Centuries before the rise of Nightmare Moon, the dragon Crom was sealed away, saving the world from utter destruction. Now somepony seeks to release him back into the world. Can the Elements of Harmony stop these mysterious ponies? Or will the whole world burn in his fury?
[This story isn't dead. I just found myself rather unable to work on it and forgot it's existence. Having found it again, I intend to redo some earlier chapters I found a bit lacking and then start on new content.]
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A very neat concept. Something akin to what you might see on the show (minus the brutal and almost lethal scuffle within the library), reminiscent of classic adventure stories. You've set it up very nicely so far.
Though, you could use a bit of formatting. You can easily break those paragraphs up into smaller ones, and commas here and there do wonders. I'd suggest looking over this chapter and future ones for things like that. Or, maybe, find a proofreader.
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986422 Thanks. I'll look into both commas and a proofreader.