind of dramatic behaviour from his life partner.
"O-Oh, don't worry about me, I'm absolutely fine." Through the morass of pink plumage that now covered my eyes, I could just about spot a captivated Starlight frantically taking notes. I noticed she put on this facade of utmost professionalism, but the way she was recording it for posterity at such a speed suggested it was extremely interesting for her. "Seeing parents and children interact after long periods apart is a field I haven't fully explored yet, so this is all very educational! Please feel free to continue, though you might want to loosen your grip just a bit, Mrs Nook. My pony biology might not match my degree in psychology, but I don't think her cheeks are supposed to be that colour..."
"See, Sky Glow... Miss Glimmer doesn't mind at all! And while I'll take a seat now, I don't care what you say... my darling is staying in my arms for as long as I'm here! I never want to let her out of my sight ever again!" At last, the vice-like sensation on my new fragile body eased up, and instead of being smothered to death by an over-attentive parent, I found myself carried like a foal over to a nearby chair. One hoof on my back, one hoof on my butt, (obviously Cozy Nook had no comprehension of proper boundaries) I felt myself being gently rocked as a devoted mother figure carefully scanned my tiny form in the most painstaking detail. And I thought my last physical was mortifying...
"Hang on, what's this?!" The shriek-like shout from 'Mummy Dearest' had now returned with a vengeance, and this time she was stabbing her hoof directly at my cranial area. "She'll get 'the best of care here', you said! Well, what do you call this giant bump the size of a dragon's egg on her head, then?! Don't tell me some of the guards have been... how dare you roughhouse my daughter in this manner! However uncooperative she might've been, and I know she can be very difficult, there's no excuse for hitting her! I want a full investigation into who perpetuated this outrage and for them to be summarily dismissed as soon as you find the guilty party! If this truly is 'the best of care', I'd hate to see what the worst is!"
"I-I'm so sorry, Mrs Nook! It is completely against regulations for anypony to strike a prisoner, no matter how heinous their crimes might be! A-And, I'm sure that goes double for minors! As soon as we're finished here, I'll head straight down to speak to the head guard on duty to find out the origin of your daughter's injury!" Starlight struggled to quell the anger of my incensed 'mother', and I began to have some sympathy for the flustered unicorn. How was she to know it was a self-inflicted injury, by a man-turned-filly still trying to make some sense in the crazy world he now found himself in?
On the plus side, this would be a great opportunity to get payback on that stupid commander who wouldn't even listen to my pleas for help earlier. Put it this way: from what I've seen so far, triggering my new mum is more dangerous than breaking a Pinkie Promise, or withholding cake from Celestia. 'Hell hath no wrath than a pissed off mother', I suppose.
"...She's much quieter than normal, her mane and tail are tied all wrong, and what exactly are you feeding her on, air? This is the skinniest I've ever seen her, I do hope 'starvation' isn't another of your cruel and unusual punishments here...!" Cozy Nook continued to rail against the supposably harsh regime her daughter (i.e, me) was experiencing, all whilst prodding and poking the associated regions with great gusto.
In my world, you could get someone arrested for this kind of invasive conduct... but seeing as in Equestria, hugging total strangers voraciously seems to be the national pastime, I guess this is just accepted as normal behaviour. Unfortunately.
"U-Um, I have gruel bought to me daily... I-I think?" Fed up of feeling like a lifeless doll, I decided to actually contribute towards the conversation based on what I'd been told earlier in my cell. "Y-Yeah, love me some gruel!"
"Gruel?!" Cozy Nook spat out that single word as if were poisonous, while I was almost dropped on the floor in shock. "Just how do you expect a growing filly to... no wonder it looks as if she's wasting away!! I suppose if she gets a glass of water with it, that's considered a luxury, hmm?! Right, that does it! We're taking her out of here this instant, whatever the consequences! From what I've seen so far, this place is worse than a death sentence! Don't worry darling, Mummy will soon have you back in your nice, warm bed in the clouds, mark my words! We'll get the best lawyer..."
"C-C-Cozy Nook!! Please try to control yourself! As much as we both share the same concerns for our daughter's welfare, aren't you forgetting what she did to end up here? Don't you remember the huge trial? She was considered to be an 'enemy of the state'! We can't just swoop her out of here, as tempting as it might be... we'd be hunted fugitives, and never be safe anywhere ever again! Let's deal with this sensibly, shall we? Who knows what Miss Glimmer is making of all this! I want to see her moved somewhere less draconian as much as you, but these things take time..." An increasingly agitated Sky Glow was apparently the more rational of the couple, contrary to initial impressions.
