This will be interesting.

When a female states that 'she thinks we should see other people' or that 'they need a break from each other', that really means she's already been fucking at least 1 other person for a minimum of 6 months if not the entire time you've been together.

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That was my thought as well. Mainly due to the line

'She wasn’t even looking at him, something to the left must have been very interesting, couldn’t find what though.'

That line seemed to strongly suggest she was looking at another guy whom she was possibly already seeing behind his back.

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Especially if the entire time you've been together is 6 months.

Or less.

Spike. You can do better. That ... 'mare' was more then likely sleeping around.

Three words for that one:

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You are my new favorite. For you I will add one thing to the story. NAME IT!

Can't be about Spike's ex though.

Oh, thank God the ex isn't Rarity.

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Yup. OC's make for a better hating material.

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That is why I didn't name her.

So Spike was being selfish by treating her like a queen?....and then she has the nerve to insult the mares who could be considered as his family?.....that mare is lucky she didn't get killed on the spot, you cant piss off a dragon with out getting more the a few burns

what a bitch! anyone would be lucky to have spike as A BF

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Well duh, did you even listen to her?

She was taken aback but stood her ground. “Any self-respecting colt wouldn’t act like you! They’d take what they want!”

Aka, a self-respecting colt, in her eyes, would just jump her and start fucking her. That's what she wants to happen. She doesn't care of the colt is or isn't her boyfriend. So yes, she's probably been fucked by many colts, and even teasing them to fuck her. She just got tired of Spike not doing that cause spike isn't a rapist.

He did what he had to did.

Ladies and gentlemen, this right here is perfect use of an OC, perfect hating material and easily believable since youre not comparing then to other peoples portrayals of background ponies. Good job dude really enjoyed this chapter.

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Yeaaaah I was hoping I'd not have to be the one who said that.

Terrific, another one of those ball-less Spike stories.

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I'm sorry you feel that way

Spike, you're better off without that mare if she's gonna insult the Mane 6 like that

Spike did right to leave her. She had no right to insult the Mane 6 like that. I'm really glad I'm following this story.

At first I felt it was spike who needed to listen more, because she said, "why don't you try to understand me?", as if he was just listening to her wants, and not thinking to learn her interests. BUT SILLY ME! SHE WAS WORSE THAN DIRT!!! Calling the mane 6 whores... that includes fluttershy, And no one calls fluttershy a whore.

Just found this and holy hoof... insinuating that Spike isn’t a self-respecting guy because he doesn’t “simply take what he wants”, calls Twilight and the other girls whores when she gives off every indication she’s the last mare who should be accusing others of that...

Seriously, Spike did right in dumping that... dumping her. He deserves so much better.

I think my problem is just that you made rarity out to be the bad guy, when really, in situations like this, everyone's the bad guy in some fashion. You're writing this as though a girl dumped you for the reasons presented in this chapter. I think leaving out rarity calling everyone else a whore and re-wording the reasons she doesn't want spike anymore probably would've made this first chapter actually a bit more thought provoking, because calling the rest whores put rarity down from a relatable antagonist to an unlikable... well, whore.

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I’m so confused by your comment. Where in this entire chapter was Rarity mentioned? Spike’s ex isn’t Rarity

“That’s not-! You’re just so ‘sweet’ and ‘kind’, you didn’t care about if I was happy. You just wanted to feed your ego.”

Bitch you serious? *sigh* you just can't do anything right for some people

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I know it's a little late but don't take that guy's comment to heart. He goes around bad mouthing nearly every story he reads. I've only ever seen good comments from him about hate filled stories.

I feel there is a lot to unpack here. I can understand this being an impetus to move the story forward but I feel we need to dissect what happens here. Does this, so far, unnamed mare feel threatened or neglected by Spike for the time he spends with the girls? Maybe it was a toxic relationship in where she had trust issues and Spike, while giving her everything she wanted when he could, couldn’t give her the security that she was more... More then the others. Maybe it was just poor communication on the mares part. It’s not so easy to speak of the problems in a relationship when you yourself do not know what you want.

Because these analyses and intrigue remain in my mind I would say this is a very good start. I think it was a little rushed at the end but I believe that bias on my part. You truly are spoiled when you get used to 20K chapters.

haha, that ex reputation is ruined for this publicity stunt.

No joke. That’s exactly the same bullshit my ex wife gave me when she wanted a divorce.

“THERE’S A SUCH A THING AS BEING SUFFOCATING!!! BUT I GUESS YOU’VE GOTTEN USED TO IT WITH ALL THOSE WHORES!!!!!”

You dare insult the Mane 6 and Best Pony. May Discord and Celestia have mercy on your souls.

Spike had every right to be mad at that horrid beast that is his ex, I mean those ponies are very special to him, for her to just insult them is just awful.

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Ah yes OCs make much better hate sinks well them or King Sombra but either way I´ll have to remember that when I make a plot for a Sparlight story, thank you for that.

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“Is it my fault?”

No, plain and simple. This my friends is what I call a guilt-trip.

“THERE’S A SUCH A THING AS BEING SUFFOCATING!!! BUT I GUESS YOU’VE GOTTEN USED TO IT WITH ALL THOSE WHORES!!!!!”

Oh you little shit
Do not bring them into this

“Is it my fault?”

No my boy it ain’t your fault.
It’s your exes fault for this but don’t worry my boy you have people around you who care about you
And I hope to Luna she gets what’s coming to her

Spike can do better than her and she should be expecting a lot of nightmares in the near future

So! Just found this to start reading it, gonna take a while, but I know that I never mind a comment even on older stuff, soooo...

Yeah, an OC makes a great hatesink. But I do think it's important to recognize that this relationship has all the signs of being mutually toxic. Leaving aside her comments for a moment, I draw attention to one specific exchange:

“You’re right. I won’t hit you, I can’t hit you. I won’t fall to that level.” He pulled his fist from the table and he looked at her. “But I refuse to sit here and let you insult the most important ponies in my life.”

“I wonder why that is.”

“Do you really think they’re more important than the time I spent with you!?”

Spike, sweetie, honey... listen to what you just said there.

"Don't insult the most important ponies in my life." Two seconds later: "Do you really think they're more important to me than you?"

Well, Spike, you literally just called them the most important ponies in your life, so yes, I imagine she does.

Now, yes, Greenvy here was an ass. She shouldn't have attacked them. She should try to communicate her actual desires, and to understand them herself. But we also don't know for sure that she hasn't, at least to some level. Just not clearly enough, or at least not clearly enough for Spike to see how important it is.

To Spike, he expresses his love through doing things for his loved ones. She seems to think of love as something expressed through things you do to them.

There's overlap, of course. But it's obvious that they are both aware of the disconnect, on some level, and that they both resent it.

After hearing this, Spike quickly leaps to pointing out everything he does for her, everything he gets for her - his first reaction is to use that as leverage. which kind of lends some credence to the idea that he's feeding his own ego through his martyrdom. She knows that's the level he expresses love on, but it doesn't really do as much for her as if he would take her by the reins and take charge. Stop if she tells him to, sure, but I hear a pony who is very tired of having to always say what she wants - and one who recognizes that Spike's love language makes it very clear that she isn't center of his interests. G ah, he doesn't s everything she asks. But henalso does that for the M6, and she resents that hard.

Not entirely without justification though.

So yeah. She's an ass, but Spike's a little bit of an idiot too. But he'll be happier by the end, I'm sure.

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Fully prepared to admit that all probably is mostly me, It'll make more sense later. Hope you stick around to finish it!