The beginning of concord

Discord is being of chaos, that's ever changing but what about the other half. What about concord, well you are about to find out.

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DAMN HAMSTER

DAMN HAMSTER #1 · Feb 18th, 2018 · · ·

Obvious trollfic is obvious. 2/8

Jep_Pearl

Jep_Pearl #2 · Feb 18th, 2018 · · ·

8741842
Oh how so?

DAMN HAMSTER

DAMN HAMSTER #3 · Feb 18th, 2018 · 1 · ·

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Awful English, bad plot, bad dialogue, and ugly tag salad. Any one of these usually prove Sturgeon's Law, but all of them together really show what this is. Trollfic. A poorly put together trollfic, but trollfic nevertheless.

Jep_Pearl

Jep_Pearl #4 · Feb 18th, 2018 · · ·

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Yea I know it's awful. I'm looking for a proofreader and a editor at the moment. Hopefully it will be better soon and I just wanted to see how the first chapter will do. Now I know what wrong with it, so I can change it and what is sturgeon's law.

DAMN HAMSTER

DAMN HAMSTER #5 · Feb 18th, 2018 · · ·

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Law that states 95% of posted fanfiction will be garbage due to poor plot/dialogue/characterisation/editing with the remaining 5% being the proverbial "gold nugget in shit".

Jep_Pearl

Jep_Pearl #6 · Feb 18th, 2018 · · ·

8742053
I see.

TheDiscordLover1200

TheDiscordLover1200 #7 · Feb 18th, 2018 · · ·

I like this, this is a wonderful. I don't know why anyone would not like this. I, for a fact can't write at all, but despite some of the English errors,( Most having to do with the word anger) This story has a very interesting plot. Keep up the good work, and take as long as you need to find a editor, or make a new chapter.