He had a point though... as much as I wanted to hightail it outta this shit-hole as soon as possible, maybe patience was the way to go. After all, if I was 'on the run', how the heck was I going to return to Earth? I was sure to need the help from one member of the royal family sometime in my quest, and it would be a bit difficult to approach them with as a wanted criminal. Best to clear my name (Not Cozy's) first, convince everypony I wasn't who I looked like and then move onto the tricky issue of hopping dimensions again to save my girlfriend and real family next. Piece of cake... yeah, right.
"Y-Your husband is right, Mrs Nook! Creating a big scene now would only end in complications later on, and might even lead to the suspension of your visitation rights!" Starlight spoke each word there with visible regret, for she must know that while the rules might sound harsh, that was the reality they were in. "I swear to you on my honour as a counsellor and the former student of a Princess, I will do everything within my power to improve conditions for your daughter for as long as she's here! I'm sure a lot of the current problems can be ascertained by the unsuitability of Tartarus's design to hold a filly so young, and if it isn't possible to have her relocated elsewhere, this will have to change. That's about all I can promise for now, given my lack of input during the decision portion of her confinement in the first place..."
I was caught in two minds regarding Starlight's point of view. On the one hoof, considering the outrageous acts of pure evil Cozy Glow had perpetrated on everypony on the show and now me, I would say: lock 'er up, swallow the key, and go off to live a long and bountiful life. Also, let the screeching in the ears as you leave her to rot be a soothing melody that would lull you to sleep every night. Bliss, wonderful bliss!
However, considering it was now me who happened to be 'squatting' inside the warped brain of this treacherous junior tyrant, all that well-deserved punishment currently would only affect yours truly... so let's have some leniency, shall we? As soon as my soul is sucked out of this misanthrope and replaced, they can do whatever they like to her, but for now I had to regrettably treat this filly's body like it was my own. In other words, no more head-butting iron bars.
"Oh, alright... but as long as you confer the full extent of my unhappiness regarding this completely unacceptable state of affairs to the very top, and give us regular updates as to her treatment and progress!" Cozy Nook eventually backed down with great reluctance, as any sane pony would in this no-win argument. "Also, as soon as Celestia sees sense and decides that my daughter is better off in another location that isn't full of doom, gloom, murderous monsters and unsatisfying meals, you notify me at once! Finally, I meant what I said... track down whichever stallion struck my baby in anger, and fire them at once! Or, I'll see the Crown in court! Did you get all that, Miss Glimmer?!"
"Y-Yes. D-Definitely. W-Whatever you say." I really felt even more for Starlight at that moment, having never seen her this out of depth in the show. After all, friendship problems and Trixie must seem like a breeze compared to dealing with pushy parents. "A-Anyway, shall we begin what we came here to do in the first place? After so many distractions at the start of the session, I'm not even sure how much time we have left. If you'd like to put Cozy Glow down now please, so all three of us can address her at once."
As my 'mother' reluctantly at last deposited me on terra firma again (though is it just me, or was I starting to miss the warmth... nah, it's all in my head) I wondered what 'fun and games' were due next for this bracing encounter. Perhaps I'd get the chance to say more than a few words, now? Yeah, that'll be nice. I just hope I can do 'the voice', so they don't get suspicious. Let's see, wasn't it kind of like Little Orphan Annie on steroids...?
Sadly, I didn't have much more time to think, before a whole host of difficult questions began arriving thick and fast:
"Why did you run away to Twilight's school for all those months, without even so much as a letter?! You had us worried out of our minds!" A pleading Cozy Nook was desperate to know.
"Indeed! Instead, you chose to write to that heathen Tirek. Whatever possessed you to ask his help in conquering the world? Did we not give you everything you ever wanted?" An inquisitive Sky Glow raised an eyebrow.
"Apparently, you've had problems with forming proper relationships for years, long before I met you. Rather, manipulation and coercion have been your only friends, in getting what you think you deserve... which is very sad. Would you like to discuss it now, or wait until after your family's gone? I can arrange a private meeting with you later, if you want." Starlight Glimmer beamed at me optimistically.
I looked at each one of their staring faces petrified, not having the first clue as to what I should do next.
For you see, when good ol' Cozy Glow departed for pastures new, she took all her personal details and history with her, leaving me with something between bupkis and diddly squat of her old memories.
It looked like my improv skills were about to be well and truly put to the test....
