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BlueFin
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So this would be Scootaloo and Applebloom's kids..... which leave Sweetie Belle's kid........
I may have a idea for you
This story was good, but didn't get me hooked until the end. Reason why is because it didn't make me feel some type of way. It lacked emotion in my opinion. Of course I could see the characters act in some way, but in the style of writing didn't get me riled up.
Like instead of saying "a hand", I like to see "her/his hand". And when something happens to character, I like to see emotion in the writing. What I mean is instead of just describing the motions, describe what their reactions were.
Just my thought. Not gonna rate it.