This is a real gem of a story. Would be nice to have a sequel for it.

Didn't even stay..... But then again bittersweet is a unique flavor all of it's own.

This is very good writing. Please do more. Sequel, another chapter, whatever you can do.

Well...that was pretty good.

Again my reviewing skills amaze and bring wonder to the lives of all I touch.

Glad I found this. There isn't a lot of good smut on this site, but this was one of the best ones. It flowed well, it was entertaining, and it was pretty hot.

This gave me a Boner

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Quite good, though I think you could have taken it a little slower, especially in the beginning of the sex. There’s a lot going on here, but much of it is skipped over or described only briefly.

I think this story could benefit from having a more tightly controlled POV. Then you could describe things in exquisite detail when your POV character experiences them, while also using that as an excuse to skip over things the POV character doesn’t notice, which means it doesn’t have to end up 100k words long.

Overall, though, I very much enjoyed this story. I only wish there could have been a bit more girl-on-girl action after the guys got involved. Would have been so hot to see them touching and kissing each other as they both get railed.

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DLS, don't you have better and more productive things to do than read shitty porn from four-and-a-half years ago?

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Very much yes!
But ... you know ... sometimes I need to take a break.

And even if it's old, I like to leave comments on stories I read.

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Fair enough. Nevertheless, thank you for the criticism.