Only problem is, the last time I tried to act, I flunked big time.
It was the end of term play at school, and I failed my audition miserably...
As a tree.
A F***ING TREE.
Help!!
My God he’s starting to think like her.
So here we are, nearing the end of the fun part to write! Honestly I love the direction this story is going.
If you don't mind me shooting the breeze for a second I have a few thoughts to share. Like how one of my favorite parts of these "stuck in someone's body" story's is the intricate and often times over complicated webs of lies the MC has to make!
One of my favorites on the site Oskar Osaker: true omnivore ( if I spelled that right...) Did a wonderful job of this, to the point that some of the lies were all most more interesting than the truth!
If you want to see lieing done right I really recommend reading at least the first few chapters just for reference!
Any-who sorry for rambling and I hope you have a wonderful time writing.
Oh, don't forget to avoid swords too! Nastey things...
Welp, now this update is way better than the previous ones, :D keep up the good work.
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Okay then.
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Intriguing. I might just have to check that out.
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I hope the previous updates were still good, though. Thank you for reading it!
This is off to a good start but I fear its going to fall into the same hole as almost all this type of story fall into.
There is almost no reason for the MC to not simply ask to talk to someone and explain the situation.
While he will need to be able to come up with some way to prove he isn't just Cozy Glow trying to lie her way out of prison, that shouldn't be hard for a person with solid knowledge of the show/movies. The fact that inter-universal travel and body switching is simple enough that Twilight would leave items that can do such sitting around means they shouldn't consider it such an outlandish idea.
I know this story is meant to be comedy, it doesn't seem so far to be comedy based in absurd and stupid reactions, so these plot-holes should be filled in or used to push the story forward and not ignored.
Best of luck and I'll be back to read again when this is complete.
I can't wait to see how this blows up.
Of course that isn't going to help if he tries to say something the others will know better.
I forgot that going back into his world is still a possibility, but I hope he is trapped there forever.
I just don't like the animes or stories in which the main char is back in his world and doesn't have to care for what happened in the other world anymore.
Yep I can see how good his act is without any knowledge, he should have thought about that. It would have been purely luck if those questions already happened or not I suppose.
I admit however even if I think that was not what I hoped for, this was good to read and it's starting to be more fun then I thought when I got to know the character in the first chapter.
There is always the old 'Amnesia' he got a bult in the head and is not a horn, the best is to use it.
Please cease speaking words. Ever again. Just... stop.
Yyyyep. Immediately thrown into the deep end.
I will enjoy his suffering
XD love it!
I'd still like to see our dear hero try something called "the truth" it might have some amusing and unexpected results XD
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However, we know next to nothing of Cozy's backstory, so the speaker will have some difficulty there.
Why isn't he just saying what he told the guards here, I mean she got all the equipment from twilight's lab so telling glimmer to "ask twilight where her interdimensional and bod swapping experiments are." would probably lead to someone believing her. That or they could come to the conclusion that she stole all of that and didn't use it so that she could... I don't know why she wouldn't use them, why didn't she bodyswap a guard and escape that way?
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It couldn't have hurt him more than what happened.
In this situation he doesn't know what already happened and I assume he is going to say a bunch of nonsense that the guards or someone else can easily proof as wrong, which will him lable as a liar or something like that.
I mean they don't exactly like Cowzy Glow already and he further hurts his reputaion I assume.
His truth is maybe still a made up tale to them, but it can't hurt more than telling them stuff like "they feed me the dirt they find while cleaning the floow".
Maybe I'm wrong here, but I have that image in my head where the guars is just going to say, no she lies and he has some minus points already.
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I guess I could agree with some points, however I was never the fan of main characters who know the show, just because of how they often use that knowledge. Sometimes it seems to take out the excitemend of the scenes a bit in which the character would have to find out everything for themself and instead he knows everyone already and is telling them they are cartoon characters or stuff like that.
There are several things that annoy me there a bit.
I forgot that he has the knowledge, but recently that type of stories is at least better than it was when I started and they don't tell them just everthing anymore. I mean like stuff that happens in the future or when they are to affraid to do anything because it "could" affect the timeline.
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Oh,...that would be even better I guess. I mean saying that to Twilight.
For not using it in chase she still has it, I guess it isn't loaded or something like that?
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He doesn't need to know anything about Cozy's life, and not know would only help his argument.
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Uh a main part of the premise of this story is him knowing of the show and not liking the Cozy Glow character.
Any trope can be used well and be a good thing or used poorly and be a bad thing. I simply wanted to offer my opinion on how to avoid a common pitfall of this subsection of this trope.
