Spike's recent breakup left him very depressed, in an effort to help him back on his feet the girls take him out on a 3 week vacation. They all get a little more then they expected.
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This is gut ja i approv.
Nnniiice
Da wae is strong.
I. . . . Err. . . . . Umm. . . . I. . . . . I think I need . . . . Some. . . . Alone time, now. . . . .
This was interesting to say the least. I think this might be the closest we will get to my idea that not all the mares have to love Spike. That some just want him as a friend and want to help their friend. But I don't think that is where this story is headed and that is fine it just would have felt a bit more real that not EVERY girl would be in love with the same guy.
But this chapter did add a new thing into the mix, Spike's sperm. It has the effect of wanting to make a female wanting to breed and I get the feeling Spike, who fight his dragon instinct so often, is super repressed as well that if the right mare came along he would go at it with the full intent of impregnating her. And that mare I feel is Shy. I think she will be the first seeing how out of all the girls she has given off the feeling of caring about him the most. I could honestly see her sneaking into his room in the middle of the night and the two of them being intimate the whole night. I think once she is under the influence of his sperm we will see the unfiltered and open Shy who is alot kinkier than we know. And I think the biggest thing is she would WANT to be knocked up and made a mother and she will let that be known. Which any male when they hear something like that triggers some primal part in their brain to go like 5 times more intense than before and for Spike I get the feeling it would be 100 times and he would want to give her her wish and than some. Long story I think Shy wouldn't be leaving that vacation without some Dragonpony Babies now growing in her lol.
Man this was great. One thing though, it never said how spike made Rainbow cum. Did he just use his tongue, or did he actually fuck her? Also, how did she cum twice at once? That doesn't seem physically possible.
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You're assuming that Dragons and Ponies can breed in this universe, I don't think that has been established yet.
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A mistake on my part, fingering, and it's quite possible, it's more like it happens and then happens again right after
I gotta say, if Starlight was your ‘low’ point, this was definitely the ‘highest’ point so far, bravo!
8808190 Yeah, I figured that, was just a strange way of wording it, cumming twice at once just sounds like two at the same time. As Spike has two penises he might actually be able to do that though. Yes I know one is inactive or whatever, but he still feels pleasure through it.
All things considered, I'm looking forward to Spike's time with Rarity, considering that she and Flutters are besties, they probably share all sorts of things--including their type of mate.
Also, if it gets to the point where Spike gets to cash in his V-card, I want Fluttershy to be the mare that deflowers Spike. I can tell that there is so much affection with all of the mare, but the thing with Fluttershy and Spike just seem to be on a entirely different level from the others. Spike may have a harem, but there is only a no. 1, and I believe that is the emboliment of Kindness. Plus, it would really be a turning-the-page moment for Spike--where he finally put the experience of his ex behind him and move on.
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Spike's not a virgin. I'm touching this next chapter
finally D: god damn i was waiting for this for soooo long, almost thinking it was dead ... but im happy to see its not. Great work, its sad that its a little short but great non the less
Daaammmmnnnnn!!! From skinny-dipping to oral sex to almost doing the whole 9-yards right there by the lake, Rainbow just jumped ahead & took the lead!
I'm of the sort that believes that there's a reason for things, just like this line. Foreshadowing perhaps? You don't just write that line out of context. Well...unless you purposely made it knowing that users like me are gonna over-analyze something that is just what it is...
An aphrodisiac dragon semen? That'll help out Heat Season.
Use use fear way too much in one paragraph honestly.
She rung her head- Hung
“See, when you were out the Pinkie,- with Pinkie
a little more embraced- Embarased
put his hand on the dragon - her hand
Gotta love Dash straightforward albeit a bit awkward, lol. She has that very real want to avoid change like the plague and Spike isn't moping around finally! It was actually pretty nice to see someone else worrying their ass off for a change. By far the chapter with the most sexual content; I actually think that it works out pretty well though. Each other girl's date emboldens the next/rest and Spike has not only regained his old self but his starting to develop further, gaining more confidence and figuring out what it is that he really wants. Those two things advance with the amount of sexual content, and it works to progress and develop the story perfectly.
I think Rainbow was very in-character here, and I liked the emphasis on how each of Spike's relationships with the girls is different, but they still love him in their own way.
On another note though, I don't think that Fluttershy's statement about Spike loving her the most is correct, especially in light of the previous comment. Each of the girls loves him differently, and though Fluttershy's relationship may be more of a "traditional romance", I don't think that means that Spike will love her more than the other girls. That implies that Spike's love is finite and the bulk will go to Fluttershy. I think his love for them is infinite and equal, but unique to each girl.
Heh, I did kinda want to see Twilight's reaction to hearing that Fluttershy has had a cruch on Spike for so long. I wonder how Rarity found out? Did she just guess, or did Fluttershy confess at a spa date? Maybe Fluttershy suggested at it when Spike first had a crush on Rarity?
Something I appreciate: Even though you don't always comment on the edits, you always make them. Always better than those who comment on them, and never make them ;)
I run into the latter, a lot.
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She's teasing them, feeling confident after what happened
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If you guys say it there, i check and fix it. Besides i love you guys. Im always overjoyed when i see new comments
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I'm not sure about that. If you really look at...this, you'll see that it runs on the same formula as Twilight (the shitty franchise) except designed to appeal to hormonal young boys instead of hormonal young girls. Not quite the same plot or dynamics, but the same "hooks" to snag the lowest common denominator.
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Or.
I wrote this cause its fun.
To each, their own and opinions are thine own. But 'lowest common denominator'? I'd rather not group people who read fanfictions like that.
Or maybe you don't even mean my story at all and I'm chatting out my arse. Either way no need to conflicts.
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That is a good attitude to have, and refreshing since I ran into the other example just between my last comment and this one. An excuse for their mistakes and a complete lack of interest in fixing them. Authors who wish to improve will always go further. And knowing/being able to tell the difference between trolls and those actually wishing to help is also pretty massive. Looking forward to the next chapter
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Not "people who read fanfiction", but people who live through fanfiction. There's the obvious ones, where the "OC"s share the author's waifu, linguistic tendencies/patterns, hobbies, or power fantasies. Then there's the more subtle ones who are into stuff like...well, you wouldn't know it was Spike if it wasn't for his name. You know, the schlockfests where he screws every waifu, turns into a melodramatic mess every character suddenly falls over themselves to prop up, turns into an edgy Blueblood/Sombra/Tirek torching Punisher, berates Twilight for making him do chores , etc.
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Not to say that you are wrong, but I took the point of you because where you comment originated. I understand wanting to get your point across, but here is probably not the best place. But I'm not gonna judge you at all. Like I said, you have a point, and I am happy you're not coming off as antagonistic at all.
Smart. But a point of my own. I think to indulge in that little bit that likes the idea of the sort of situations is fine.
No rush, I"m loving the stuff you are writing! Really top notch! I'm completely okay with waiting as long as I get to read more.
I do like it. You are writing because you enjoy it. And that is something many should strive for. There are certain small things that need to be looked over like grammar, but that's just fine. And I hope you continue soon, but continue in your own time. We shall wait.
please update.
And then season 8 happened
“No problem, Dash. You’re like one of the guys but with tits.” this is too true made me laugh hard