Equestria's Assassins

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moviemaster8510

moviemaster8510 #1 · Jun 24th, 2018 · 3 · · Prologe: In the boots of others. ·

Well, at least it’s not Dragonball.
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TheMajorTechie

TheMajorTechie #2 · Jun 24th, 2018 · · · Prologe: In the boots of others. ·

Wrong use of 's in certain parts of the title and description. Might wanna check that out.

Comment posted by SCP049 deleted Jun 24th, 2018

Ms QIB

Ms QIB #4 · Jun 24th, 2018 · · · Prologe: In the boots of others. ·

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❤ RLM

Comment posted by DAMN HAMSTER deleted Jun 24th, 2018

metroid_freak

metroid_freak #6 · Jun 24th, 2018 · 3 · · Prologe: In the boots of others. ·

Deleting comments is never a good idea. Just saying.

Miles Skywalker

Miles Skywalker #7 · Jun 25th, 2018 · · 4 · Prologe: In the boots of others. ·

Pretty good to start off. Need to work on some spelling and punctuation placement, but other than that, really nice start to what I hope to be a good story.

Hclegend

Hclegend #8 · Jun 25th, 2018 · 2 · · Prologe: In the boots of others. ·

I'm looking at this description.

I refuse to believe this is real. If I reject reality enough, will it make this disgrace of fiction go away?

9005549
Liking something bad ironically is one thing, liking this means you just have bad taste. Hate to be rude, but I couldn't get past the first paragraph due to the absolute grammatical raping that is this travesty of fiction, so being able to read all this and not tear your eyes out means that you have a case of Achievements in Ignorance. As in, your ignorance allows you to read total crap and not want to kill yourself.

You should become an editor. That's a skill editors need.

Miles Skywalker

Miles Skywalker #9 · Jun 25th, 2018 · · 4 · Prologe: In the boots of others. ·

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I do edit for people. This ain't shit compared to some of the other stories I've read/worked on. This one isn't too bad. I get full on migraines from some of the other noob writers.

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