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It's difficult, you know, to walk that line. If I'm too absurd, people will say the story is too silly and they don't believe in the main character enough to proceed. If I try to make it a more realistic account of what'd happen if someone got stuck in Equestria, people would most likely demand that every decision they'd make would be the right one, or they'd be no credibility. The way I'm writing it now, I'm going for a combination of both approaches... but it's going to probably just as tricky keeping everyone happy as it is deciding where to take the story next. Thanks for the good wishes, I have a feeling I'll need them...
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The countdown starts... NOW.
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Even though I wrote this story in my style, I tried to make it accessible to everyone. Hopefully, I can continue to earn your attention.
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That's what I like to hear!
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Perhaps...
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Naturally.
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Remember, Cozy's ultimate goal is 'power', she wanted to conquer Equestria to control it's population, and seeing as that has ultimately failed, has now turned her attention to our planet. The wisdom of this move is somewhat in question, as if how feasible it is. As stated in the story though, Cozy sees no way of fulfilling such a big task in the form of a talking filly, which is why she switched place with our 'hero' instead of another pony. And also because, she doesn't actually like him very much because he was so rude to her on arrival. Aw, bless!
As for why he hasn't mentioned any of the other stuff, well he hasn't had chance yet! Some of it might be revealed to Starlight and co in the next chapter, depending on how he thinks he should play things. Stay tuned...
Finally, I've already written a story about a person in Equestria who has no knowledge of the show. I figured with this one I'd make them a fan for a change, and also make them become their least favourite character. And who better than the most conniving filly around? Till the next update then!
Dude, if you really are a fan of the show, tell them the truth...then start spouting as many events from the show that you can. There's at least a 50/50 chance they'll realize you're saying stuff about things Cozy couldn't possibly know about...or they'll think she was even sneakier than they thought. Either way it's better odds of working in your favor than you have now.
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But I prefer a count-up timer for my bombs
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I know that, but reading that part is always a moment where I kind of hold my breath and try to see how it plays out.
Most of the time it`s just a minor dissapointment, nothing why I would stop reading.
I think mostly the "why", I mean that this is sometimes the reason for why they do stuff or don't do stuff is what I don't like about that most of the time. It hasn't been done in a while as far as I can tell so I'm don't exactly know which story I should show you as an example.
I agree with that and I guess I just felt the need to say why I don't like that most of the time.
I just still have to see certain tropes being used in a good way.
wait how do you fail at being a tree you just stand still
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True.
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Hmmm...
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The point is that crazy smart kids exist, her type of smart would be different than his but it is possible.
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I am reminded of a saying I see often.
"If you try to please everyone you end up pleasing no one at all."
9293156 Perhaps, but that won’t stop me from giving it a try
Quick! Start a panic attack!
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For a pre-school/elementary school age kid that's easier said than done. Borderline impossible for some.
>I like naming things!! Please don't take this simple joy away from me.
Please do that. I love neologisms.
This fic has caught my interest, I look forward to future chapters
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Nah in this case it’s definitely true. (That it bears no resemblance to my opinion)
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Especially since Starlight would probably actually listen and look into things just in case its the truth and Cozy really is loose.
when is chapter 4s release date?
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There are no guarantees with this guy.
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I’m having a big clear out right now. As soon as I’ve finished that, I’ll get right on it.
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Not too soon we gotta enjoy the initial attempts in the story too.
Update?
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You have to be patient.
perpetrated
Two VERY different things.
OMG! SO FUN!!! Eeeeeeeeee
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That's what I'd do... mixed in with a significant amount of vitriol for these pathetic excuses for parents. Screw just playing it calm, that's what the REAL Cozy would do, and I want to convince others I'm NOT her!
Really, what with this stupid behaviour? I mean, really, i know, that he is desperate and all, but the most smart decision would be is to tell Starlight that you took Body-swapping potion and Realm-hopping device from twilight and tell her to check it out because they are dangerous in the wrong hooves. And then when she finds that it is truth, ask her what you might have done with them. And then show her that you know things that you can't know as Cozy. And work from here.
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This character’s entire profile is professional neckbeard, I doubt he’ll do something intelligent.
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Exactly. And btw, thanks for introducing a new word to my ever-growing vernacular. ‘Neckbeard’, I am so stealing that...
Geeez she’s like Spoiled Bitch.
Wait, they came to visit just to ask questions that theoretically should have come out during the trial? We're past the point of interrogation, right?