Spike's recent breakup left him very depressed, in an effort to help him back on his feet the girls take him out on a 3 week vacation. They all get a little more then they expected.
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Good Celestia!!! That is good!!
Can't wait for the next chapter!
OMG YES YES YES!!!!!! I messed up and didn't comment on the last chapter since I was reading it on my cell at work and ended up just forgetting to later on. But you did JUST what I was hoping and DIDN'T rush it. I was so worried it might rush and we really wouldn't get to see the relationships build and evolve from what they were to what they will become. But you didn't do that. It feels like a super solid ground work so I can for sure believe that Spike and Pinkie could have a real intimate and true relationship after this and I love it. I have so much more faith in the series now and I can't wait to see what will happen next. I hope since Pinkie has the biggest bust of all the girls one of them have a AMAZING and plump ass to the point it could put Spike in a trance whenever he looks at it in motion lol.
Nice poor spike is going to die of a hear attack if the girls have their way.
Im lovin your stories but I need more chapters
Boobies!
Seriously though, the next stallion asshole is gonna stick through a tree if he f**ks with that drake..........
God damn, things got hot & heavy after that contest and if Spike & Pinkie didn't interrupted, they could been the nasty!
This was a GLORIOUS job on this chapter, P.B. I can't wait for more!
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like this dreager1.files.wordpress.com/2015/01/beelzebub-356279.jpg
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^ what they said!
You got to wonder what Pinkie's sisters think about this?
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Definitely something like that
Awesome Chapter! I loved it so much. It's nice to see Spike getting his spirits up.
Nice 😎
Huzzah!
Wow, this was all pretty intense. I can really understand the conflict at the beginning. It's hard to find a balance of being caring and assertive with the ones you love, especially when you don't know what they prefer. Really enjoyed this story and I look forward to reading more in the future.
Also will there be more stuff with Pinkie, or will the chapters just involve minor sex acts between the characters?
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You shall see
A suggestion:
Try to keep descriptions of actions and dialogue paired with their proper characters together. It gets a bit confusing for the reader, having to analyse every pair or trio of paragraphs to determine who the speaker is, if it's not obvious or, in this case, a bit misleading (the first character reference following the first line of dialogue is to Spike).
I found a few instances like this throughout; a quote attributed to Spike but where the next narrative subject is the pony he's with, or one of the mares' lines and the next narrative subject is Spike. Keeping tabs on avoiding little things like that will help the flow of your writing immensely!
So all Spike needed was some sexual healing 😋